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August 17, 2017 at 9:36 am #41007
@catwing @dragon-snapper @emily @shannon @his-instrument @daeus @ck4always
I have my 2nd short story live! (Capture)
https://regeneratelifefarm.blogspot.com/2017/08/capture.htmlSo after “talking” with @emily yesterday I decided to turn my story into a series of allegorical short stories (The Master’s Servants). But my question now is, should I keep linking it (Since more people like my family and friends can see it) or post the stories directly here or both?
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August 17, 2017 at 11:26 am #41013Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@salome01w4g That is such a great story! You did a wonderful job! I think I am liking the stories as they are in 1st person, to respond to your question. Since 2nd person is hardly ever used, I think that it might be a little confusing for the reader. Also, it would make it a lot more difficult to write. Those are just my thoughts.
I don’t think that it is a problem for you to keep linking it. But posting it would probably be fine too. Just do whatever is simpler for you.August 17, 2017 at 11:29 am #41014@emily
I’m sooo glad you like it!! Yeah I tried to write Capture in 2nd person and I had to re-write it like 3 times because it was way harder and wasn’t as good. I guess I just keep linking it since it is easier for me to do. Thanks for your thoughts! ๐ ๐~I donโt know what Iโm doing~
August 17, 2017 at 11:31 am #41015Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@salome01w4g Any time.
August 17, 2017 at 11:54 am #41020Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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Great stories @salome01w4g! I love the imagery and feeling.
August 17, 2017 at 12:07 pm #41021@shannon Thank you! ๐ Glad you like it! ๐
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August 18, 2017 at 11:19 am #41128Story 3 is live https://regeneratelifefarm.blogspot.com/2017/08/a-walk-with-master.html
I feel like this one is rougher and not as good as the first two… any thoughts??
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August 18, 2017 at 2:35 pm #41146Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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That is a good story @salome01w4g! ๐ I feel like you could maybe spend a little more time on the stories in the future and it might help. That’s just what I think, though ๐
August 18, 2017 at 2:40 pm #41147@emily yeah, my “secret” is working in a dark, very quiet room, all alone and I didn’t for this last one. Maybe trying to do one a week instead of one a day would work better. Thank you! To have an audience however small helps me work more seriously, and try to make it more interesting, deep, meaningful, etc… ๐
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August 18, 2017 at 5:06 pm #41160Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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Hmm @salome01w4g. That is interesting. Yeah, I totally get the audience thing ๐
August 18, 2017 at 7:14 pm #41166@Hannah So sorry I wasn’t here!!! I’ve been really busy with a LOT of stuff!!! I’ll try to keep up tho ๐
August 18, 2017 at 7:25 pm #41171I read it…. looks cool! ๐ I enjoyed it ๐
August 19, 2017 at 11:19 am #41208@CK4always glad ya liked it.
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August 19, 2017 at 11:48 am #41211@Hannah of course ๐
August 19, 2017 at 5:13 pm #41247Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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Good story @salome01W4G! I think that maybe it would help me a little if you wrote a back story. The stories are great, but I think that a back story would help it to make more sense.
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