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April 2, 2025 at 10:37 am #201056
How come I am not supprised that you are the only one here who knows about The Game? (Which you just lost, again.)
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 2, 2025 at 1:07 pm #201063@whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h
Chapter the 11th is out. I’m not too happy with this. I’m not sure I got Martha right in here and this kind of feels like a filler event. (Though it still moves the story forward.) I will press on.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 2, 2025 at 3:39 pm #201077I don’t know. XD Maybe because I’m KP’s friendly neighborhood psychic.
The exhaustion is strong with this one
April 3, 2025 at 2:22 pm #201129@whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h
Chapter 12 out now!
I was talking to my sister last night about the story, and we decided on a couple of things that would make us both more comfortable reading and writing in the story, which would also make things less awkward for the characters. However, I still will not rewrite anything during the first draft. So, please accept the narrator’s strange explanation for now.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 3, 2025 at 5:42 pm #201133I’m assuming you added Sara because writing one female in the group is awkward?
The exhaustion is strong with this one
April 4, 2025 at 11:35 am #201157Yeah. Plus, Martha would be more comfortable if she wasn’t alone with a bunch of guys. It would be better if Eric was awake, but since he’s not, she’s glad Sara is there.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 5, 2025 at 12:10 pm #201222@whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h
Chapter the 13th out now!
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 8, 2025 at 10:27 am #201318@whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h
Okay. I know there were some concerns about the security of Google. So, I decided to try out Proton Drive instead, which is more secure. So far, I don’t like the interface much. It’s slow and lacks some basic features. But let’s see how this goes. Here is a link to a folder that contains all the chapters.
Chapter 14 has also been added!
TNPT: The Sword – Proton Drive
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 8, 2025 at 10:47 am #201320@linus-smallprint
WOW! I didn’t know pNo half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
April 8, 2025 at 11:14 am #201322Was that response cut off partway through?
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 8, 2025 at 11:26 am #201323@linus-smallprint
Yes. For some reason KP is glitching, so I actually can’t see what I’m typing. I’m just shooting blind and hoping I spell and type everything. It’s like typing while blind. This is kind of odd/cool/frustrating.
I was going to say, I didn’t know that proton did that with docs.No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
April 8, 2025 at 11:27 am #201324Yay. Looks like everything went though that time.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
April 9, 2025 at 6:02 am #201352….I had no idea about safety concerns and google…I’ll have to look into that
Pray, thou shalt simply add ketchup unto the mac'n'cheese.
April 9, 2025 at 10:39 am #201366Site glitches are downright annoying.
I didn’t know that proton did that with docs.
You use Proton, right? Well that’s a way you can share your work without posting it directly on Kingdom pen. You can invite specific people to it, or create a share link that you can take down any time you want.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
April 9, 2025 at 10:40 am #201367Woah! That is so cool!
Now I just have to figure out how to do it………
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
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