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DROP THAT TEAR, O LITTLE ONE

Drop that tear, O little one,
And let it fall upon a bed of snow
Upon which the souls of soldiers lay
When to war their bodies once did go.

Drop that tear, O little one,
Let it splash upon the smooth stone
Where down it curves, to make a grave
Which stands where many a brave man died alone.

Drop that tear, O little…[Read more]

I might have time tomorrow or after then. Where’s what you’ve written so far? I’ll help if I can.

Sounds pretty good. Maybe a bit.. short? I don’t know. But I think it’s better than the one before!
@daeus

Kay, perfect! Actually going to choir right now, so i wouldn’t have been able to read your response anyway. @xonos-darkgrate

Sure, I’ll check it out later when I have time. Today is REALLY busy for me.

Hey @xonos-darkgrate want to take a look? Don’t worry, there is *lots* of intrigue and other stuff like that. 😉

@daeus Yeah. What they said. 😉

Btw, I love the book. I’ve gotten maybe 6 chapters through? I don’t really keep track of chapters…

Oh yeah, ha… forgot about that. Thanks! @daeus

I have a question. You often see “limits
to words/letters. I saw that the maximum amount of 4,000 words for short stories. How can I tell if my story exceeds the limit or is too small? Is there some type of feature I can use? Other than that, I really have no idea what number of words I have. I use OneNote.

Hey guys, I’m working on something to submit and this is the start. Tell me what you think!

“Tell me,” the man said, “what have you to say in your defense?” The questioner looked down at a young man no older than his own son. The younger looked up, the coarse dirt of his cell moving with him. “In defense of what, Inquisitor?” His cold blue eyes…[Read more]

@jess-penrose

Well, the version of a synopsis I know is a maximum of 10 page summary of a book that describes the plot, characters, message, world and the writer’s thoughts. Soooo… I assume these are slightly different things in Australia. That’s all.

That’s my definition of a synposis too…I mean, that’s a good reason for writer’s to hate…[Read more]

I’m confused as well. And yes, @xonos-darkgrate Cinnar would love it here. Probably Julie Martin/Stanley too, what with the unicorns and such.

@raevynstar Oh…yeah….that would make a Labrador a problem. 😛

@daeus *dances* Yay! Destruction to telling!

@daeus
Well, big thoughts is mainly that you should take out the last paragraph, because although you’re trying to appeal with struggles like that, people might not want to think of themselves as weak or cowardly, if you know what I mean. Maybe they know that subconsciously, but who wants to admit that they are a coward? I mean, a Christian might…[Read more]

@jess-penrose XD Yeah, that’s my thoughts. 😀 You might have noticed I have very strong opinions on these things. 😛

@daeus, do you mind if I try rewording your synopsis a bit? I just want to see if I could possibly word it better. (sorry, I’m like that)

@rolena-hatfield I love your blog! Your Attic looks so nice!

@daeus
Hm… the setting itself sounds pretty original. I like that,
buuuut, it sounds just a BIT cheesy or something like that. I mean, who HASN’T heard of the guy who’s (cowardly, some type of life-problem, “weak”, etc.) who rises up to save his friends from some evil guy with “undefeatable” weapons.

The story isn’t bad, but I just wouldn’t…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy He forgot to tag me too. Can we take over the kingdom now? How bout now? Now?
@daeus Well…do you want my big thoughts or little thoughts?