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    Linus Smallprint
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      @whalekeeper

      How come I am not supprised that you are the only one here who knows about The Game? (Which you just lost, again.)

      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

      #201063
      Linus Smallprint
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        @whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

        Chapter the 11th is out. I’m not too happy with this. I’m not sure I got Martha right in here and this kind of feels like a filler event. (Though it still moves the story forward.) I will press on.

        Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

        #201077
        whaley
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          @linus-smallprint

          I don’t know. XD Maybe because I’m KP’s friendly neighborhood psychic.

          The exhaustion is strong with this one

          #201129
          Linus Smallprint
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            @whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

            Chapter 12 out now!

            I was talking to my sister last night about the story, and we decided on a couple of things that would make us both more comfortable reading and writing in the story, which would also make things less awkward for the characters. However, I still will not rewrite anything during the first draft. So, please accept the narrator’s strange explanation for now.

            Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

            #201133
            whaley
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              @linus-smallprint

              I’m assuming you added Sara because writing one female in the group is awkward?

              The exhaustion is strong with this one

              #201157
              Linus Smallprint
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                @whalekeeper

                Yeah. Plus, Martha would be more comfortable if she wasn’t alone with a bunch of guys. It would be better if Eric was awake, but since he’s not, she’s glad Sara is there.

                Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                #201222
                Linus Smallprint
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                  @whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

                  Chapter the 13th out now!

                  Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                  #201318
                  Linus Smallprint
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                    @whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

                    Okay. I know there were some concerns about the security of Google. So, I decided to try out Proton Drive instead, which is more secure. So far, I don’t like the interface much. It’s slow and lacks some basic features. But let’s see how this goes. Here is a link to a folder that contains all the chapters.

                    Chapter 14 has also been added!

                    TNPT: The Sword – Proton Drive

                    Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                    #201320
                    Ellette Giselle
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                      @linus-smallprint
                      WOW! I didn’t know p

                      No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                      #201322
                      Linus Smallprint
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                        @ellette-giselle

                        Was that response cut off partway through?

                        Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                        #201323
                        Ellette Giselle
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                          @linus-smallprint
                          Yes. For some reason KP is glitching, so I actually can’t see what I’m typing. I’m just shooting blind and hoping I spell and type everything. It’s like typing while blind. This is kind of odd/cool/frustrating.
                          I was going to say, I didn’t know that proton did that with docs.

                          No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                          #201324
                          Ellette Giselle
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                            Yay. Looks like everything went though that time.

                            No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                            #201352
                            Stepheroni and Cheese
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                              @linus-smallprint

                              ….I had no idea about safety concerns and google…I’ll have to look into that

                              Pray, thou shalt simply add ketchup unto the mac'n'cheese.

                              #201366
                              Linus Smallprint
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                                @ellette-giselle

                                Site glitches are downright annoying.

                                I didn’t know that proton did that with docs.

                                You use Proton, right? Well that’s a way you can share your work without posting it directly on Kingdom pen. You can invite specific people to it, or create a share link that you can take down any time you want.

                                 

                                 

                                Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                                #201367
                                Ellette Giselle
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                                  @linus-smallprint

                                  Woah! That is so cool!

                                   

                                  Now I just have to figure out how to do it………

                                   

                                   

                                  No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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