AveryTheExplodey

@jonas

Ok, that makes more sense. I was gonna ask, what frame of reference does it stop in motion, so the infinite inertia idea does kinda help. I’ll still have to ponder on how that works on the temporal aspect though.

@jonas

Interesting! I love the high contrast magic systems. Giving me Star Wars vibes actually with the light side and dark side users, and grey Jedi. Question on the positive temporal pulse. What does it mean for the object to be frozen in time, and therefore unmovable?

@esther-c

Livia

She thought for a moment. “I think I remember that…is that why Chase left?”

“Yeah,” Fynn looked down at the floor.

“Well,” Liv began, “I’m not sure how to say this.”

“Oh,” Fynn said, the color draining from his face. “It’s that bad?”

Liv laughed. “No, I just don’t know how to say it…Okay, so if I know Callista, she’s…[Read more]

@esther-c

In the first chapter, the biggest thing I noticed was a lot of telling/info-dumping. It’s not wrong to give some background in the first chapter, but the key word is “some.” I felt like there was a lot of information about her father and how he had disappeared a while ago. I absolutely love how you described Sef missing him, but I do th…

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@esther-c

Livia

“It depends…” Liv pursed her lips. “Like, it depends on what mood we’re in to begin with, and it also depends on what exactly the person says. Like, do you have an example?” She laughed a little at the strangeness of their conversation.

@loopylin

Lol XD

@keilah-h @esther-c @loopylin @freedomwriter76 @acancello @whalekeeper

GUYS WE SHOULD TOTALLY BRING THIS BACK!!!

File-476 of Catalogue 221: Anomaly-6097

Name: [The Painter]

Origin: unknown

Direct sightings: none

Signature sightings: 9

Description: The Painter has never been seen directly, but signs of its work have been documented. Walls have been found painted unevenly in colors described by witnesses as “…the colors of everything…” and “…an…[Read more]

@acancello

Oh my goodness! I can’t believe I forgot your tag, haha! This is funny XD

@acancello

Oh my goodness! I can’t believe I forgot your tag, haha! This is funny XD

@acancello

Yes, exactly. You cant make 100% of the people happy 100% of the time. The moon was launched around 20 years before the book takes place so the riots and mobs of angry protesters have calmed down. Also, before electricity prices were skyrocketing due to the amount they were using with all of the new technology (Most everything switched…

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@allison @grcr @thearcaneaxiom

Thanks guys!!! (:

@jonas

I’m probably not going to be the best at giving advice on color and character. Color I feel is arbitrary unless there’s something special about it, like the combination of the two metrics in some way. Character we’ve discussed in the past in many ways. I’m not really sure what advice I could give that you don’t already know.

As for the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I haven’t read it yet, but I’ll probably get to it sometime today!

@savannah_grace2009

Let’s gooooo!!!!! Congratulations!!!

@thearcaneaxiom

Yes! I’m so happy! It FINALLY got published!!

@savannah_grace2009

Hey Sara, is that your story that KP just posted?

@acancello

Well, my main idea was to have it look as ‘natural’ as possible so that the citizens would be more open to the idea and allow it to happen while not realize the dangers that it has the potential of causing.

I feel like they would need to do a little more convincing to make the populace complacent. There will always be resistance, and…[Read more]