AveryTheExplodey

@whalekeeper

Omc thank you so much girl, that means a lot…you’re gonna make me cryyyy

Ahhh thank youuuu 😭😭💜💜💜💜💜

Your critique was EXACTLY what I was looking for, so thank you!!!

–Characters are very easy to picture, and not very easy to forget. XD So you’re good in that area.

YAYYYY!!! That’s one of the things I was worried about, and I’m s…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

oop, uhh, I will make a topic for it!!!!!!!!!

Sounds good😂

Nice, because I know other denominations just forgive to one another… 😬 that sounds worse.

And of course, we should reconcile ourselves with our fellow man, especially those we have wronged, but man cannot forgive sin, only God, and by extension those He’s given a…[Read more]

@keilah-h

yes, actually!!!!!

I think I have a couple more chapters since you last read it!!!

@keilah-h

aw yesss

@keilah-h

I feel like I always write the most when I post on KP or when I know people will read it…

It’s so cool to see writers supporting other writers <3

@whalekeeper

Heeyy Sara, I’m about a third through your story right now! What kind of critique do you want? Any specific concerns, stuff like that?

Ummmm

Let me think lol

I think I’m just worried about pacing, flow of the story, and if it’s at all interesting lol

And character development ideas would be helpful too!!

I also just want to know t…[Read more]

LILITU’S NICKNAME IS TULIPS???????

Yeah lol

you can thank one of the boys from my school for that one XDXD

The frog wedding is adorable.

I KNOWWWW

YOU KILLED NEVEAH?!?!?!

no comment….

@theducktator

 I just finished your prologue. It’s good, but you overuse italics.

NOOOOOO
IT IS IMPOSSIBLE TO USE ITALICS

😱😱😱😱

*sobs hysterically*

Oh my goodness, they kissed!!!!

yesssss

*coughs* um yeah…chapter three is kinda dark I guess 😂😂

@theducktator

*Steals your questions*

Please do, Most Esteemed Feathered One. Your abducktion of my questions is an honor.

I would say you can tell if someone is a true Christian by whether they believe the Bible, and how they treat others.

I think that’s a good answer, though what if someone says they believe the Bible, and treat those around…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Ah, hello intelligent being! And I would love to tell you all about my fantasy book I am writing!

Great! If you could point me to where you talk about it, that would be awesome:)

I feel I can be that way too…

Luckily we have the Atonement, so that we can progress and become perfected through Christ

Oh, that makes more sense, is i…

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@the_lost-journal

Hello! It is even more nice to meet you!!!! Also, let me introduce myself! I am The lost journal (something from my main WIP) Also know as my real name Kefa, or my split personality, which is the magic potato! (Don’t ask questions…) I work for the potato army, but have also made a truce with the avocado army!

Tis a pleasure, Pot…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Hi Freedom! I am intrigued. have you developed how these different arcs blend into the overall story? What’s the worldbuilding you’ve done like so far?

@freed_and_redeemed

AHHH GIRL I LOVE THIS

@the_lost-journal

This place looks cool, not sure if we’ve met, I haven’t been active lately, nice to meet you!

1. My denomination is The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-Day Saints

2. I grew up in my faith, and will always be growing up in it on a path of continual conversion

3. Formally speaking there are the four standard works which…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Nah, you’re just that predictable. No offense, if our roles were reversed and you came to me with a Bad Batch or Team Fortress fanfic idea, I’d react pretty much the exact same way.

Lol, fair enough

The original crossover was posited as occurring 1-2 generations after Korra’s time, I believe, and I think I’m gonna stick with that for my…

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@whalekeeper

Perfect reason to venture out of KP hibernation. 👌

👌

@keilah-h

AHAHAHA how did I know you were gonna do that?

Either you have a connection to supernatural powers, or I’m just very predictable

yeah just little things like that. Not too big of a deal to like not touch the fandom at all, but large enough that I can’t just ignore it. F…

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@trailblazer

Good ideas!!! I will probably use those in future scenes…thank you so much!!!

@keilah-h

-Me being chronically inactive cause I’m about to serve a mission

-Someone mentions Avatar

-Me, breaks through the ceiling falling before you

I am here

I’m iffy on the show itself. I don’t need another fixation. There are a couple issues I’d like to avoid with the mythology of it all.

Always fair, however, I will say that you are s…[Read more]

@theshadow

Yeppp!!!

@elishavet-pidyon

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s not a lie about Sef, but it would make the former lie hit home. Make her really crumble since the last thing keeping the lie f…

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