The Color of Hope

[hybridlore]

Alright, I’m finally starting to post chapters of my WIP up for critiques. This is going to be a Google Doc link with restricted access, so if you want to read it (and you’re not already added) just request access and I should be able to approve it. This is a first draft (rough draft), so right now I’m not looking for line-by-line critiques, but I would still love to know your guys’ overall thoughts about everything. So excited to hear what y’all think! 🥰

It’s currently at 23,000 ish words, fourteen chapters. The link I’m about to share has the first two, and I’ll probably slowly add in the rest later. Here’s the moodboard and the blurb for the novel:

Denver, 2053

Aspiring journalist Sara Bauer has synesthesia–a condition which, for her, gives words color and shape, texture and personality. She dreams of a career writing for DenNet, the local government-monitored news platform, as a powerful voice informing and spurring others to action. But the murky depression and lack of purpose she struggles with make her wonder if her words will ever matter.

When a classmate invites her to an underground church meeting, she starts to wonder if Jesus could be what–or who–she’s missing. But her twin brother, Cole, isn’t so sure that the meetings are worth the risk. A new law threatens to turn the opposition against religion into persecution–and with their graduation approaching, one wrong move could jeopardize their entire future. Is the hope Sara’s found in Christ worth risking everything–even her dream?

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[hybridlore]

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Here’s the link:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pSXTTsloPa9NeeYjCJlK_Q5-6Ryc0cWlqdUWnst4oBw/edit?usp=sharing

• This reply was modified 1 month ago by hybridlore.

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[hybridlore]

Sorry to the people who I sent out the wrong link to 😂 Working on fixing that

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[Esther]

@hybridlore

Sounds so cool!! Requested access!

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[hybridlore]

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@esther-c Awesome! 😁

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[hybridlore]

Also, please excuse the cringiness of the first chapter. It has absolutely no point other than to establish the characters and setting, and it will probably be the first thing I rewrite 😅

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[Andrew]

@hybridlore

I’ll check it out, but I have a lot of stuff that I should read but I haven’t gotten to because… *cough* procrastination *cough cough* so maybe I’ll get to it. Request sent.

I have sagely sageness everyone!
#AnduthForever (Lord Willing)

[hybridlore]

@raxforge

Great, thanks!!

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[hybridlore]

@raxforge

I have a feeling you’ll enjoy some of the underground church chapters, or maybe be able to help me with some of what the pastor says.

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[TheShadow]

@hybridlore

This sounds great, I’lol look at it tomorrow.

“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”

[Ellette Giselle]

@hybridlore

OH MY GOODNESS!!!

GIRL!

I knew you could write but I didn’t know you could write!

MAN! How do you do that!

 

Also, please excuse the cringiness of the first chapter. It has absolutely no point other than to establish the characters and setting, and it will probably be the first thing I rewrite 😅

*screech!* No!!! NONONO! Whatever you do, LEAVE IT! You did what I’ve never been able to do. You established your world and characters in one of the best ways possible and it works so well! I know your character’s personality, I know Cole has asthma (or something close to it), I know their likes and dislikes, I know their world…..

Man, this is so, so good and I’m completely DYING to read more! So well done.

 

 

I actually have a critique, but It’s for the blurb. I would suggest removing the part about the church meetings…. or else making it more vague. I went into the story not having read the blurb, and I really like how it’s unfolding for me. Then I read the blurb and I was like… oh. Well, okay. Now I know where this is going.

I wouldn’t add that part.

I can work with you on some blurb ideas if you want. Or you can keep it. Up to you. Just my thought.

 

Anyways, I can’t wait for more!!!

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[Andrew]

@hybridlore

I have a feeling you’ll enjoy some of the underground church chapters, or maybe be able to help me with some of what the pastor says.

REALLY!?! Awww, yeaaaah! I’m going to enjoy those chapters :}

I have sagely sageness everyone!
#AnduthForever (Lord Willing)

[hybridlore]

@ellette-giselle

Awww, I’m so glad you like it!!! That means so much to me 🥰🥰 Honestly. Thank you so much for reading it.

Welll….. 😅 I didn’t really know where I was going with it when I started, I just knew I had to start. I’ll probably keep it as like, the same scene, but I still need to rewrite parts of it. It’s also super short compared to what I’m aiming for with each chapter now, so maybbeee I can leave most of the scene that’s already there and then just fix the ending and add on.

For the blurb, I get what you mean. That doesn’t have to be the final version, but it was the one I settled on most recently. I understand the no-spoilers thing, but I really don’t know if I can give an accurate picture of the book without mentioning the church meetings because Sara’s conversion is one of the main points of the book. You get what I mean? And then the end of the blurb shows her inner struggle, what she’ll have to overcome. I’m up for changing it eventually if I can find something that works as well, so if you have specific ideas about how much you would want to see in there without spoiling too much, I’d love to see them.

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[hybridlore]

@raxforge

Awesome!! I think the first one is… *checks* Chapter 7. So only a few more to go.

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

[hybridlore]

I know I’ve already shared these before, but here are the character moodboards in case anyone wants to see them!

Sara Bauer

'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

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