Allison

Praying. 🙏

@the-ducktator That’s okay! I’m glad it wasn’t terrible. Sorry you got a cold, though.

@loopylin

The plan right now is basically: get everyone to the ship. So, I wouldn’t think it would be a problem. Worst case scenario, you would be responsible for getting your characters there without an NPC to help.

@rae @esther-c

I really miss this RP…is it still going??? And is there any way that I can bring Sef and Liv back…? 👀👀👀

@trailblazer

That is so cool!!!! That sounds amazing!!!!!

@loopylin

Thank you so much <333

Yesssss! I ate too much food lol

@jonas

Oh okay!

That’s not the reason anymore I guess 😂 I actually forgot I said that…a lot has changed lol

That makes sense though, I understand what you’re saying!

@savannah_grace2009

Before you said that the master wanted to make Jaden his second in command to sweeten the deal. I’m saying that if that’s still the reason, I feel like you should portray Kaden as more hesitant initially, because as it is, it doesn’t really feel like he needed that incentive.

Oh, and as for why I changed the ending instead of them abandoning Lilitu…

There are a couple reasons why I did that. Maybe they’re not good reasons lol but I’m going to leave it, at least for now so I can play with it. I think it will make the story make a little bit more sense  in the future so I’m just going to leave it for now.

@hybridlore

Thank youuu!

@highscribe

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

Thank you so much!

I corrected the things you suggested and you’re right, I think it will flow a lot better! Thank you so much, you have been very helpful! <3

@jonas

I think I asked before why he insisted on this, and you said that it was to sweeten the deal for Kaden. Personally, I feel like you should show Kaden as having more hesitation if this is going to work. To me, it seems like they have already made up their minds to become Pythonos. Sure, they’re scared, but to me, it still doesn’t convey a s…

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@jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Oh my goodness you guys are so good!!!!

I actually have noticed a couple of the things you’ve said before but for some reason I forgot to change them… *facepalm* I’ll go fix them now before I forget again lol!

@savannah_grace2009

Yay, another section! 😆 It looks good! I don’t have too much to say about, but I thought Jonas’s critiques were good.

@savannah_grace2009

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

The sensation made her want to scream, cry out in agony…

You don’t really need an ellipsis here. A period would work better.

“It’s those cursed Paynes,” Odessa muttered, anger flashing in her violet eyes.

This makes it sound like Kaden and Sevryn have tried to get…[Read more]

@loopylin

It is very cute ambience. I listened to it half-asleep in my bed. It also has Wirt&Greg lore, things like Greg sneaking in to help record.

@loopylin

All corrections noted, thank yooouuu. The second line does look weird; that should be the imperative form but the rest of the sentence still feels clunky. I will bring it up in class.

Just curious, what curriculum are you taking? Do you use the Familia Romana book?

I do! My co-op uses Henle, but I couldn’t learn anything from it. Really…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Well, I do have that handy google doc, so it isn’t terribly hard, especially considering that there are only three groups.

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @raxforge @hybridlore @rae @grcr @loopylin

Ellis — Elderstrand (Group 1)

The newcomer stared in astonishment as the armored creatures sagged and went still. “That was…incredible…” he stammered, still in shock. “No wonder–”

Just then, there was a prolonged wailing blast of a horn. The man stiffened. “We have…[Read more]

@power

YOU ASKED FOR IT.

*Tips hat* All power to you, my dear sir.