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March 8, 2025 at 12:52 pm #199443
I should mention that Alan acctually doesn’t even know if his friends are still there, thinking Stripe might have gotten them to move on.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
March 8, 2025 at 12:52 pm #199444And there may be other ways to get Alan with his friends that would work better.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
March 8, 2025 at 1:05 pm #199446Considering the circumstances, I don’t think the above will go through his mind. I think he’ll run there because that’s the only place he can go really, and he’s going to be having a really, really hard time. It’s going to be surprising if he thinks clearly enough to get back there without getting lost or injured. Then he gets back and the Wizards attack and he goes, “oh shoot!” (that’s selling it short) and realizes that this was because they followed him.
That’s what I would think.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 1:15 pm #199448What if he stops for the night? (Which he will need to do. Nearland can be reached in a day on horseback from Dehn Prisson, but someone walking would have to take a break.) Do you think it would cross his mind then?
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
March 8, 2025 at 1:38 pm #199459Nope.
I wouldn’t think so.
I think he’ll run until he drops (basiclly) and then he’ll either be so dead tired that he sleeps hard, or he’ll fight nightmares and flashbacks. I don’t think he’ll have time to think about this sort of things.
Out of experience, when you go through trauma parts of your mind just kind of turn off and everything is kind of weird. You see things with really strange clarity and then miss other things entirely, and you’ll have photographic memories of some moments, and blank spots for others. I think it could be very reasonable that he wouldn’t even be thinking about that.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 1:50 pm #199466That makes sense. However again, different people would react differently.
But what about when he wakes up?
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
March 8, 2025 at 1:51 pm #199467I don’t think it would be out of character. Like Ellette said, he’d probably be too distraught and traumatized to think straight. But if he did stop for the night, he’d probably realize it wasn’t safe, and go someplace else.
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March 8, 2025 at 1:53 pm #199468he’ll go doggedly on.
I was stunned for almost a week and didn’t think clearly.
(again, different person. But trauma does weird things)
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 1:58 pm #199471@theducktator @ellette-giselle
Okay. Thank you both. I might wait to see what @whalekeeper thinks, but your responses are helpful. I could add a moment of clarity where he realizes what he is doing when he is too close to the village and gets caught up in the fight, even if he plans to escape.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
March 8, 2025 at 1:59 pm #199472Yeah that would work!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 2:55 pm #199486I think it would depend on how traumatized Alan’s instincts are. It makes sense for somebody in panic to fly off into risky situations, but if he has the sense to think about how he’s going to travel and hide, then he might have to put some thought into where he is going.
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