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    Keilah H.
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      @linus-smallprint Probably a good idea to wait till a later draft.

       

      Can’t wait to see what’s in store for Alan and the group!

      "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

      #199943
      Keilah H.
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        I see the prologue (btw I love how it’s called “The Chapter Before”) already has a title!

        "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

        #199944
        Linus Smallprint
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          @keilah-h

          Can’t wait to see what’s in store for Alan and the group!

          Oh… just you wait. There are things. Also stuff.

          Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

          #199945
          Keilah H.
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            @linus-smallprint lol

            "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

            #199951
            The Ducktator
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              @linus-smallprint

              Yay!

              (I kind of want to tag some people who haven’t read book one yet to see how well I can provide context in book II, but maybe I will wait for a later draft for that. what do you think?)

              One of my pet peeves is when authors provide tons of context about book I in book II. If you start at the middle book in a series, then you deserve utter bewilderment. XD

              To err is human; to arr is pirate.

              #199959
              Ellette Giselle
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                @theducktator

                100%

                Go look at Alcatraz if anyone disagrees with that statement,

                No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                #199961
                Linus Smallprint
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                  @theducktator @ellette-giselle

                  Yeah, but the other reason to do it is to refresh the reader’s memory of the previous book. Notice that while Alcatraz complains about it, he still does it. The trick is to include it naturally instead of going out of your way to do it. So I hope to find a way to do that.

                  I think I will just stick with people who have read the book one draft(s) for now.

                  Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                  #199962
                  Linus Smallprint
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                    @theducktator, did you send an access request? I haven’t seen anything yet.

                    Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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                    Linus Smallprint
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                      @ellette-giselle @theducktator @keilah-h @stephie @whalekeeper

                      Okay, the prologue is out now. I’m a bit missy with the point of view in there, but I am trying not to care right now.

                      If you encounter ${  } in my writing, this just means that I am using a placeholder.

                      Now I need to go shovel.

                      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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                      The Ducktator
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                        @linus-smallprint

                        Now I need to go shovel.

                        Did you get snow???

                        To err is human; to arr is pirate.

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                        Ellette Giselle
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                          @linus-smallprint

                          I’m a bit missy with the point of view in there,

                          Messy…. I believe.

                           

                           

                          Yes. I feel like correcting people’s grammar today.

                           

                          Maybe I’ve been writing too many Nazi POVs.

                           

                           

                          No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                          #200013
                          Linus Smallprint
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                            @theducktator

                            Did you get snow???

                            Yes. Up here in Canada, we’ve gotten snow as late as May.

                             


                            @ellette-giselle

                            Maybe I’ve been writing too many Nazi POVs.

                            Probably. No soup for you.

                            Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                            #200052
                            Stepheroni and Cheese
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                              @linus-smallprint I requested access just so you know in case you don’t recognize my email. Although it’s kinda obvious seeing as I’m “Stephie” here

                              Pray, thou shalt simply add ketchup unto the mac'n'cheese.

                              #200053
                              Stepheroni and Cheese
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                                @linus-smallprint

                                Up here in Canada, we’ve gotten snow as late as May.

                                It’s 18 degrees Celcius outside and the warmest thing I wore today was a sweatshirt.

                                *chuckles because I get to say I’m Canadian whilst living in a Southern area of Canada*

                                Pray, thou shalt simply add ketchup unto the mac'n'cheese.

                                #200054
                                The Ducktator
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                                  @linus-smallprint

                                  Lucky. I wish we got more snow. It’s been in the 70s today. Beautiful, but I want to go sledding.

                                  To err is human; to arr is pirate.

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