To Visit a King

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    Elanor
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      So here’s one I’ve only started then got stumped on.

      What do y’all think?

       

      In a small shepherd’s village

      In a humble blessed cottage

      A carpenter’s tools grind

      As Joseph works to provide.

      A mother’s melody rings

      As Mary works and sings.

      I hear a toddler’s squeak

      As Jesus attempts  to  walk.

      On a journey of many leagues

      Approaches a caravan of eastern kings.

      Who saw a star and knew it’s meaning

      And are bearing gifts to celebrate a King.

      The king of a land that’s foreign

      Acknowledging that He is to reign

      They are bringing their greatest riches

      Their gold, myrrh, and frankincense.

      "There’s some good in this world... and it's worth fighting for!" - Samwise Gamgee

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      Esther
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        @elanor

        Sounds awesome so far!!

        Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende

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        Elanor
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          @esther-c

          Thank you. ?

          "There’s some good in this world... and it's worth fighting for!" - Samwise Gamgee

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