Allison

also @rae Tenz is awesome, terrifying as he seems….

lol

@everyone ok! I’ll introduce the character tomorrow cause I don’t think I have time today…..sorry!!

@ellette-giselle bruhhhhh that’s so true lol

also that’s so sad how Sef’s dad just left. But I can’t say I haven’t done the same. Something similar happened to the protagonist and her twin brother in my current WIP…..

@savannah_grace2009

Snake’s teeth. (don’t mind that it’s just my personal expression of surprise)

If you don’t mind me asking, are you over 16?? Because man, that chapter with what happened to Sef’s mom is a DARK thing for a young teenager to be writing about.

I hope I’m correct in assuming that the book will be 16+ as well because…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?

Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.

The cover illustration is beautiful!

On the back,…[Read more]

*considers what characters I should have drawn next…*

@ellette-giselle

I’ll try my best to read through your WIP, but I can’t make any promises since I’m also helping two other people with their stories. (:

@ellette-giselle

That is so cool!!

@ellette-giselle

It sounds really cool! Are you looking for format critiques, or is it too late for that?

@theducktator

I look at it briefly in the beginning and sometimes go back to look at it. It honestly just depends. Like, I love the maps in the Wingfeather Saga, but in some other books, I don’t enjoy looking at the maps as much, lol.

@ellette-giselle

It looks so good!! Did you design it yourself?

@linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle

Congratulations on the win!

It was an amazing rendition of him!! Great job!!

Thanks guys! 😄😄

@ellette-giselle I might! Is that ok?

@theducktator

I use them for occasional reference, but not all the time. If I’m confused about locations I will check the map, though, and I do often find it helpful, even if you just glance at it to get a general idea of where things are.

@ellette-giselle

Hey, I’m up for anything…… as long as it’s not an abortion. If she aborts the baby in any way there will be problems because there is NO excuse EVER for that.

So, besides that, go ahead and do anything you like! ;D

Oh I didn’t even THINK of that…so don’t worry!!!!!!

I promise there will be no abortions…

I agree there i…[Read more]

@jonas @ellette-giselle

Chapter 8

Monster

What am I doing?

Frustration built up in Lilitu’s chest until he wanted to scream.

But he couldn’t scream….or else Adar would find him.

Cass isn’t going to come bail you out this time, he pressed his lips together in a thin line. You have to figure it out yourself.

He tried to find a comfort…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ummmmmm

There’s more sad where that came from

heh…heh…

@jonas

Okay, I’ll have Cassian say something XD it will probably trigger Lilitu’s temper though lol

Yeah…it is…

Don’t worry you guys, I’m not just being dark to be dark, there is a purpose behind it!!!! Just wait haha

@savannah_grace2009

Critique for chapter 7:

Really strong chapter! It really shows Lilitu’s struggles, which is something I don’t really remember from previous drafts. Like everyone else is saying, I like how you’re making Cassian a bigger character this time.

My only question would be, how did Lilitu survive? It seems like the Aquinos were…[Read more]

@theducktator

I like to get to know it before starting the book, then I occasionally reference it during reading, but don’t have to.