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Should I tag some people!? I guess so. ^^^^^^
@keilah-h @rae @ellette-giselle @theducktator @grcr @linus-smallprint @raxforge @whalekeeper @loopylin @arcticanimals @esther-c @jonashello, hybrid lore told me to tag people if I wanted them to give feedback over my stuff, so if you guys wouldn’t mind, could you judge my story? Thanks! ?
(it is on the previous page)
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Super creepy, but interesting! Is this the entirety of the story, or is there going to be more? Either way, the mystery remains effective: if there’s more, than this is effective for piquing the reader’s interesting; if not, the questions it leaves unanswered are intriguing in and of themselves. I also liked your use of repetition.
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That is just one of the 6 stories in it (it is the shortest one) Other stories in A Cellar’s tales are about a lot of different things, here are some of the names:
Security logs
Hallucinations
Friendly face
and two other
But I heard it does connect to the other stories. So the questions will be answered! But in some of the other stories!
. I also liked your use of repetition.
Thank you! The point of the story is Joey is seeing this banshee, but everyone around him thinks he is insane, but he keeps saying to himself that it is real.
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Sorry I took a while to get back to you.
Of the projects you shared, The Kingdom of Kaimor sounds the most interesting to me. (Like Keilah, I like animal-hybrid races) Horror/Thrillars aren’t my thing, so A Cellar’s tales and P.I.-C.A.F.E are probably the least appealing. I did read that bit of A Cellar’s tales that you shared though. It was fine so far, I didn’t find it too creepy and more mysterious. It might be a little too quickly paced.
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Thanks for getting back! I will try to make it slower! ?
and I will only share the other projects!
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You’re welcome!
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@the_lost-journal
Sorry I’m late in getting back to you.
Yeah, that was a creepy story. I don’t have too much to say about it—I agree with Linus about the pacing. I, too, like your use of repetition here. ?
in my reached up to my ears, to feel them blood… leaking out of them…
I think I get what you’re saying here, but I had a bit of a hard time understanding this…??
I don’t like to read horror either, though. I’d love to read your other works if you post scenes, but I’d prefer not to be tagged for the scarier stuff. ? Sorry…
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Hello whom ever cares
But I think I might just quit writing. I am not very
goodexceptional at it. My writing is bland, a brick wall has more depth than my characters. My story lines make no sense, and my pacing is faster than sonic the hedgehog.@the_lost-journal oh don’t do that! you can get better at writing by doing it and sharing it.
and even if you do quit, will we still see you around? you always have funny things to say, and I like hearing them.
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