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January 29, 2025 at 11:03 am #196354
@stephie @theducktator @whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @keilah-h
At the start of February (less than a week away already, wow…) I’m going to start putting together an outline for The Narrow Path Trilogy: Book II – The Sword. I’m still trying to figure out some things for this and I have some questions I would like to ask your opinion on (for example, I have one thing that I wounder if it is too similar to something in The Wingfeather Saga). I also may ask you for ideas to help fill in some of the holes. Would any of you be willing to help me as I work on this?
Warning: This will require spoilers for Book II (of course) and quite possible spoilers for Book III (there is a good chance I will want to talk about the direction I want the characters headed in for that book).
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
January 29, 2025 at 11:09 am #196357I’ll help!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
January 29, 2025 at 11:13 am #196359Thanks! I will start posting things on here probably on Monday, Febuary 3. My goal is to get through all of this in a month so I can start writing the first draft in March.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
January 29, 2025 at 11:13 am #196361awesome!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
January 29, 2025 at 2:33 pm #196376My thinking cap is at your disposal!
"If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.
January 30, 2025 at 10:16 am #196421Awesome! Thanks!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
February 1, 2025 at 11:42 am #196690Tis Febuary. I will now start working on my outline. Not sure how long it will take. It looks like only you two plus my sister will be following this. But that is fine. Three is plenty for this stage, so I might just cap it off here anyway. I will let you know if I need any thoughts/ideas as I go. Thank you for helping with this!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
February 1, 2025 at 11:49 am #196698You’re very welcome!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
February 1, 2025 at 1:19 pm #196713A short introduction to Book II:
Title: The Narrow Path Trilogy: Book II – The Sword
Brief Plot Idea:
‘You may be done with magic, but magic isn’t done with you’
Alan is a wizard more powerful than any other. Once, Alan would have desired it, but now it is only a curse to him. The magic of Ehverwyld is twisted and crooked, destroying all it touches. To use it would be wrong, and Alan has resolved never to do so again. This has already cost him greatly, but Alan trusts The Saviour to look after him as he continues on.
But this is easier said than done. A group of wizards, led by the mysterious Iskyagus is after him, hoping to take his power for themselves and twist Klaw into their evil image for it. Alan is on the run, trying to escape them before it is too late.
Worse is the threat inside himself. Despite resolving not to use the evil magic, Alan finds himself drawing on his power again. And as much as Alan tries to stop it, the wizard within overtakes him. Can Alan stop it before he destroys his friends and the rest of the world with them? Will he have the strength to continue down the narrow path and trust The Saviour?
(Trying not to reveal too much from the previous book here)
Main themes:
Fighting sin
Trusting in God to help you as well as allowing other Christians to help you
Forgiving your enemies
Point of view characters:
AlanMartha
(There may be more, but I’m not sure at the moment. The story will be primarily be told from their perspective regardless)
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February 1, 2025 at 1:20 pm #196714And here is my first question for you:
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February 1, 2025 at 1:52 pm #196715Agh… Having read this, I am completely divided. And I mean seriously divided, which doesn’t happen to me often when giving an opinion.
If Eric pulled a Kalmar, I honestly think the comparisons to Wingfeather wouldn’t stop. There are already similarities in lore, and while there are differences, Featherheads are probably going to notice.
I certainly don’t think you’re sapping your ideas from Wingfeather, since you’ve proven how dedicated and thoughtful you are when piecing together your story. Regardless of what your story is about, you always put in the legwork, and that’s what I admire about you.
And I understand why Eric would develop in this way. I personally like Eric, and I would love this kind of plotline for him. It makes complete sense for the story.
But at the same time, there would still be a comparison in my mind. It’s like noticing a strange detail in a photo, and being unable to not notice it.
*Garbled noises* I don’t know, I can’t decide what I think.
"If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.
February 1, 2025 at 1:56 pm #196716However, one thing I do know is that Eric was always supposed to [redacted].
This is why I don’t want to say no, because I know what it feels like to connect with an idea.
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whaley. Reason: I redacted the plot idea just in case Linus doesn't want to directly mention it for spoilers :p
"If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.
February 1, 2025 at 2:22 pm #196719I say go for it! The memory loss thing is good, and the fact that he tries to join the Kunulfs. It separates it from WF. Plus, Andrew Peterson pulled a Beauty and the Beast to begin with. There’s not a romance, but trust me, there are plenty of similarities. And beauty and the beast pulled from the Bible. (see Daniel) so…. I say go for it. As the book goes along I would be able to give a few suggestions here and there on how to keep it separate from WF. But I say do it.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
February 3, 2025 at 12:42 pm #196820I say go for it! The memory loss thing is good, and the fact that he tries to join the Kunulfs. It separates it from WF. Plus, Andrew Peterson pulled a Beauty and the Beast to begin with. There’s not a romance, but trust me, there are plenty of similarities. And beauty and the beast pulled from the Bible. (see Daniel) so…. I say go for it. As the book goes along I would be able to give a few suggestions here and there on how to keep it separate from WF. But I say do it. – Ellette
Okay, sounds like a plan. And maybe you will have some more thoughts as well while I go, Whaley.
(I suppose it’s not uncommon for people to turn into wolves in fantasy. I think werewolves are just as common as dragons are (even if they aren’t always called werewolves if you look, they are almost always there in some way. The challenge will be making it stand out from the tropes.))
I certainly don’t think you’re sapping your ideas from Wingfeather, since you’ve proven how dedicated and thoughtful you are when piecing together your story. Regardless of what your story is about, you always put in the legwork, and that’s what I admire about you. – Whaley
Thank you!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
February 3, 2025 at 11:01 pm #196911*slides in late* I was at church camp this weekend.
I don’t think it seems like you’re copying Wingfeather, but readers would definitely notice the similarities.
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