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    Elanor
    @elanor
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      Here it is @lorelei-writer

      Like I said it’s not finished it’s missing most of its punctuation and I still have a couple of lines to add at the end which I have an idea of what they’ll be but haven’t thought them up yet xD. Tell me what you truly think. I don’t have any fellow poetry writers to tell me their opinion on my writings.

      So this poem has an octometer (each stanza has eight syllables or at least is supposed to). That’s one thing I do with my poetry I like to have a certain meter. Free verse is definitely not my style. Though I appreciate people who can do that and I sounds good.

      Falling Color

      October 12, 2021

      I was walking outside in the woods on this day and admiring all of the beauties of the colors of Fall God has given us. Then I started writing. I had brought my notebook out with me this day thinking I might need it. It turned out I did.

       

      The sky above is just the right shade

      The perfect background for the canvas.

       The clouds in a lazy manner pass

      Seem to take their time, yet swiftly fade.

      Over the Fall colors sweeps my gaze

      The apple’s green leaves are still vibrant.

      Maple’s red like a fire hydrant

      Stick out from the rest like a bright blaze.

      The oak leaves are brown to rusty gold.

      Some poplars a vivid yellow

      Others, orange, are much more mellow.

      But pines always display their green bold.

      I now turn my eyes down to my feet

      They’re covered by a blanket of leaves

      Varied in color, blown by the breeze

      Whispering, “Soon will be Winter’s sleep.”

      Acorns brown scattered around the oaks,

      Fruit trees release their heavy burdens,

      Creatures feast then go to Winter dens,

      Drifts of multi-hued leaves clog the brooks.

      The shedding of the old covering

      Makes trees look very sad and barren.

      They now have nothing to keep hidden

      That in the breeze they are shuddering.

      This shedding makes colors everywhere

      They are indescribable yet known.

      Crimson, gold, orange, silver, and brown.

      They make beauty all ‘round where they are.

      Old needs to go to make way for new

      At this time they look bare, without hope.

      But it shows what’s under each trees’ cloak.

      The season between shows which are true.

      Branches once all hidden are revealed

      All vary greatly in girth.

      Some are thick, portraying great strength

      Others thin, look weak and shriveled.

      Some trees’ branches are straight and smooth,

      And look like they’ve never been harmed.

      Others are twisted and gnarled

      Like one more like one more gust will break them loose.

      • This reply was modified 3 years ago by Elanor.

      "All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us." - Gandalf

      #106250
      Trahia the Minstrel
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        Hi @lorelei-writer !
        Nice to meet you!

        I write medieval fantasy too! That’s so cool! And I’ve been homeschooled my whole life as well😊

        Your description of your plot sounds interesting!

        and I love the poem you posted, @elanor !

         

        The end of a story, a beautiful picture; a feeling of longing yet hope~
        That’s my wish to create.

        #106254
        Elanor
        @elanor
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          @trahia-the-minstrel

          Thank you. 🙂

          "All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us." - Gandalf

          #106266
          Lorelei Angelino
          @lorelei-writer
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            @elanor

            That is awesome!!! Yes, fall is the BEST season *high fives*

            Great! I’m looking forward to it!! 😀 Ooh I’ll have to find that poem then! (And you can never judge a poem by its title, amiright? 😉)

             

            Writing is a journey . . . journey for the Lord.

            #106267
            Lorelei Angelino
            @lorelei-writer
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              @trahia-the-minstrel COOL! Nice to meet you too! (And thanks!)

              Writing is a journey . . . journey for the Lord.

              #106269
              Elishavet Elroi
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                Hi there! (I’m sorry I didn’t greet you earlier.)

                I’m a homeschooler and book worm, and I probably talk out of turn a bit too much. I create all my worlds with no gun powder.

                Question: What’s your favorite animal(s)?

                Anyway, greetings and salutations! (And I totally agree, Fall is beautiful)

                 

                 

                You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                #106287
                Lorelei Angelino
                @lorelei-writer
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                  @elishavet-pidyon

                  Hey! Nice to meet you! Giant pandas are my favorite, what about you?

                  Writing is a journey . . . journey for the Lord.

                  #106307
                  Elishavet Elroi
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                    Small fuzzy things in general, with cats, foxes and squirrels at the top. I have a hard time deciding.

                    You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

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                    Elanor
                    @elanor
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                      @lorelei-writer

                      Alright tell me what you think! (No you can’t.)

                      Is there anything you’re working on writing right now?

                      "All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us." - Gandalf

                      #106368
                      Lorelei Angelino
                      @lorelei-writer
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                        That is really good @elanor ! I love how you do a different rhyme scheme (abba instead of the usual abab)! I usually use certain meters as well. I use hexameter a lot, but sometimes I mix it up and do every other verse is a different meter, like a would be six, b would be five, a is six, b is five, and so on. Like this:

                        He holds me in His arms, (six)

                        And there I find strength, (five)

                        I’m loved in His presence, (six)

                        I’m saved by His grace. (five)

                        I love all of the descriptions in your poem as well! It’s so real and makes me feel like I’m actually there, which is incredible!

                        Sometimes I do free verse, but a lot of times I make up my own rhyme scheme. XD

                        Writing is a journey . . . journey for the Lord.

                        #106369
                        Lorelei Angelino
                        @lorelei-writer
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                          @elishavet-pidyon

                          Oh yes, foxes and cats are some of my favorites as well!

                          What genres do you like to read/write?

                          Writing is a journey . . . journey for the Lord.

                          #106404
                          Keilah H.
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                            @lorelei-writer I love that poem!

                            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                            #106405
                            Keilah H.
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                              @lorelei-writer It’s spelled Keilah but pronounced Kayla; it’s the Spanish spelling (my parents are Puerto Rican).

                              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                              #106407
                              Elishavet Elroi
                              @elishavet-pidyon
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                                @lorelei-writer

                                Ok, I’m sorry I have taken so long to reply. My favorite genres to read are most likely (medieval) fantasy, or theology/doctrine. I also love a good historical fiction!

                                All four of my books are differing types of fantasy, between medieval and animals (if that’s a type). My other project is kid’s church curriculum.

                                What are yours?

                                You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                                #106426
                                Elanor
                                @elanor
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                                  @lorelei-writer

                                  Love your poem thanks for sharing.

                                  Thanks you. That was my first time trying out the abba. I often do the abab or do three or four lines in a row that rhyme (example aaa, bbb, ccc, so on and so forth). As for meters my usual is an octometer. But I’ve been everywhere between a pentameter to a dodecameter.

                                  Ive written 24 poems of longish length in the last 6 months so I’ve had a lot of fun trying new things and seeing what different schemes sound like etc.

                                  Sorry nowww I’m rambling. 😆

                                  Great tag line @elishavet-pidyon

                                   

                                  "All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given to us." - Gandalf

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