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March 15, 2025 at 6:49 pm #200118
@loopylin lol
I know how to make pasta, grilled cheese (and turkey melts, which are like grilled cheese but you put turkey inside it underneath the cheese), rice, and I think I have recipes for salmon, both baked and grilled, but I wouldn’t remember it off the top of my head.
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
March 15, 2025 at 7:21 pm #200122@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon @koshka @esther-c @anyone-else
Part 2 of the scene I sharedđ¤ (and this still isn’t all of it…still working on it atm)
Franzâs gaze didnât stray from Rikerâs. âI thought you were deadâŚwe all did.â
Rikerâs back pressed against the wall.
He should never have left the Altmann home in a rush.
Even if Leon didnât understand, and he likely didnât, storming off had been stupid.
He tried to open his mouth but found he couldnât.
Franz stepped forward.
He tried to step back.
But there was nowhere to go.
Helpless, just as he had been for years, left to the mercy of his father, who had little. With not a single person to protect him, not a single person to save him from the abuse he couldnât escape.
He never had been able to escape his father.
Maybe it was naive of him to ever believe he could.
Maybe he would never escape Franzâs clutches.
Even the thought sent a tremor through Rikerâs body.
âYou left us to believe you dead for seven entire years, left us to assume the Amerikaner had given you exEcution by firing squad or else you had died somewhere out in the wilderness, and now, after all that, NOW you return?â
âP-PleaseâŚI-I didnât mean toâŚtoââ
âHas begging ever gotten you anywhere, boy?â Franz stepped forward and gripped the front of Rikerâs shirt, breath tainted with the scent of alcohol, âHas all that time away from me made you soft? Has all that time away from me made you forget just how much pain I can inflict?â
Riker tried to struggle, tried to fight.
But he couldnât break free.
Shadows taunted him from the corners of his vision.
Not the shadows. Not the darkness. Not the pain. Not helplessness. Not abuse.
Not again.
Please, God, please not again.
Franzâs face loomed closer, and he sneered, âItâs past time you get reminded of why you donât cross me, boy. Heinz,â he turned his head slightly, âcontinue whatever you meant to do.â
âPleaseâŚp-please, n-n-no.â Riker whispered, pleaded.
And how he hated the way his body trembled.
Heinz nodded at the others.
They neared, and Franz released Rikerâs shirt, shoving him towards the two burly men.
âDid you expect me to help you?â Franz chuckled, merely standing beside Heinz with arms crossed. âI thought you were dead for seven years. Some pain will be good for you.â
One man held Riker still whilst the other brandished a leather cord, wrapping and tightening Rikerâs wrists together, tight enough to draw blood.
He couldnât break free.
He would never break free.
He would never be free from his father, from the shackles, from the darkness, from shame, from the abuse, from the pain, from his sins.
God didnât bring freedomâŚwhy would He?
Riker didnât deserve it.
Maybe his father had been right all along, maybe Riker wasnât worthy of anyoneâs love.
Maybe God did love him.
But maybe God didnât love Riker Schind as much as He loved everyone else.
And just the idea of such a sentiment being truth sent tears down Rikerâs cheeks.
âCrying now?â Heinz taunted. âYour boy has grown far too soft, Franz. Shall we remedy that?â
âIndeed, we shall, Heinz.â
âThen please, be my guest, FranzâŚteach your son a lesson long overdue.â
~***~
 Franz.
How one name could make Leonâs blood boil was beyond even his own comprehension.
His fists clenched.
That man was Rikerâs fatherâŚthe alcoholicâŚRikerâs abuser.
He knew something had been wrong when Riker didnât return to the Altmann home by five.
Riker wasnât always on time, but when he said he would be on time, he was on time.
He knew something was wrong.
And his suspicions were correct.
He leaned back against a brick wall, knowing full well how much he wanted to march into the alleyway and demand for Rikerâs release and maybe even fight whoever tried to stop him if he needed to.
But if that would only put Riker in more danger, it wasnât worth the risk.
Leon silently smiled to himself.
He, too, once would have attacked Riker.
How strange it felt to care so much for the man he once hated.
Maybe that was just a testament to Godâs redemptive power.
âLeon.â
He turned in a moment, muscles tense, jaw taut, fists still clenched, sweat beading on his forehead.
But it was onlyâŚonlyâŚâIsaiah, Yosef?â He dropped his voice to a harsh whisper. âWhatâŚwhy did you follow me?â
âWe assumed something was wrong when Riker didnât return, and then with you setting off tooâŚAbba thought you might need some backup.â
âItâs dangerous. Neither of you shouldâve come here. Especially you, Isaiah.â
Isaiah adjusted his round glasses. âNothing can stop me from defending the ones I love.â
Leon opened his mouth, but Yosef spoke first. âWe should get some help.â
âIsaiah, you shouldââ
âNein, Leon, Yosef will be much faster. Yosef, my son, see if you can get some help from an American or two. Hurry.â
âJa, Abba.â
Yosef rushed off, and Leon faced Isaiah with a scowl. âYou shouldnât be here.â
âNeither should you,â Isaiah smiled, âbut that isnât stopping you. Neither will it stop me.â
Darn that stubborn old man that he loved so dearly.
Leon heaved out a sigh. ââŚJust stay out of sight.â
âI thought that was the plan for both of us. Do you have something else in mind?â
âNot yet,â
Isaiah frowned. âLeonâŚâ
âI didnât say I have any other plans,â he tucked a loose curl behind his left ear, âbut if any of them lay another hand on RikerâŚâ
âWe canât justââ
The echo of a heavy, firm slap reverberated through the air followed by a quiet, almost muffled-sounding whimper.
Leonâs fists clenched, his blood surged, and he clenched his teeth.
Even Isaiahâs jaw ticked, and his grip on the brick wall seemed to tighten, judging by his paler knuckles.
âAh, and what do we have here? We have a few spies, Heinz.â
âThen bring âem over, Henrik.â
The burly man pulled both Leon and Isaiah into the alley, shoving them both against the left wall.
Heinzâs eyes sparked. âLeon WagnerâŚshouldâve known.â
Leon quickly glanced at Riker.
But if he looked at Rikerâs pale, trembling form and bloodied face for very long, he knew heâd snap. So, he shifted his gaze back to Heinz and lifted an amused eyebrow. âStill a man that craves blood and violence, I see.â
Franz turned, and Leon clenched his fists only so that he wouldnât ram his fist into Franzâs face. Franz raised his blackâflecked with grayâbrows and faced Heinz. âYou know this man?â
âHeâs a filthy Jude,â Heinz spat, âa stain on good German society. And a friend of Rikerâs, if my memory doesnât fail meâŚâ
âA Jude? I should have known, shouldâve known youâd fraternize with the enemy, shouldâve known you would disappoint me in some other way, boy.â
Franz gripped Rikerâs hair, but Riker didnât make a sound.
Rather, he merely stared up at his father with tears in his eyesâŚand total terror in his gaze, terror no parent should be the one to cause.
âThere is no need to treat your son like that, Herr Schind.â Isaiah said, though even his voice trembled.
Not with sadness, or even fear.
Since when had Leon ever heard Isaiah soundâŚangry?
âI donât allow others to tell me how to deal with my own son.â Franz retorted.
âPleaseâŚplease, they-they didnât do any-anythingâ”
Franzâs hard slap sent Rikerâs head back against the brick wall.
Riker moaned and cowered further, slightly lifting his arms to defend himself.
Heinz chuckled. âHold onto Wagner, Henrik. I still have plans waiting for him.â
Henrik gripped Leonâs shoulders, his grip tight, sneering, âWeâll end you this time, filthy pig.â
Franz loomed closer to Riker, stopping with another slap, eliciting a whimper from his son. âYouâre a mistake and you always have been,â he spat, âyour mother had so many complications when she was pregnant with you, everyone thought she wouldnât make it, but she refused what the doctor offeredâŚâ
If he got his hands on FranzâŚeven Leon shivered at his own thought.
That wasnât very Christlike, was it?
âBut if you ask me, that woman shouldâve terminated her pregnancy when she had the chance.â
Forget being Christlike.
Leon wrenched himself free of Henrikâs grip, blood boiling, footsteps echoing.
He stepped up to Franz.
He curled his right hand.
And Leonâs fist met Franzâs nose with a crack.
Franz cursed and staggered, his hands rising up to his bloodied face. He roared and barreled forward, ramming his own fist into Leonâs stomach.
Leon gasped and stumbled, slightly falling back against the wall beside Riker.
If Franz wanted a fight, heâd get a fight.
He lifted his other hand. Hands gripped his arm.
Leon wheeled. Whoever daredâŚâLeon, we canât take on four men.â
And yet the tremble in Isaiahâs voice told Leon that Isaiah was just as furious as he was.
Was punching Franz Leonâs best idea?
Probably not.
But oh, it felt so good.
âYouâŚyou filthyââ
âI would save the name calling for another day, Herr Schind.â
March 15, 2025 at 7:46 pm #200123@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon @koshka @esther-c @anyone-else
and Part 3 (and I might share more from what would be the next scene too, but this is the end of the exact scene I’ve been sharing)
A vaguely familiar masculine voiceâŚnot very familiar, but familiar regardless.
A blue-eyed, blonde-haired man in a US Army uniform lifted a pistol along with a small grin. âUnless, of course, you wish to continue this fight, which will not end well for you.â
Why wasâŚwhy did he lookâŚsoâŚErich Braun?
Replace the American uniform for a Schutzstaffel uniform, take away some signs of age, and it would be one of the officers that worked in the campâŚand not a kind one.
Heinzâs eyes narrowed. âErich Braun?â
âThat is Captain Braun to you, Herr Becker. I would advise that you and your henchmen flee from here before I must involve others.â
âCaptainââ
âYou have no justifiable reason to attack these men.â
âHeâs a filthyââ
âWeâre all filthy in the sight of God, Heinz,â Erich stepped close to the towering man, âuntil He washes us clean.â
Heinz grunted and almost stepped closer to Erich, but the blonde rammed his pistol into Heinzâs jaw. Heinz cried out and staggered backwards with a string of curses. âHenrikâŚâ But a quick glance seemed to tell him that both Henrik and his other friend had long since fled.
Erich smoothed down his blonde hair and smirked at Heinz and Franz. âWould you care to leave, gentlemen, or shall I escort you both to prison?â
Heinz shared a glance with Franz, and both men quickly fled the alleyway, though not without a glare Rikerâs direction and each with a hard shove against Leon.
Leon stumbled slightly.
Erich glanced after the fleeing men before turning his attention to Leon and Isaiah. âAre you alrightâŚ?â
Of course he didnât know their names.
He wouldâve only known them by the numbers forever tattooed on their left forearms.
If Leon was supposed to feel grateful for Erich Braunâs help, well, then he didnât feel the way he was supposed to feel.
âIsaiah Altmann and Leon Wagner. Itâs a pleasure to see you again, Captain Braun.â
The young manâs bright eyes dimmed. ââŚI donât see how it could be a pleasure.â
Was thatâŚregret and evenâŚshame?
âI can help you in getting both of you and Riker safe.â
âDanke, Captainââ
âNo.â
Leon didnât realize how forcefully he had spat out that single word until both Erich and Isaiah faced him, Erich with remorse, Isaiah with confusion.
âLeonâŚâ
âIâm not going to trust him, not after what he was apart ofâŚwhat he did.â
Erichâs gaze fell, but Isaiah frowned. âLeon.â
âNo, Isaiah, donât tell me to trustââ
âFine, then remain here or else go back to the house, but I am going to help Riker, and if you donât want to, then go on your way and stay out of our way.â
Leon winced slightly.
âBut Isaiahââ
But Isaiah was already on his way over to Riker, concern etched into every feature.
Leon huffed out another sigh. âFineâŚIâll come. But only to protect you and Riker.â
Because he wasnât about to so easily trust Erich Braun.
March 15, 2025 at 8:21 pm #200124Ouch. Leon, you’ve still got a pocket full of broken glass to work out.
Also…how did Erich end up in the US Army?!
(thank you for hitting Franz for me, Leon)
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Fork the GorkMarch 15, 2025 at 9:15 pm #200126Poor Riker. I hate Franz.
Any salad can be a Caesar salad if you stab it hard enough.
March 15, 2025 at 9:23 pm #200127How… Wow. That’s pretty spectacular. I like it
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By the way, I have this goofy habit of adding dialogue onto the end of what the author writes. Erich was in the middle of threatening to clean the place with his gun before I realized the conversation had changed. XD
Which is probably from how happy I was to see someone show up who could give them a what for. It worked out well! As always, great fun to read and with some good for thought. *applause*
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
March 15, 2025 at 9:28 pm #200130@freed_and_redeemed Love it!!
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March 16, 2025 at 7:03 am #200140Great job!!!! I really liked it! I sure was nervous for them!
Poor Riker. I am really excited to see Erich show up!! He was a character I really liked from the last book. I’m really happy to see him again. I hope he gets a lot of “screen time”. đ
I am wondering why Leon and Riker seem to be struggling with the lessons we struggled with and learned in the last book….. Leon forgiveness, Riker doubt in God…. but I guess if that’s not the drive of this book like it was the last, then it should be okay.
Also, I’ve never seen a guy tuck his hair behind his ear. I think that’s a pretty pure girl move. đ¤Ł
Otherwise, this was really well written! Really good!
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