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    Liberty
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      @ellette-giselle

      I got one across the arm on accident and that thing scared for almost a year!

      Woah…um…do I want to ask this?…yes…I will…

      So, uh, who whipped you?

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      #199303
      hybridlore
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        @liberty

        I already attempted to do so and got out-debated. She took fake-Alec. 😖

        You don’t care about Leon?

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        #199305
        Ellette Giselle
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          @liberty

          Right! He’s not Arab…but half Turkish.

          *passes out elegantly on couch.*

           

          Yes…I was behind and just speeding to catch up…

          *pops up*

          So, what do you think? (I assume you finished the section?)

           

          Even if we fail…we should at least try…

          That’s the spirit! *pounds you on the back*

           

          And yes, you have discovered the new squad created just for me.

           

          As for the cow thing, I got lashed in the face with a horse tail several times. THAT HURTS! I’m sure they’re most likely similar.

          No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

          #199307
          Ellette Giselle
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            @liberty

             

            Woah…um…do I want to ask this?…yes…I will…

            So, uh, who whipped you?

            Uh… I don’t remember.

            We were in a group of friends and a few of the guys had horse whips that they added crackers to the ends of. They were trying them out, and one of the guys snapped his back and it cut me across the back of the arm.

             

            Then there was another time when I was with friends and that was the era when all the guys in church were making shepherds slings. My brother and some of the older guys discovered how to add bull-crackers to the end so that when you let the Rock fly, if you flicked your wrist right, the cracker would go off “KAPOW!”

            Well, I was standing too close…. again, and One of the guy’s let his off and the strap at the end got me right across the face over my eyes. (I shut them just in time, but it still HURT LIKE THE DICKONS!) They all felt so bad and they were all gathered around trying to see my face and offering cold water, and it made me feel super bad to see them so worried that I made myself not cry and told them I was alright. (that always happens when guys get worried. Whether it’s my brothers or friends or dad…. to see a guy so upset because he hurt a girl is something I can’t handle. Just the absolute look of failure and horror because they hurt a girl and they are supposed to protect girls… well it makes me want to try and comfort them while they’re trying to comfort me. 😅)

             

             


            @hybridlore

             

            I already attempted to do so and got out-debated. She took fake-Alec. 😖

            I’m laughing so hard right now!

            It was a necessary act of terrorism.

            No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

            #199309
            hybridlore
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              @ellette-giselle

              Wyoh strikes again 😣 I didn’t get tagged.

              It was a necessary act of terrorism.

              But… now how are we going to save Leon and Rolf? 😢😢

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              #199311
              Ellette Giselle
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                @hybridlore

                But… now how are we going to save Leon and Rolf? 😢😢

                You can’t.

                Plain and simple.

                 

                 

                Want to see what happens???

                 

                 

                No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                #199312
                hybridlore
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                  @ellette-giselle

                  Yes… no… yes…

                  If you seriously kill them… 😫

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                  #199313
                  Ellette Giselle
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                    @hybridlore

                     

                    I’m not telling you THAT!

                    No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                    #199322
                    hybridlore
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                      @ellette-giselle

                      Wouldn’t their deaths right now be kind of disappointing? They wouldn’t even die for their faith or anything. . . just . . . a grudge. For abolishing the slave trade.

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                      #199323
                      Ellette Giselle
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                        @hybridlore

                        ……..Which happened as a result of their faith…….

                         

                        No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                        #199325
                        hybridlore
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                          @ellette-giselle

                          True, but it’s not like, direct. Idk.

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                          #199329
                          Ellette Giselle
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                            @hybridlore

                             

                            You are just trying so hard.

                             

                            it almost makes me regret what’s about to happen

                             

                             

                            No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                            #199330
                            Keilah H.
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                              @ellette-giselle honestly hybridlore’s got a point. It happened as a result of their faith, yes, but it’s been long enough in the story that readers might not be paying attention to that. Also, no one’s brought up why they were captured. I’ll get into that more once I’m finished with math work so hold on a sec. I’m not against what’s about to happen (and kinda saw it coming) but I can think  of a few improvements.

                               

                               

                              Oh, and why I’m not in on the protection business?

                              I only protect characters whose authors don’t kill them because they like them. LOL

                              "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                              #199338
                              Keilah H.
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                                Reading through it again, I realized most of my “improvements” were already there and I missed those parts the first time, but there’s still something I can’t put my finger on that doesn’t make sense.

                                "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                                #199339
                                Ellette Giselle
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                                  @keilah-h

                                  You read the very newest section from today?

                                  No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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