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April 9, 2017 at 5:45 pm #29832
@Dragon-snapper Yessss. PET KOALAS. XD *dies of laughter*
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April 9, 2017 at 6:04 pm #29833@dragon-snapper The Aussies could ride kangaroos instead of horses.
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April 9, 2017 at 8:11 pm #29837April 9, 2017 at 8:11 pm #29838April 9, 2017 at 8:15 pm #29839@dragon-snapper I absolutely cannot believe that I didn’t see this earlier!!! Wow, this is great! Although…. I do have to say that Daeus isn’t like how you pictured him. He really is very kind and not at all controlling or desiring of power… 😀 But I do have to say, the part when “As they marched into the armory, Daeus conldn’t help but say, “you know Kate? That would’ve been much more dramatic if we’d been on the battle field with an orchestra,” that was so Daeus. You pictured him perfectly there. How did you know? *scratches head.* And thanks so much for including me in the story, especially since I’m so new! 😀
April 9, 2017 at 8:25 pm #29841ah, @dragon-snapper, I just had an idea. Daeus loves to sing, he’s always singing, and he sings really well. He loves symphonies, too. Oh, he loves symphonies! (Did I mention he wants to write one of his own?) If you could capture his love of music in your story, it would be really accurate. 😀
April 10, 2017 at 3:33 am #29867@dragon-snapper, Absolutely Awesome! 🙂 This is so funny! I love how you actually used our favorite Kingdom Pen Characters. Write more of these stories, please, with the same characters. And some more? Again, this is so fantastic! 🙂 😛 😉 🙂
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April 11, 2017 at 9:41 am #29977@daeus 😆 Hahaha!
@hope Alrighty, then the timesabers will…do something. I’ll figure that out when I get to them. 😛
@jane-maree They would just hang on to your legs all day and eat tree leaves. 😛 Daeus, my thoughts exactly.
@kina-lamb 😀 I figured that Daeus wasn’t as grumpy as I had him in the story. If that were the case, then there’d be no ice cream on the forum.
Music! I love music so much…its the best thing in the world. Ever.
@clairec Thanks! Don’t worry, the next stories are in the making, with more characters. You’re from Australia, right? (I’m trying to remember everyone from there that’s on the forum for the 4th which will have all of you in it.)☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
April 11, 2017 at 9:43 am #29978@dragon-snapper Oh, timesabers essentially make people cease to exist when they get hit by them.
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April 11, 2017 at 9:46 am #29979@daeus Oh, goodness! The only thing that would make them more terrifying is being held by evil butterflies…which is what’s going to happen…this should be interesting. 😛
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April 11, 2017 at 11:11 am #29996@dragon-snapper @daeus I share your love of music and how amazing it is! Since King Daeus loves music so much, will he have a personal bard?
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April 11, 2017 at 11:14 am #29997@perfectfifths … … …
I can only think of one person on KP who has an instrument as their profile picture… *glances at you* Would you like to be the bard/minstrel?☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
April 11, 2017 at 11:16 am #29998@kina-lamb Ha! I tricked you. I really do like to control people, I just don’t like them to feel like I’m controlling them and I don’t like to feel like I’m controlling them myself. Nasty feeling controlling people. You want to control them accidentally.
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April 11, 2017 at 11:26 am #30000@daeus *jots notes quickly into notebook* I see…another great lesson from King Daeus.
You accidentally controlled the people. *claps* More ice cream for all.☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
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