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March 7, 2025 at 3:35 pm #199365
*huffs, sits down to wait patiently for next section* Fine then.
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
March 7, 2025 at 7:08 pm #199371Hello, nice to see you around.
Girls are weird.
*indignant gasp* how dare you!
😂
For some reason I started to imagine Hassan as Middle Eastern when you mentioned his name. Probably wearing a turban of sorts.
Well that is exactly how you should picture him! Bravo! 👏🏻
(if you look back at the story moodboard you may catch a glimpse of him.)
So, it’s basically crucifixion, except you don’t get the nails, and you get to stand on the ground. That’s got to be a ‘fun’ experience.
eh. yeah. Just about.
I’m kind of wondering what’s going through Rolf’s head right now. He’s still kind of new to this, even if he has been a Christian for half a year now.
I thought about having a POV for him….. but that will start fracturing into lots of POVs and the question will be, “Why Rolf over Aelic and Roland?” and then I’ll have five POVs going.
This section, good for the characters? No. Good for character development and overall story? Yes.
Well thanks! I was hoping to throw an interesting loop to make this book feel very different from the others.
(might have gotten most of my story-line inspiration from the book of Acts)
Anyhow.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 7:12 pm #199372@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
For anyone who is interested…..
Hassan (center) and two of the other slave traders.
(and yes, they are in their native country in this picture)
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 7:17 pm #199373Wow. Aladdin vibes.
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
March 7, 2025 at 7:19 pm #199374Wow. Yup. Has some similarities to Papa.
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 7:22 pm #199375I feel like you should be like this:
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I feel like you should be like this:
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 7:23 pm #199376@liberty that must be weird.
imagine showing your dad that picture and saying “My online friend made a bad guy who has your name.”
Don’t do that lol
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
March 7, 2025 at 7:24 pm #199377I already attempted to do so and got out-debated. She took fake-Alec. 😖
Wait, what does that mean? Who’s fake-Alec?
You don’t care about Leon?
I do! I do! Just…maybe I like Rolf better??🫣
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 7:26 pm #199378😂 I think he’ll think it’s funny. And he might even be pleased that something picked a name like his for a book character…even if they’re a bad guy…
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 7:47 pm #199379@liberty lol
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
March 7, 2025 at 7:58 pm #199380Long story. If you read back, it’s just on the last page or two. She tried to steal my character Alec to stop me from taking hers, but then I said Alec was too far away for her to take him, so we agreed that it was a misunderstanding and she’d kidnapped some random bystander.
That’s funny. I like Leon better 😝
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
March 7, 2025 at 8:20 pm #199382Well, I’ve never seen that movie. Just heard of it. And I like the song “Speechless” but other than that I know nothing of it besides it taking place in Arabia. lololol.
But that IS how I feel!!!!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 7:31 am #199404@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
For all those it may concern…. I would call this the theme song if this book.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 7:36 am #199405@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @liberty
How about this one?
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 8, 2025 at 7:37 am #199406@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @liberty
Look y’all, whatever you may think…. this is actually the truth.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
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