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March 7, 2025 at 9:55 am #199287
*wants to ask for another section, but is also concerned of what I might find in it*
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March 7, 2025 at 9:57 am #199288Yes, they are a different people group. I plan on having more on all of this later.
Okay. I’ll mention the ink just for you.
haha! I’m glad you’re so sucked in!!!
Have you thought about changing either Roland’s or Rolf’s name?
*screeches* Nooooo!!!! Nononononono.
I have deliberated over each and every name and the means reflect the character. I cannot change them. They will forever be Roland and Rolf. But, it’ll be okay, because you won’t be seeing them together anymore.
you might not see one of them ever again.Did you get the new section?
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 9:58 am #199289Well you invited me into Alec’s world. 🧐
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 9:58 am #199290Hassan struck him across the face with his horse whip. Rolf bent, gasping from the pain, his hand pressed to his face.
OH MY GOSH!!!!! OW. OW. OW!!!
I know that’s like!! Except a cow delivered the lash to my face…
I can totally feel what Rolf’s feeling right then!!! *sob* SO cruel, Ellette!!!! Do you have any idea how much pain you’re giving Rolf right now? That’s going to hurt for a while. And depending on where it hit his face, something like that can cause a lot of damage…
Did it hit his eye? Because…that’s the worst!
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 10:00 am #199291Ohh… that sounds painful. How did the cow hit you?
… touché.
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March 7, 2025 at 10:00 am #199292Okay. I’ll mention the ink just for you.
Aw. Thanks!🥰
you might not see one of them ever again.
WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NONONONONONO!! Okay, if you have to kill one of them…pick Roland…please…I already like Rolf way too much since he got whipped in the face…and I now know a character who understands what that feels like…
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 10:03 am #199293*gasp of horror*
OH MY WORD!!!
No way!!!
Oh wow! Yikes! Goodness!!!!
I HAD NO IDEA!
Well at least it’s spelled differently and your father is not Arab. (right?)
Goodness! The amount of names of family members I’ve used? *faints*
OH MY GOSH!!!!! OW. OW. OW!!!
YES! Ow is right!!! Those things HURT!!
I got one across the arm on accident and that thing scared for almost a year!
I can totally feel what Rolf’s feeling right then!!! *sob* SO cruel, Ellette!!!!
Hey! You are looking at the wrong person! I didn’t hit Rolf with a horsewhip!
On the author side, I’m glad you know what he’s going through.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 10:06 am #199294*wants to ask for another section, but is also concerned of what I might find in it*
That’s just a risk your gonna have to take.
WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NONONONONONO!! Okay, if you have to kill one of them…pick Roland…please…I already like Rolf way too much since he got whipped in the face…and I now know a character who understands what that feels like…
Well, let’s see.
Roland: Broken/sprained ankle
Rolf: Slave traders who are so furious with him that they think killing him is too merciful.
Hmmm……..
Wonder who has a better chance of survival?
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 10:06 am #199295Nearby, he saw Rolf lying on his side, his shoulders jerking with silent, tearless sobs. Leon couldn’t blame him.
😭😭😭
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 10:07 am #199296Wow. I have not gotten this good of a reaction in a long time!!!
I’m LOVING THIS!!!
I mean, I got an entire new squad created just for me!!!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
March 7, 2025 at 10:09 am #199297@liberty *whispers* I think we’re just encouraging her. . . 👀😟
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March 7, 2025 at 10:11 am #199298I was milking her…and she hit me in the face with her tail. Well, it’s happened many of times, so I received different kinds of lashes. The ones I’m thinking of when I read about Rolf was the horrid dry-tail flicks. It usually hurts the most when only a few strands of their tail hit your face.
But man, they hurt bad. Catching your eyeball is the worst ever! The cows are so strong that even a simple tail flick can render a milker blind with tears and pain for some minutes.
But, I’d rather have a dry stinging lash…than a slobbing manure slap on my face… *gagging* Fortunately, that didn’t often happen to me, but some other family members…cringe*
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 10:14 am #199299*gasp of horror*
Well at least it’s spelled differently and your father is not Arab. (right?)
Right! He’s not Arab…but half Turkish.
Goodness! The amount of names of family members I’ve used? *faints*
My goodness. Poor you!
Hey! You are looking at the wrong person! I didn’t hit Rolf with a horsewhip!
I know, I know…
I mean, I got an entire new squad created just for me!!!
Wait, what does that mean?
Wow. I have not gotten this good of a reaction in a long time!!!
Yes…I was behind and just speeding to catch up…
Wonder who has a better chance of survival?
*sobbing* NO!!!!!
*whispers* I think we’re just encouraging her. . . 👀😟
*more wailing*
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 10:15 am #199300The KP WITNESS PROTECTION has been initiated to protect characters from their authors. Beware.
By the way, I love this line!!!! I feel like it’s so true…we must protect Rolf!!!!
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
March 7, 2025 at 10:15 am #199301Even if we fail…we should at least try…
"He who never quotes will never be quoted." ~Charles Spurgeon
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