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February 1, 2025 at 11:28 am #196677
Oh oh. Who is that shadowy masked fellow? The villain of the story?
Oh yes…I didn’t read your other two books…so I don’t have anything to say except…you killed a character. So sad. And yet, glad.
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:28 am #196679There’s also a lot of archery.
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:31 am #196681Feels like a battle vibe, but oh well. The Empire does do a lot of fighting, right? But Leon and Julian themselves wouldn’t really be a part of it probably.
I decide lots of things about people I don’t know because me mind likes to have a face to go with a name, and when I don’t have one, I view what I know as the building blocks to a character. XD
Now I’m curious xD Did you have a specific image of me? I know you met a lot of us at one time, so it might’ve been different when you joined.
'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'
February 1, 2025 at 11:32 am #196682Is there supposed to be something special about Julian’s eyes? He gets 2 close-ups of his blue irises…they’re blue, right?
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:33 am #196684I always imagined you with a violin and kind of looking like Lindsey Stirling since that was the first profile image I saw of you…
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:34 am #196685You also gave me the feeling of a girl who loves old books and antiques…sort of like an 1800’s librarian.
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"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:36 am #196687You know who Lindsey Stirling is? Lol, yeah, I did have a picture of someone with a violin and like a library at some point, so that checks out.
'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'
February 1, 2025 at 11:38 am #196688Book 3 time!
So it’s Leon and Julian then. (Unless you suddenly decide you want to switch to Quin for the next chapter.)
(I wonder how much of the book you can guess by looking at the aesthetic!!)
War? War. Boat! Wolves! Snow. Orphans…
Never to return.
Ominus…
But yeah, just thought I’d give everyone a “trigger warning”
**Triggered**
Kidding. I believe you said book 2 was the darkest. And even if you didn’t and this one is darker, I’m sticking around.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
February 1, 2025 at 11:39 am #196689Yes, there is a ship!
there’s also something else which no one who knows this culture and should think this is odd has picked up on yet.Yes, there are children, and an arena and wolves……….
Julian loves horses. His brother loved them too.
So, which brother is the more outgoing, and which one is the more quiet one? I’m assuming Leon is the quiet one? Are they twins? Who’s older?
So actually, Leon and Julian are not related. They grew up together, along with Julian’s little brother, Adrian. Adrian turned his back on the gods of the Empire in book two and was killed for it. Julian went on the hunt for anyone to blame for his brother’s death, and very nearly murdered Joseph and his family. It was later that he returned and asked them to tell him about the God Adrian had turned to.
Leon was Julian’s commanding officer and best friend, (besides Adrian) Leon was actually the one who arrested Aaron in book one, though his intent was not for Aaron to die.
Leon and Julian both turned to Christ and spent the majority of book 2 trying to keep one step ahead of the Empire, who was hot on their trail as traitors and deserters. They survived the Imperial Occupation of Ardenta and were freed along with everyone else when the Vendellians and their allies drove the Empire out of Ardenta.
Julian and Leon are still considered traitors and still have a price on their head in the Empire. And, as Julian explained, the Empire doesn’t let go of a grudge easily. Often times punishment is visited on the son of the criminal, or even the grandson, if the man himself is not caught and brought to justice.
Leon is the quiet one, and he is three years older than Julian. Julian is the wilder one, and rather impulsive. Leon is more cautious and thoughtful.
Oh oh. Who is that shadowy masked fellow? The villain of the story?
I make no comment.
And yes, both Leon and Julian are skilled archers, though Julian is superior.
Well, nothing special beyond them being blue…. which was a big deal in Ardenta.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
February 1, 2025 at 11:42 am #196691Okay. I’ll give you that.
Yes, I thought of you as a quieter girl. Lover of books. Long light/medium brown hair. Writer, friendly, softer spoke.
*shrug*
Not sure if any of that is true. (except I know the hair isn’t.)
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
February 1, 2025 at 11:49 am #196695Book 3 time!
*throws confetti everywhere*
So it’s Leon and Julian then. (Unless you suddenly decide you want to switch to Quin for the next chapter.)
Nope. It’s Leon and Julian. Two of my favorite characters I’ve ever written.
War? War. Boat! Wolves! Snow. Orphans…
No orphans. Well, I mean I’m sure there are orphans somewhere…… okay, there might actually be a scene with an orphan. But not a big plot thing like in the last two.
Yes wolves!
Yes a ship!
(I’m guessing you like boats and wolves?)
War…… Yes. In ways. Not the way you’re thinking though. (I can almost guaranty)
Ominus…
*evil laughter*
Kidding. I believe you said book 2 was the darkest. And even if you didn’t and this one is darker, I’m sticking around.
I believe I said book 2 was darker than book 1. These last two are by far the darkest. (though someone once argued that the beginning of book 2 was the darkest because I was dealing with a child) *shrug*
Glad you’re still staying with it!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
February 1, 2025 at 11:52 am #196699can’t believe no one is catching this………………I think y’all know the culture enough to tell that their are certain pics that don’t fit.Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
February 1, 2025 at 11:52 am #196700*gasp* I have to find that hidden odd thing!
Oh…for some reason I thought they were brothers…oh…that makes sense.
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:53 am #196701Okay…are you talking about those guys with turbans? They’re not Ardentin…right? Or Roman? (I forgot what those Romans were called…)
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
February 1, 2025 at 11:54 am #196702Don’t worry, a lot of people think they are. (they basically are.)
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
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