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March 7, 2025 at 10:16 am #199302
I got one across the arm on accident and that thing scared for almost a year!
Woah…um…do I want to ask this?…yes…I will…
So, uh, who whipped you?
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March 7, 2025 at 10:19 am #199303I already attempted to do so and got out-debated.
She took fake-Alec. 😖You don’t care about Leon?
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March 7, 2025 at 10:22 am #199305Right! He’s not Arab…but half Turkish.
*passes out elegantly on couch.*
Yes…I was behind and just speeding to catch up…
*pops up*
So, what do you think? (I assume you finished the section?)
Even if we fail…we should at least try…
That’s the spirit! *pounds you on the back*
And yes, you have discovered the new squad created just for me.
As for the cow thing, I got lashed in the face with a horse tail several times. THAT HURTS! I’m sure they’re most likely similar.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 10:29 am #199307Woah…um…do I want to ask this?…yes…I will…
So, uh, who whipped you?
Uh… I don’t remember.
We were in a group of friends and a few of the guys had horse whips that they added crackers to the ends of. They were trying them out, and one of the guys snapped his back and it cut me across the back of the arm.
Then there was another time when I was with friends and that was the era when all the guys in church were making shepherds slings. My brother and some of the older guys discovered how to add bull-crackers to the end so that when you let the Rock fly, if you flicked your wrist right, the cracker would go off “KAPOW!”
Well, I was standing too close…. again, and One of the guy’s let his off and the strap at the end got me right across the face over my eyes. (I shut them just in time, but it still HURT LIKE THE DICKONS!) They all felt so bad and they were all gathered around trying to see my face and offering cold water, and it made me feel super bad to see them so worried that I made myself not cry and told them I was alright. (that always happens when guys get worried. Whether it’s my brothers or friends or dad…. to see a guy so upset because he hurt a girl is something I can’t handle. Just the absolute look of failure and horror because they hurt a girl and they are supposed to protect girls… well it makes me want to try and comfort them while they’re trying to comfort me. 😅)
I already attempted to do so and got out-debated.
She took fake-Alec. 😖I’m laughing so hard right now!
It was a necessary act of terrorism.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 10:48 am #199309Wyoh strikes again 😣 I didn’t get tagged.
It was a necessary act of terrorism.
But… now how are we going to save Leon and Rolf? 😢😢
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March 7, 2025 at 10:52 am #199311But… now how are we going to save Leon and Rolf? 😢😢
You can’t.
Plain and simple.
Want to see what happens???
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 10:53 am #199312Yes… no… yes…
If you seriously kill them… 😫
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March 7, 2025 at 10:54 am #199313I’m not telling you THAT!
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March 7, 2025 at 11:26 am #199322Wouldn’t their deaths right now be kind of disappointing? They wouldn’t even die for their faith or anything. . . just . . . a grudge. For abolishing the slave trade.
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March 7, 2025 at 11:28 am #199323……..Which happened as a result of their faith…….
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March 7, 2025 at 12:12 pm #199325True, but it’s not like, direct. Idk.
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March 7, 2025 at 12:15 pm #199329You are just trying so hard.
it almost makes me regret what’s about to happenNo half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 12:17 pm #199330@ellette-giselle honestly hybridlore’s got a point. It happened as a result of their faith, yes, but it’s been long enough in the story that readers might not be paying attention to that. Also, no one’s brought up why they were captured. I’ll get into that more once I’m finished with math work so hold on a sec. I’m not against what’s about to happen (and kinda saw it coming) but I can think of a few improvements.
Oh, and why I’m not in on the protection business?
I only protect characters whose authors don’t kill them because they like them. LOL
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March 7, 2025 at 12:36 pm #199338Reading through it again, I realized most of my “improvements” were already there and I missed those parts the first time, but there’s still something I can’t put my finger on that doesn’t make sense.
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March 7, 2025 at 12:42 pm #199339You read the very newest section from today?
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