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April 7, 2017 at 10:51 am #29671
@dragon-snapper
Well…
So…
Um..
WOW.
There are not words for how much I love this!!!!!!!!!!!!! Simply put, this is ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT. Period.
As for my favorite line, I love all of the ones mentioned, but the last line…“I like your dragons.”
…was one of the best. Perfect ending to an amazing story. π π π π π π π π π
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April 7, 2017 at 11:07 am #29675Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@dragon-snapper I love this so much! :):) All the destroyed clichΓ©s, witty lines, and ice cream references… pure awesomeness! I vote for a sequel. π
April 7, 2017 at 11:54 am #29681@theliterarycrusader Yes, a sequel is needed. It should have confetti. A lot of confetti. π Also that quote is rather fantastic and now I’m picturing Josiah with a long beard and it’s quite an amusing thought π
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April 7, 2017 at 12:03 pm #29683@christi-eaton Lol. You need to draw a picture of that.
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April 7, 2017 at 12:27 pm #29684@northerner I actually haven’t read The Thirteen Clocks, though it sounds neat! I’ll have to check it out. And yeah, I figured it wouldn’t be as awesome in any other publishing situations, but I’ve had so much fun seeing your all’s reactions. I love to make people laugh.
@emma-flournoy π Glad you likey. When I wrote it, I knew that I had to include ice cream.
@that_writer_girl_99 I can’t pick a favorite either. π
@perfectfifths Well, people certainly keep asking for a sequel. And I already have some ideas. π
@audrey-caylin Hey, those paper airplanes will turn on you. π
@theliterarycrusader Ooh! I do like the sequel idea. It has piqued my interest considerably. Though I don’t know who all is on the team. Who? I might not be able to do everyone, just because it’d be quite confusing, but I’ll see what I can do. π I like that line too. I can’t stand spiders.
@hope Awesome! So glad you enjoyed it.
@ingridrd Yes! *fist pump* Another person likes it. π When I first thought up that ending, I knew it was perfect.
@winter-rose XD You’re not the only one with that request. I might have an angry mob on my hand if I don’t write one, eh @christi-eaton? π
@daeus With a frog on his head.- This reply was modified 7 years, 7 months ago by Snapper.
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April 7, 2017 at 12:29 pm #29687Alright. How many of you vote for a sequel?
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April 7, 2017 at 12:38 pm #29688*quickly raises hand*
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April 7, 2017 at 12:38 pm #29689@daeus, yes, yes I should XD
@dragon-snapper, I think it’s safe to assume everyone wants one.Theater kid. Currently depressed because I can't stop listening to sad musicals.
April 7, 2017 at 12:39 pm #29690Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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Aye.
April 7, 2017 at 12:39 pm #29691@jadamae Thank you so much!
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April 7, 2017 at 12:45 pm #29693@daeus Aha. Would like some more ice cream long with the sequel? π
@christi-eaton Hahaha! Yeah…I’m not even sure why I asked that question. π Shall I say its unanimous?Okay, as there will be an angry mob chasing me if I do not write a sequel, as it would seem, I clearly need to write one. I already have some ideas, but if any of you have any requests as to anything I should include. (@jane-maree I already have your motivational pizza) and @spradlin’s confetti, but if there’s anything else I’m missing, please tell me! If have any cliche’s I should make fun of, really any suggestions, let me know.
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April 7, 2017 at 12:49 pm #29694@dragon-snapper *hands you superhero cape of inspiration* (I’m making this a thing)
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April 7, 2017 at 12:55 pm #29697Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@dragon-snapper Oooh could you somehow add Daeus’s obsession of The Count of Monte Cristo?
April 7, 2017 at 12:57 pm #29698@winter-rose Oh! Yes! That is an awesome idea! I know exactly what to do with it! *maniacal laugh* @daeus
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April 7, 2017 at 12:58 pm #29699@Dragon-Snapper I vote for a sequel! Ummm… I can’t think of anything right off the top of my head I particularly want, but I’ll let you know if I do. π
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