AveryTheExplodey

@ellette-giselle

I like that!!!!!!

YES I WOULD LOVE TO SEE THE COVER

@ellette-giselle

I would love to! I don’t know if I’ll have much time but I’ll try!

@jonas

Yeah, you could do them as separate chapters, and that should work. But also, be careful about waiting too long before launching into the bulk of the story. I don’t believe we’ve even reached the inciting incident yet, and you don’t want the reader to be thinking “let’s just get on with it!” You probably still have a little bit of wiggle r…

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@ellette-giselle

Ok, that was just a cringe for me me because of the way our country is trying to use that to justify some really horrid stuff. What if the line was,

“No, not like me,” Cass laughed. “Be like the Great One, Birdie.”

After all, Christ is our example.

Good point. I wasn’t trying to copy the people who are like “be yourself” or “fol…[Read more]

@jonas

Okay! I was just playing around with the idea of jumping ahead as quickly as possible yet keeping a few similarities. So should I made each it’s own chapter after adding more to it?

I could use them as flashbacks!

But idk, I also like them in my book…I have to think about that.

@grcr (CASSIAN SCENE ALERT) @ellette-giselle @esther-c @rae @jonas @whalekeeper @highscribeofatherium

This scene isn’t really edited either…

But let me know if it makes sense AT ALL

Chapter 5

Birdie

“I love birds,” Sef sang as she spread her arms wide, mimicking the birds soaring overhead, silhouetted against the bright blue sky.

She lov…[Read more]

@anyone

Dropping the fourth chapter!! <3 my favorite I’ve ever written

It’s not edited so excuse any grammar/stupid mistakes XDXD

Chapter Four

A Wedding

“Where are we going, Mani?” Sef asked for the umpteenth time since they’d left the house.

“Wait and see,” Neveah smiled down at her. Sef pouted, but kept skipping, jumping over even the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I get up at around six! (so seven your time) Maybe if I got up at 5:30, I could read my Bible and then still have time to write before work!

Of course that would also mean going to bed at a decent hour…like at 9 PM?!?!? That’s so early but I need to start going to bed earlier…so you could be my bedtime accountability partner XD XD

@ellette-giselle

So, what is your opinion on the end? should I leave it unknown like it is?

I think you should show Julius accepting Jesus, and end it at that. Because I really want to know if he chose right or not! But if you like it more the way you have it then keep it!

Thank you so much for the advice you gave. I hope I was able to i…

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@ellette-giselle

Ohhh so you’re an hour ahead!!!

yeahh I’m 100% A LATE NIGHT PERSON…I once stayed up until almost 11 trying to write an outline XD

What time do you get up to write?

@ellette-giselle

That’s funny XD

I can hardly ever write in the morning…

Would right after lunch work for you most days? Also, what time zone are you in? I’m in mountain time. (It’s almost 12:30 right now) That’s when I’m on break for work. (I live on a farm and work for my dad)

@ellette-giselle

Okay!!! Do you ever write in the evening? That’s when I do most of my writing XD

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, and then if I’m available we can do it together!

@ellette-giselle

If you go back to the first page, it explains everything! but basically it’s where you pick a time and write until that time as fast as you can. It keeps you accountable, focused, and you can make a lot of progress that way!

@ellette-giselle

Hey, I know you’re available to write a lot, would you want to do this together???

@esther-c

You’re good!!!  (: I’ve been busy too!

Livia

It helped her to know that someone cared, that she wasn’t alone…she held tight to Lukas’s hands as if it was the only stable thing in her life…and it might as well have been.

“How do you feel now?” Lukas asked her.

Liv hated to disappoint him, but she simply didn’t have the strong…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Huh…interesting!

@ellette-giselle

well, I can say personally that I get annoyed with books that have a complex plot and also make you figure out what the world is and whats going on. I would really prefer to know more. It could be informative where you just tell the reader, or it could be something like one of the kids asking a question and an adult explaining…

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@whalekeeper

Alriiight, Chapter 1. Please tell me if you get overwhelmed with all the feedback, because if that happens, I will gladly pause.

I was overwhelmed a bit, but you don’t have to pause, I just needed a day to process everything haha!

Sooo I get this weird feeling about Nico. I’m not entirely convinced he doesn’t love them, nor do I kno…

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