The Color of Hope

[hybridlore]

Cole Bauer

INTP 🧡 Homeschooler 🧡 Violinist 🧡 Current WIP: TCoH

[TheShadow]

@hybridlore

Just caught up with this, and it’s great!! Seriously, everything was really good, I love your style and I’m already so invested in this story, can’t wait to read more!!

"No! Monkeys should have pets, all monkeys should have pets!"

[hybridlore]

@theshadow

Thank you soo much!! 🥰 I’m so glad people seem to like it already. The next chapter is where it starts to get interesting. I’ll maybe be posting that tomorrow, we’ll see.

INTP 🧡 Homeschooler 🧡 Violinist 🧡 Current WIP: TCoH

[hybridlore]

@theshadow

Do you have thoughts on the blurb? Ellette mentioned she would prefer for it to share less about the overall plot. I wondered if other people agreed with that too.

INTP 🧡 Homeschooler 🧡 Violinist 🧡 Current WIP: TCoH

[TheShadow]

@hybridlore

Your welcome, looking forward to the next chapter!

 Ellette mentioned she would prefer for it to share less about the overall plot. I wondered if other people agreed with that too.

I thought it was fine, although I think if you did remove parts about the main plot more than it would be more intriguing.

"No! Monkeys should have pets, all monkeys should have pets!"

[Ellette Giselle]

@hybridlore

 

Okay…. I’ve been playing around a bit. You have a really strong style for the blurb. You’re hitting key intrigue rhythms and you’ve got enough catch words…. you just kinda give too much. (at least in my opinion.) Okay…. see how you feel about these.

 

Denver, 2053

Aspiring journalist Sara Bauer has synesthesia–a condition which, for her, gives words color and shape, texture and personality. She dreams of a career writing for DenNet, the local government-monitored news platform, as a powerful voice informing and spurring others to action. But the murky depression and lack of purpose she struggles with make her wonder if her words will ever matter.

When a classmate invites her to an underground meeting, she starts to wonder if this was what she’s been missing. But her twin brother, Cole, isn’t so sure that the meetings are worth the risk. A new law threatens to turn the opposition against such gatherings into persecution–and with their graduation approaching, one wrong move could jeopardize their entire future. Is the hope Sara’s found worth risking everything–even her dream?

 

 

Denver 2053

In a world where truth bends under the weight of surveillance, aspiring young journalist Sara Bauer finds herself engulfed in the vibrant chaos. Blessed—or perhaps cursed—with synesthesia, Sara translates the world around her into a stunning tapestry of colors, shapes, and textures, each nuance feeding her longing to evoke change through her writing. Yet amid the darkness of a society stifled by governmental control, Sara grapples with her fading sense of purpose, questioning whether her words can ever find significance.

When a classmate invites her to a clandestine gathering, Sara feels a flicker of hope ignite within her—a hope that this might offer her the clarity and purpose she desperately craves. But as her twin brother, Cole, warns of the dangers in a world where a perilous new law threatens to criminalize such beliefs, Sara faces an agonizing dilemma: Is the promise of hope worth the crushing weight of potential risk?

 

Denver 2053

Aspiring journalist Sara Bauer has synesthesia–a condition which, for her, gives words color and shape, texture and personality. She dreams of a career writing for DenNet, the local government-monitored news platform, as a powerful voice informing and spurring others to action. But the murky depression and lack of purpose she struggles with make her wonder if her words will ever matter.

When a classmate invites her to an underground meeting, everything changes. Sara begins to wonder if hope in the things of this world is right. Perhaps she has found the One in whom her hope will find a refuge. But her twin brother, Cole, isn’t so sure that the meetings are worth the risk. A new law threatens to turn the opposition against such belief into persecution–and with their graduation approaching, one wrong move could jeopardize their entire future. Is the hope Sara’s found worth risking everything–even her dream?

 

Okay. idk if you like any of these. I felt like they still get the point across without it being all there in front of you. You know? Like it’s there under the surface, but you’re going to have to earn the knowledge by reading the book. *shrug* if you don’t like them I won’t be offended in the least. Blurbs are sort of a pet peeve of mine, so I’m always super picky. If you keep yours it’ll be totally fine. Like I said, it’s well written, and while it does have a good deal of the plot in it, I think it still works.

 

A good rule I heard once was this: only clearly state things found in the first three chapters at the most. Hint at the rest.

 

Anyhow.

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

[Ellette Giselle]

@hybridlore

Hey! I recognize some of those Cole quotes! 😉

So glad you were able to find some you liked!

 

I really love these boards. You really have got skill with them.

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

[hybridlore]

@ellette-giselle

Wow. *round of applause* You wrote all these? That’s insane.

I’m getting what you mean now, and I have a couple ideas. Your suggestions were super, super helpful. I’ll try to look at them later on my computer and adjust the main blurb.

One thing, though— I noticed that in most of your examples (the last one hints at it) you pointed to her faith more vaguely, more just saying she “finds hope”. Do you think that’s stronger than outright mentioning she becomes a Christian? It gives the reader more of a vague idea of the plot, and it might draw in more unbelievers… But it’s a major theme in the plot, so that’s why I tried to mention it. By chapter seven, it’s really obvious that the underground “meetings” are in fact church meetings. I don’t know, I was just interested to hear what your reasoning behind this was. I would also love to hear from some other people their opinions, so maybe I’ll write up a new version and have people vote.

INTP 🧡 Homeschooler 🧡 Violinist 🧡 Current WIP: TCoH

[hybridlore]

@ellette-giselle

Aw, thanks!! 😊 Yeah, I think maybe all of them came from you. Thanks for that, by the way! 😁

INTP 🧡 Homeschooler 🧡 Violinist 🧡 Current WIP: TCoH

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