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March 20, 2025 at 12:00 pm #200427
Oooooo, dark and secretive taken quite literally I see. Very interested in this new character guy. Not surprised the poor kid got hurt.
Where’s this face claim? O.O
And sure! I’m always up to listening through people’s playlists (and maybe borrowing music from time to time).
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkMarch 20, 2025 at 12:00 pm #200428Hello again!
yeah, I think that’s true. Because you guessed it was Rolf.
Refreshing to see a different reaction here.
Yeah, well it fits his story. This whole section was the completion of his arc. Even though the reader never knows the full story, I like it.
Woah. Lion.
Yeah! A Lion!
No. He’s not lion.
Oh my word! If that’s the play on words I took it to be…. 🤣
Bribery.
yeah, thanks for stating the obvious. 😂 Does that mean it was good or bad?
Wait… You have a character named Wolf?
yeah. Why?
I don’t journal, but if I did, I would want my own.
I thought so.
Okay, so there are two separate ones then, and you get to read some of both. I can make that more clear in the beginning as I think it was a little vague.
Quite the prince.
you can say that again!
Well this makes reaching the prince super easy, barely an inconvenience!
yeah……. except he might not respond so well………..
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WHAT’S THAT SUPPOSED TO MEAN?!?!?! 😂
uh yeah, any thoughts on the situation Marius is in and what we now know if His Royal Highness the savior of the Empire, etc. etc,
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 12:03 pm #200429@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
Face Claim!
Those who’ve read this section will know who this is…….
(answer to one of your questions, Linus.)
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 12:05 pm #200430Oooooo, dark and secretive taken quite literally I see. Very interested in this new character guy. Not surprised the poor kid got hurt.
yes, very literally.
Interested in which new guy? The prince or Marius.
Again, which kid? The prince, or Marius?
I’ll send it in a moment!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 12:08 pm #200431@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
For anyone who is interested……
The LOS soundtrack!
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No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 12:11 pm #200432yeah, thanks for stating the obvious. 😂
It’s a skill of mine.
Does that mean it was good or bad?
I’m not sure. I haven’t put much thought into weather bribing is good or bad. All I know, it that I don’t like being bribed, and if you try to bribe me, I will only grow more stubborn.
yeah. Why? (About Wolf)
That’s kinda cool. Though I usually think of Wolf as a last name.
WHAT’S THAT SUPPOSED TO MEAN?!?!?! 😂
I think you know already from what I have said previously regarding demonic things in your books.
uh yeah, any thoughts on the situation Marius is in and what we now know if His Royal Highness the savior of the Empire, etc. etc,
Creepy. That’s all I can say. Creepy. Marius is a good friend not to run away.
A creepy mask for a creepy prince, (even if it was not his choice to be creepy).
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
March 20, 2025 at 12:14 pm #200434Interested in which new guy? The prince or Marius.
Again, which kid? The prince, or Marius?
Um, both? Seriously, the possibilities I’m the next few chapters are very concerning to my author mind.
And with what those two kids have been through?! Already? And you haven’t even had much time to beat them up either, no offense. You seem to like them. I am…concerned.
*Starts brewing a pot of tea for the charies*
Oooo, I liketh the face claim. I assume he takes the mask off to eat? Maybe has a soft fabric mask underneath to “protect” people when he does? Also going to asume the nose has breathing slots, cause otherwise he’s on the edge of suffocation (Sorry, brain ramble).
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkMarch 20, 2025 at 12:21 pm #200436Not that breathing holes would be strictly needed, but considering he wears it near constantly, and appears to be a very active individual, I’d expect them.
Anyway….
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkMarch 20, 2025 at 12:22 pm #200437Ah, well farms on the edge of starvation are a little more pliable then you I guess.
That’s kinda cool. Though I usually think of Wolf as a last name.
Oh! Well thanks. I really like the name Wolf for a first name. And Wulf. One’s the German spelling while the other is Saxon.
I think you know already from what I have said previously regarding demonic things in your books.
Oh. I see. Well… he might not be so approachable as you first thought.
Creepy. That’s all I can say. Creepy. Marius is a good friend not to run away.
A creepy mask for a creepy prince, (even if it was not his choice to be creepy).
aw, poor prince. 😢
Yeah, Marius is very loyal. I like him.
which may or may not be a good thing.No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 12:27 pm #200439Um, both? Seriously, the possibilities I’m the next few chapters are very concerning to my author mind.
And with what those two kids have been through?! Already? And you haven’t even had much time to beat them up either, no offense. You seem to like them. I am…concerned.
🤣
Yeah, they’ve been through the ringer. But hey, you’ve got to expect that if the poor prince is said to be half god. What a miserable life never being allowed to show your face or be heard in public.
Oooo, I liketh the face claim. I assume he takes the mask off to eat? Maybe has a soft fabric mask underneath to “protect” people when he does? Also going to asume the nose has breathing slots, cause otherwise he’s on the edge of suffocation (Sorry, brain ramble).
Glad you aren’t scared off. Linus doesn’t seem to think much of him. 🤣 just joking.
Well, his father is of royal blood, so as long as he’s with the emperor and other royals his face can be seen. He does a lot of things by himself though so that he can have it off. And of course, Marius has seen his face.
So actually, if you look closely the bottom of the nose part is actually open. It just extends past his nose so you can’t see any skin.
No worries about the ramble! I love rambles.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 12:32 pm #200440Ahh, that makes sense.
Also, really appreciate the interesting hem on his hood, and I didn’t know they used spandex fabrics in the empire. Lol. These are things I notice. XD
(And why a short clip of The Chosen I saw drove me absolutely batty. I may have to limit my history hobbies for my own sanity. *Sigh*)
XD
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkMarch 20, 2025 at 12:39 pm #200442Oh my word. He’s a face claim!!!
without a face.It’s just an idea.
🤣
believe me, I totally noticed those things, but it was the only photo with the identical mask that i wanted, and I decided that was more important.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 1:17 pm #200452XD that’s hilarious.
It’s a cool picture. And yeah, I get it. If I got a pic that had Leoron’s actual armor I’d freak out, even if the background was a pink balloon arch.
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkMarch 20, 2025 at 1:21 pm #200454🤣 That would be pretty cool!!
What does his armor look like, btw? I’ve seen some cool sci-fi-ish armor lying about.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 20, 2025 at 2:12 pm #200456Let’s see if I can describe what’s in my head without a picture.
You’ve seen the sketch I did of Silvia’s suit, correct? Well, his has the same basic design and structure (without the skirt of course). Each piece seals on the inside with the next peice, so there’s no openings, slits, or such. The material is a type of layered metal alloy that is extremely durable, but also slightly flexible and -to a point- self healing. I based the overall design off a lot of 1400-1500 plate armor in shape but I did smooth peoces into each other, so there’s a bit less bulk.
When visible, his suit is chameleon green, with yellow outline/details. The visor is opaque from the outside, and has the same color/texture as the suit (dull-not very reflective), giving the impression that it’s one with the helmet (all metal look. no face). Helmet is a little more pointed than his sister’s.
His gauntlets are dark green. They’re slightly less camouflaged due to a bunch of other programing. Palms darker green and a smidgen thicker.
The suit relies on an energy shield (The Button) for most of its indestructibility. Silvia’s is more advanced in this degree, as his was the first he built. (Her’s is also ombre dark royal/teal blue and black.)
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