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Sorry, I forgot to add you. Chapter 3 and 4 are out!
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
*Incoherent squealing*
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkDo y’all have strong thoughts on either of the chapters?
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
I started reading them but I had to pause to help my sister with her hair. I’m about to finish up and then I’ll let you know. Sorry it’s taking me a minute!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
Okay, first off, Alec is my favorite character.
Second, I LOVE THIS! This is so well done! I can totally see this going somewhere! You’ve really got talent.
One small thing, is Josiah the father? You said that Cole’s mother sat down next to Josiah. I was assuming it was their father, but maybe if you said something like, “His father” or “her husband”. We haven’t really met him yet, so it’s hard to remember.
Man… this is just really good. I am so 100% hooked.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
btw, I NEED more Alec scenes!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
I NEED and Alec mood board because I just scrolled through that whole forum and there is none!
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
No worries! Haha, I like Alec a lot too. He’s super fun to write. Thank you! I’m so glad you’re enjoying it so far.
Oh 😅 Whoops, that is something I missed in editing. Josiah is their father, yep, but he’s not supposed to be in that scene anymore… originally, I had it where he was, but now I changed it to he and Elena are divorced, and the twins don’t see him very often. That’s something I might end up changing again, I’m not really sure about it so if you have advice I’m up to hear it. He wasn’t a very strong character anyways, so either way he won’t add much to the story. I thought it would make the kids more interesting characters if their parents were divorced, but I can always change it back later if I need to. (I don’t like how YA books always have missing parents, but it’s hard to find stuff to do with them.) Also, it kind of highlights how their family is sort of broken because the characters don’t know God, but yeah, idk.
Lolol 😂 Yeah, I have yet to make an Alec mood board. I’ll try to make one, though. Finding pics for boy characters is kind of weird, because then I have to scroll through a bunch of pictures of guys, and my family gets very confused. 😂
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
Your request has been granted. (You inspired me.)
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
I LOVE it!!!! So well done!!! AMAZING!! Now I can picture him!
Ooo, I have two ideas for the father. Actually, five.
1. He was killed in an accident at work. Maybe even the same job Alec now has. This could add some stress for them because they worry about Alec.
2. He disappeared. This is where you pull something in where he was a Christian and then was arrested or deported or something, but no one knows what happened because he never got a chance to share his new faith with his family. example: he’s been looking into this and really wondering, he makes the decision to follow Christ while at work, he is then told to do something that he can’t do without compromising his faith, so then he gets in trouble and is never able to tell his family.
3. Same situation as above, except that the mother knows that he was seeking truth from God and knows that he chose to turn to God, and then he’s arrested. At the time, the twins and Alec too are too young to remember (or maybe were gone) so they only know that there was tension and then all their mom tells them is that he left and he isn’t coming back
4. Same situation. Except this time the kids are there when he’s arrested. They don’t know the charges, maybe they come home from school as the police/government is leaving and they hear from their mother that their dad has been arrested for braking the law. Then they believe their father was a criminal. This gives drive to all of them, but especially the boys, to show that they are not failures just because their father was. This could be why Alec is in the position that he is in, because he wants to prove that he stands for justice and he can chose what’s right, even if his father was a criminal. This adds a cool depth to his character, and a struggle for him because he’s trying to obey the law, unlike his father, yet he begins to question the law, like his father.
5. He’s in a job that constantly takes him far away from home, so he’s not around very often.
I really like the idea of number 4, but you do whatever you think fits best to the story. (which might be none of these)
Anyways, hope that helps.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
Oh my goodnessssss. I just typed out a super long response to your post, and then Wyoh ate it because I wasn’t signed in. 😭😭
I love these ideas. Thank you so much for all the time you’re putting into this (I love bouncing ideas off of someone! There’s a lot of stuff I haven’t figured out with this.) And I’m glad you like the Alec board, it was fun to make.
I really like the idea of #4, as well. It would put more pressure on them and make it way more interesting when Sara tries to tell her family about God… yeah, Elena is going to freak out. 😂 I’m still figuring out all the rules and stuff for how they’re allowed to punish Christians already (I think they’re not supposed to talk about their faith publicly, and the new law is going to prohibit or limit private meetings.) Usually they have to find something else to prosecute them on, but it could be really interesting if the dad tried to secretly vandalize (? I don’t think that’s the word I’m thinking of, but it’ll do) the government’s efforts to prosecute Christians from his job inside, and they find out. For future reasons though, I’m wondering if that will be too… redundant? Also, then I have to figure out where their dad is and what I’m going to do with him (is he dead, in prison, rehabilitation camp, or whatever) But I do really like that idea. I’ll have to think about it and figure out what I should do. Thanks again for all your help! I’ll ttyl, since I gotta go start school. 😖
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
UGH! Wyoh just did it to me a few minutes ago!! She’s horrid.
I think it could add some really cool elements. Maybe he does try to stop them, maybe he refuses to do something they tell him to do. idk. However it happens, I feel like it could add some cool levels.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
*Reads a little bit*
*Loves it*
*Makes a mental note to read more, and subscribes*
"If I don't like something, it's probably sanctification. Ugh." -E.C.S.
These next chapters were great!! The conflict so far is amazing and I really like how your going at a steady pace by building up Sara’a conflict, your doing it really well!!
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