AveryTheExplodey

@keilah-h

If you don’t mind me asking, are you over 16??

Ummmmmm

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I’m 14 and don’t turn 15 until September

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I hope I’m correct in assuming that the book will be 16+ as well because oof……that may be the darkest thing I’ve ever seen on this site……

I don’t think I’m going to have it be 16+, more like 14+ since that’s how ol…[Read more]

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@ellette-giselle

So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?

Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.

The cover illustration is beautiful!

On the back,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It sounds really cool! Are you looking for format critiques, or is it too late for that?

@ellette-giselle

Hey, I’m up for anything…… as long as it’s not an abortion. If she aborts the baby in any way there will be problems because there is NO excuse EVER for that.

So, besides that, go ahead and do anything you like! ;D

Oh I didn’t even THINK of that…so don’t worry!!!!!!

I promise there will be no abortions…

I agree there i…[Read more]

@jonas @ellette-giselle

Chapter 8

Monster

What am I doing?

Frustration built up in Lilitu’s chest until he wanted to scream.

But he couldn’t scream….or else Adar would find him.

Cass isn’t going to come bail you out this time, he pressed his lips together in a thin line. You have to figure it out yourself.

He tried to find a comfort…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ummmmmm

There’s more sad where that came from

heh…heh…

@jonas

Okay, I’ll have Cassian say something XD it will probably trigger Lilitu’s temper though lol

Yeah…it is…

Don’t worry you guys, I’m not just being dark to be dark, there is a purpose behind it!!!! Just wait haha

@theducktator

I like to get to know it before starting the book, then I occasionally reference it during reading, but don’t have to.

@theducktator
I skim it in the beginning and then normally don’t go back to it…  Maybe once or twice, but not every time a place is mentioned. 😅

@theducktator

I look at maps whenever a place is mentioned XD

And because maps are just cool!!! lol

@ellette-giselle @anyone-else

Next chapter…be warned…this one is a little *coughs* sad…and dark and it deals with a really sad reality in our world. So continue reading at your own risk.

Chapter 8

Sticks and Stones

Sef cowered before the large man, blinking back tears.

She wanted to scream with frustration. She had been late again!

She…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yeah, I was wondering if that was the case! Glad I was able to help!!! 😊

Yes! I love how easy it is to share chapters!

Yeah it took me FOREVER to figure out how to use it, but after over a year of using it I have never ever wanted to go back!

This is the language we came up with…kind of:

All the consonants you gave:

t l n m r k s p sh b f v z d j g w th

Vowels:

let’s just say it’s English vowels for now.

These are the “swears” we came up with:
Scist (Scisto)

Dissar (Dissaros)

And idk what else…XD

@thearcaneaxiom

hahaha

okay

let me go back real quick then…

@savannah_grace2009

Hold your horses now😅 We can do something like Tlavian if you want, it’s just the first thing that came to my head, but does it actually match the Andromedan language we worked out some time back? If not, we can either change the langauge, or change the word.

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay, Tlavian it is! XD why are you so good at this!?!?!

@ellette-giselle

I actually do show a scene of the kids working in the next chapter, and then a couple chapters after that…just wait XD

Okay, good ideas!

I just don’t know how to reveal it all…because those ideas sound so good but when I try to do stuff like that it feels either rushed or too slow 😭😭😭 I’ll figure it out somehow lol

And…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I guess some of both? Like what the Andromedans would call Him, as well as new names for what the humans could call Him?

I’m assuming we’re still just thinking about the Andromedans alone, but I mean phonetically in their tongue, vs translated titles. For example, a name for Christ in Andromedan could be Tlavian (I don’t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you sooo much, do you have any thoughts/ comments??? I’d love to hear them!

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay great!!!

I guess some of both? Like what the Andromedans would call Him, as well as new names for what the humans could call Him?