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    Linus Smallprint
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      I should mention that Alan acctually doesn’t even know if his friends are still there, thinking Stripe might have gotten them to move on.

      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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      Linus Smallprint
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        And there may be other ways to get Alan with his friends that would work better.

        Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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        Ellette Giselle
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          @linus-smallprint

          Considering the circumstances, I don’t think the above will go through his mind. I think he’ll run there because that’s the only place he can go really, and he’s going to be having a really, really hard time. It’s going to be surprising if he thinks clearly enough to get back there without getting lost or injured. Then he gets back and the Wizards attack and he goes, “oh shoot!” (that’s selling it short) and realizes that this was because they followed him.

          That’s what I would think.

          No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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          Linus Smallprint
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            @ellette-giselle

            What if he stops for the night? (Which he will need to do. Nearland can be reached in a day on horseback from Dehn Prisson, but someone walking would have to take a break.) Do you think it would cross his mind then?

            Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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            Ellette Giselle
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              @linus-smallprint

              Nope.

              I wouldn’t think so.

              I think he’ll run until he drops (basiclly) and then he’ll either be so dead tired that he sleeps hard, or he’ll fight nightmares and flashbacks. I don’t think he’ll have time to think about this sort of things.

              Out of experience, when you go through trauma parts of your mind just kind of turn off and everything is kind of weird. You see things with really strange clarity and then miss other things entirely, and you’ll have photographic memories of some moments, and blank spots for others. I think it could be very reasonable that he wouldn’t even be thinking about that.

              No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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              Linus Smallprint
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                @ellette-giselle

                That makes sense. However again, different people would react differently.

                But what about when he wakes up?

                 

                Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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                The Most Esteemed Feathered One
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                  @linus-smallprint

                  I don’t think it would be out of character. Like Ellette said, he’d probably be too distraught and traumatized to think straight. But if he did stop for the night, he’d probably realize it wasn’t safe, and go someplace else.

                  I shall be a vestibule of unhampered sanity.

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                  Ellette Giselle
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                    @linus-smallprint

                    he’ll go doggedly on.

                    I was stunned for almost a week and didn’t think clearly.

                    (again, different person. But trauma does weird things)

                    No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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                    Linus Smallprint
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                      @theducktator @ellette-giselle

                      Okay. Thank you both. I might wait to see what @whalekeeper thinks, but your responses are helpful.  I could add a moment of clarity where he realizes what he is doing when he is too close to the village and gets caught up in the fight, even if he plans to escape.

                      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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                      Ellette Giselle
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                        @linus-smallprint

                        Yeah that would work!

                        No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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                        whaley
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                          @linus-smallprint

                          I think it would depend on how traumatized Alan’s instincts are. It makes sense for somebody in panic to fly off into risky situations, but if he has the sense to think about how he’s going to travel and hide, then he might have to put some thought into where he is going.

                          "If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.

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