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@overcomer, @sarah-h, Good advice, I’ll have to add that in.
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@overcomer @clairec Personally, I would keep the beginning. I get how it could confuse one about what type of story it is about. I don’t remember that happening to me, but I could see it happening. Maybe there would be another way around that. Probably, even just a slight change of style would do it.
What I liked about it though was that it gave us a full slice of the MC’s life. That’s something that’s important when he nearly loses his life. It also shows us a good deal about his mother, who in this case is nearly as important as he is.
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