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    Linus Smallprint
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      @whalekeeper

      How come I am not supprised that you are the only one here who knows about The Game? (Which you just lost, again.)

      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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      Linus Smallprint
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        @whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

        Chapter the 11th is out. I’m not too happy with this. I’m not sure I got Martha right in here and this kind of feels like a filler event. (Though it still moves the story forward.) I will press on.

        Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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        whaley
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          @linus-smallprint

          I don’t know. XD Maybe because I’m KP’s friendly neighborhood psychic.

          "If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.

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          Linus Smallprint
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            @whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

            Chapter 12 out now!

            I was talking to my sister last night about the story, and we decided on a couple of things that would make us both more comfortable reading and writing in the story, which would also make things less awkward for the characters. However, I still will not rewrite anything during the first draft. So, please accept the narrator’s strange explanation for now.

            Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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            whaley
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              @linus-smallprint

              I’m assuming you added Sara because writing one female in the group is awkward?

              "If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.

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