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    TheShadow
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      @hybridlore

      It is a good word, isn’t it? Using too many synonyms can be a problem though too (probably my biggest XD).

      “Our house is full of ducks!!!!”

      #198972
      hybridlore
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        @theshadow

        It just sounds so much better than “looked”. XD

        @shadow @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint @keilah-h @theducktator @savannah-grace2009 @sorry-if-i-forgot-anyone-😢

        Next two chapters! 😆 I’m fairly pleased with these. Chapter 13 (Alec’s first POV!) may need to be extended a bit, but it certainly ups the stakes a bit. At least, I hope so.

        https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-zMrzq00iV3Dl0rNRM11Es_dJGZWv-3pF2haGGc5x4o/edit

        "Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.

        #198976
        Ellette Giselle
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          @hybridlore

          *Scream of pleasure!!!*

          No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

          #198984
          Ellette Giselle
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            @hybridlore

            GIRL!

            How do you do it?!?!

            I am so hooked! OH MY WORD! I want this made into a MOVIE!!

            Wow! This is so cool. I’m worried about Everett! I hope he makes it out of this one okay. What I wouldn’t give to be in his head as he reads through all those questions!!

             

            AND ALEC!!! Oh my word! This is great!!

            No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

            #198986
            hybridlore
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              @ellette-giselle

              Aw, Ellette, I don’t even really know what to say. I’m so, so glad you like it! Thank you for all the encouragement!

              I want this made into a MOVIE!!

              Every author’s not-so-secret dream xD

              Yeah, poor Everett. It’d be a challenge for sure.

              So… was it obvious before this chapter what Alec did for his job? Do you feel like you have a good understanding of it now? Should I have dripped the details more slowly, or is the semi-info-dump okay here?

              "Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.

              #198987
              Ellette Giselle
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                @hybridlore

                It’s true! The way you write… I can see it all clearly in my mind! It really IS like a movie!

                 

                 

                So… was it obvious before this chapter what Alec did for his job?

                 

                I knew he did something with technology and people, and I knew he worked with the government. This didn’t come as a surprise to me at all. It was good.

                No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

                #198988
                hybridlore
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                  @ellette-giselle

                  Well, I’m glad it comes through! I don’t even know what I’m doing… I just pray and try to picture it.

                  Okay, good. I was trying to put foreshadowing and hints in the chapters before so that it’d all make sense, but since the story was still forming at some stages (Chapter 4, I think, the one where Alec comes home for dinner, needs some altering, since Alec isn’t that opposed to his job yet) some of the comments he makes don’t make sense.

                  "Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.

                  #198989
                  Ellette Giselle
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                    @hybridlore

                    Yeah, I did get a feeling he didn’t love what he was doing when he was talking with Cole.

                     

                    Hey, that is the best way to write. Keep at it!

                    No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

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                    Keilah H.
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                      @hybridlore

                      It’s true! The way you write… I can see it all clearly in my mind! It really IS like a movie!

                      Gotta agree with Ellette on this. You write very clearly.

                      "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

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                      Keilah H.
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                        also I read your next few chapters!! They’re great!

                        "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                        #199038
                        hybridlore
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                          @ellette-giselle

                          Yeah… 😝 Oopsy. Not to mention, the end of Chapter 13 kind of makes it seem like he’s unsure about what he does. Which maybe he is. I have to solidify his arc soon xD.

                          Hey, that is the best way to write. Keep at it!

                          I’ll try! 🫡

                          "Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.

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                          hybridlore
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                            @keilah-h

                            Awesome, thank you!

                            "Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.

                            #199078
                            Linus Smallprint
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                              @hybridlore

                              Awkward bathroom conversations. Fun…

                              A monitor is watching. Creepy. I do know that feeling of, I could answer what I really think, but I know I will get bad marks. Although, the stakes are higher for Everette and Sara. Why does this class keep on reminding me of my Grade 11 English 20?

                              I see some family tension on the horizon in the Bauer family, but Alec doesn’t seem fully convinced at the moment that dealing with the religious groups is the right thing to do.

                              Good chapters again!

                              Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                              #199084
                              hybridlore
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                                @linus-smallprint

                                Yeah… 😅

                                That’s really interesting. Crazy to realize that this really isn’t too far off from what is happening in real life today.

                                In Canada, do you have the same guaranteed rights as in the US’s Constitution? I’m assuming it’s very similar. Freedom of assembly, freedom of speech, freedom of religion, etc.?

                                Oh yeah, there will definitely be a lot of tension in their family. One of my favorite parts of the book actually.

                                Thanks!

                                "Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.

                                #199086
                                Linus Smallprint
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                                  @hybridlore

                                  In Canada, do you have the same guaranteed rights as in the US’s Constitution? I’m assuming it’s very similar. Freedom of assembly, freedom of speech, freedom of religion, etc.?

                                  Yes, we do have the same rights, but that doesn’t stop teachers from grading things based on what you write about instead of the actual quality of writing. I’ve heard stories of people getting a really good grade for a poorly written essay (if I recall correctly, this person only turned in a few sentences and just stated what she thought without looking for any evidence), just because this person agreed with the teacher on the topic. Another student who wrote a really well-written essay that disagreed with the teacher got a bad mark. After that, he lost the motivation to spend the time writing a well-structured essay.

                                  Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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