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Merry Christmas to you all too!
I’m glad your beagle are doing alright, how many do you have? Are they outside dogs?
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Alive it is, then. I was wanting to see what y ‘all’s opinions were before I decided to keep Fabian alive. I have been thinking of extending the story into a novel, and I realized that one of the ways I had room for expansion was if I kept Fabian alive. Before his brain was grafted into the modified thrid body he was (is technically) a professor or something along those lines and he discovered information that was a threat to their government. Would having characters be chased down by the government be cliché?
And, yes, I really want Jade and Fabian to reconcile, but I don’t know how long that would take, or even if they know that each other is alive for a part of the story. Fabian is probably frustrated w/Jade and afraid, and Jade is probably ashamed and too proud to apologize.
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@godlyfantasy12 Merry Christmas Eve to you too!
@scoutfinch180 I can see how reconciliation would be difficult. Hmm… I would definitely let them assume one or the other is dead, allowing them both the time to reconcile with themselves before they have a big, happy family reunion. You know?Otherwise, nah. I don’t think it’d be too cliché. Depending on how you depict said government, I think it’d be great. Besides, your story is original enough already to allow a few clichés, capisce?
You have a merry Christmas!
So I got Sally, my first beagle about 2 or 3 years back. Then we got Jack her companion, and they had pups! We kept 2 pups and got rid of dad, and then later got rid of one of the pups.
(my parents and brothers have 2 dogs. One is one of Sally’s babies)
So now I have 2 fur babies who I adore!! My sally and her Daughter (who was probs the runt) Raven. They’re precious. Sally is the queen and Raven is my snugglebug!
They are outside/inside. They live in a large pen outside but usually get bathed and brought in once a week (unless on vacation or to busy, etc). It’s really awesome because I always wanted an inside dog, but with the way our days work and the hassle of a dog it’s hard, so this works great!
And my dream dog was a beagle so I got that! And she had puppies so another dream come true!
AND….
I would’ve always loved to have a dog who would sleep with me, and now I do, because Raven sleeps in my room with meh. In fact she’s curled up on my bed right now ready for bedtime.
So yea, I love them very much!! We had them in today for Christmas Eve and it was AWESOME!! They are so sweet!!
(btw, they’re Black and Tan beagles!! U should look them up! Beagles can come in all sorts of different colors)
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#ProtectSebThat’s so cool! I didn’t know that they could come in different colors besides the tan/black/white.
I have a wire-haired terrier mix (she’s my contact photo on here) named Scout and an old boxer-lab. they are inside dogs and shed profusely.
By the way, I added the D word (as in beaver-house) in one exclamation that Jade says, would that bother you all? i know that in some circles it is worse to say than in others.
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@gracie-j
Thanks for the compliment!
That makes sense. I was thinking that I could, after a while, have Jade and Fabian meet and be in the same area, but Fabian and Jade would still have a while before they reconciled.
And IF I was to make this into a novel, do you think I should open the story a little earlier than these events?
Also, I think that it would be realistic if Marian and Jade’s relationship didn’t go much farther than ex-girlfriend and ex-boyfriend who happen to be allies that don’t really get along too well. Marian is old enough to be more of an elder sister figure (I am pretty sure she’s close to fifty but doesn’t remember?). Anyway, I am pretty sure I don’t want Jade to be romantically involved with anyone. What do you think of this?
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@gracie-j I just wanted to let you know I finally finished Gone With the Wind.
I-I can’t think right now. I’ll sort my thoughts out tomorrow ahhh.
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
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@scoutfinch180 Well, I really don’t like to read cuss words at all, but that doesn’t bother everyone. (I recommend checking out everyone’s opinions in my post a week or so ago under “How Do Y’all Feel About…”
You’re welcome! Yeah…definitely give it time. Hmm…I probably wouldn’t go the romantic route with Jade. His story doesn’t seem to be in need of romance (can’t believe I just said that…LOL 😉 )
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BTW, I’ll be here off and on today is anyone else is around…
Hope everyone had a merry Christmas!
@jenwriter17 @godlyfantasy12@rochellaine @alia @e-k-seaver @whoever-else@gracie-j I thought it was super sad ahh. Every time I flipped the page it just got worse and worse…but it was written really well and I enjoyed it a lot.
Merry Christmas to you as well!
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
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@devastate-lasting Yeah…I cried at the end of the book and movie. I’m so glad you enjoyed it, though!
Now I’ll just have to tell @william-starkey that there is hope for humanity!
@gracie-j I’m here. What’s up? I got a new desk and printer for Christmas! So excited. We’re gonna get everything set up in my room next week.
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@godlyfantasy12 Awesome! I’m currently editing my wesbite…I’m giving myself an updated site for Christmas! 😉
Whatcha up to?
@gracie-j Lying on my bed. A part of me wants to pick up around my room but it’s such a wreck. I’d probably need to do it piece by piece so I don’t get overwhelmed lol
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Hey, so has anyone ever written a mystery? Or close to one? Or a murder lol. The first book of my series is a bit of a fantasy murder mystery, but I think it’d be better if it’s a closed room murder. So that means it seems no one else was with the victim except the suspect (who is actually innocent)
I think it would be better because otherwise it won’t be as believable for everyone to think the suspect guilty (because she’s well-loved by some and the victim is her Uncle who she adores)
So little bit of synopsis I guess-
Arabella and November end up in Cirque, a land filled with those whose sole desire is to bring entertainment (and perhaps cause a bit of trouble in the process. They are almost all a bit odd and menacing)
Things aren’t as happy and grand as Jocelyn, The Ringmaster’s niece, believes they are. A disaster struck years ago, which is full of mystery mystery that is about to be discovered.
When Jocelyn’s uncle is found stabbed, she appears in the room shortly after. This along with the fact that, with her uncle dead she’d become the ruler of Cirque, and the lack of witnesses, she’s proclaimed to be the killer, even tho she is innocent.
Arabella and November are the only ones who she can trust and they try their best to solve the mystery, but the problem is, the culprit isn’t any of their suspects. In fact….he’s right under their noses.
so what do y’all think of that little bit? (It’s not my actual synopsis lol) any suggestions on how to make this work and how to put clues around.
I want to make it where you don’t suspect the actual culprit, but it’s also not random ya know? I want it to be a plot twist but also not have the reader feel they’ve been cheated by just randomly throwing in the least suspected person and being cliche, so I need a way to weave in clues and backstory, but could use some tips. Any would be great! Also would just love ur feedback on if u like the plot!
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#ProtectSebI’ve tried to write mysteries, but alas, they are too predictable and trashy. 😆 However, I love to read them! I like your idea–it sounds great to me!! I also think that world of Cirque would also be really interesting to develop. (Btw, is November a girl or boy? Sometimes it’s hard to tell with names 😉) You’ve also set up the mystery to where it isn’t super cliche (imo). I’m intrigued!!! Please post updates!! 😃
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