AbigailRose

@R-E-P ah yes, thank you. I’m not sure what was going on with the first one; it’s working now. *headscratch* Oh well.

I did enjoy this story— loved the humor, and I also really love the way you incorporated the Leviathan passage. That’s one of my favorite passages, btw. 😉

The biggest problem I noticed was quite a bit of telling, versus…[Read more]

1. Figure skating is one of my favorite sports. FALSE
2. I hate avocado and anything containing avocado. TRUE
3. I know how to wiggle my ears. TRUE

@the-bean
Good job! You guessed correctly. 🙂

@rolena-hatfield
Nope, #2 is true! I really do hate avocado.

@sarah-h
I actually do hate guacamole…I don’t know why. I wish I liked it!…[Read more]

1. Figure skating is one of my favorite sports. FALSE
2. I hate avocado and anything containing avocado. TRUE
3. I know how to wiggle my ears. TRUE

@the-bean
Good job! You guessed correctly. 🙂

@rolena-hatfield
Nope, #2 is true! I really do hate avocado.

@sarah-h
I actually do hate guacamole…I don’t know why. I wish I liked it! 😀

@aratrea
Oh, this sounds so cool! I really hope I can do this. I’ll have to check my schedule (and with my mom, the master schedule-planner), but I really hope I can come! Thanks for organizing this. 🙂

Yay!!!! @bluejay
Way to go! Awesome job! 😀

Yay @Bluejay! That’s awesome!

@Michael-Stanton I haven’t, but that’s just because I’m a technological dinosaur and don’t have an account on any of those social media sites myself. 😛 I’m going to be getting Facebook at least, as I understand it’s crucial to marketing, but right now I’m still happily hermiting with just this forum and my mom’s email. 😉

@Daeus that’s wonderful.

Well… the only input I could offer is, just explain how books are supposed to mirror reality because reality is truth, and in the long run ‘… the truth shall make you free.’ That probably goes without saying, so I don’t know how helpful that’ll be, but I hope it is, anyhow.

Oh dear oh dear oh dear, I’m going to be gone next Friday. *sniff* 😛

But you guys have fun for me, ‘kay? 😀

@Aratrea

Thanks @Aratrea. 🙂 That’s great.

@R-E-P for some reason the link does not seem to be working now…

@daeus I know I wasn’t tagged, but this very same thing happened to me a couple years ago. My sister and friend were just fine with the scene, but my mom left the room being disturbed. I was torn, cause like you I know I hadn’t done anything wrong, but had no intentions to upset my mom.
For me the best thing was to talk with my mom later asking…[Read more]

@Daeus yes. Once you get through this (and you will, make no mistake) your relationship will be much stronger and built on better understanding.

Still praying.

@Daeus yes. I’m praying.

I think the thing with bits like that is that it can come as a real shock to people who haven’t thought through the necessity of darkness in literature. They may not disagree once they think through it, but (especially for moms) the shock of hearing it without preparation can throw them into turmoil pretty harshly.

@daeus Awesomesauce! Thanks for the great critique. What you mentioned about “the round about way” is a downfall in my writing and life. Mom says I flower everything up when it can just be stated plain and simple.
All the other suggestions were very helpful thank you. I’ll be using those when I go back through and make edits.

@ingridrd Thank…[Read more]

@Sarah-H yes, I loved that one! So heartwrenching… which probably explains why I loved it. 😛

Let’s see… I also really like Master and Commander, Horatio Hornblower, Little Dorrit, and Pirates of the Caribbean 1. I like the other Pirates movies as well, but none so well as the first.

@Rolena-Hatfield
Oh. My. Word. I LOVE THIS! Like everyone else has been saying, I want MORE! This is amazing. And…everyone else has already given all the feedback I would have given. 😉 Seriously, though, I love this. Keep writing for the Kingdom! 🙂

@Daeus I got 1,157… not sure what’s going on… 😛