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I found these RP prompts too! For anyone looking for some 😊
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebAh yeah maybe!!
Ooh interesting!
Thank you for the link of the video!! I’ll check it out 🙂
#HugRikerSquad
@godlyfantasy12 lol good. I don’t have any people I’m interested in, nor people interested in me, and I hope to keep it that way.
My characters on the other hand………
heh heh…….
this’ll be FUN…….
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
@esther-c Nice prompts….
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
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@godlyfantasy12. @gwyndalf-the-wise. @lightoverdarkness6. @mineralizedwritings. @anyone-else-I-am-momentarily-forgetting-lol.
Sooo…I was gonna share this later…but heh…I finished it this morning and I couldn’t resist. 😂😅
So…anywho…I have this scene, likely going to be in my book Allies & Lies (which now only has 1 protag. bc I needed to split the 4 MC’s into separate books, lol…) and is a good scene, in my opinion, but also…heartbreaking…heh…😭💖😭💖
But I wanted everyone else’s thoughts…🥰
So…here we go!!!
The house was quiet…too quiet. The kids were there…but Aadelheide was missing.
Abelard turned to his brother-in-law. “Where’s Aadelheide?”
Leon’s gaze fell and his eyes closed.
Abelard stepped closer to the table. “Leon, where’s Aadelheide? Where’s your wife…where’s my twin sister?”
Leon’s fingers wrapped tighter around his cup. His left hand was bare of a ring.
Abelard stumbled backward. The world spun around him. His heart pounded in his head. “No…Leon, no…she…she can’t…no…”
Leon slowly looked up, eyes bright with tears. “…She’s dead.”
Tears coursed down Abelard’s cheeks and he sank into a chair. His sister…his twin…was dead. Just like Neesh. Just like so many. “How…w-why?”
“Ask the ones that killed her.” Leon snarled in reply, grabbing a bottle from the middle of the table, opening it.
Abelard glanced at his brother-in-law. “How could she die? She was healthy…young…”
“She shouldn’t have. But they killed her. They killed her because she was Germany’s enemy because she married me…she should have lived a lot longer.”
Abelard’s head spun with the reality of it all. His sister was killed…now she was dead. But she…she had believed in God.
A small smile rose to Abelard’s face. “She believed, Leon…she believed. So now she’s happy and with the God-“
Leon groaned and stood, holding the glass bottle still, taking a sip from it. “Not you too. Can’t everyone stop talking about God for once!?”
Abelard wiped away tears with his uniform sleeve and raised an eyebrow at his brother-in-law. “I thought you believed…you and Aadelheide always went to church. You always seemed to have a strong-“
“Look around you, Abelard! People are dead, children are orphaned, our entire world is ravaged and in shambles, and my wife is dead. Where is God in any of this!?”
Abelard blinked. “But you believe…same as my mother…same as Aadelheide did…same as I do…you have to still-“
Leon slammed the glass bottle down on the counter with a thud. “Not anymore. If God was so powerful…so good, then why didn’t he stop the violence? Why didn’t he stop the bloodshed? Why didn’t he-“
“God always turns things around for good, Leon. He always has a purpose, no matter what-“
“He let my wife die!” Leon screamed, tears coursing down his cheeks in droves.
Abelard felt tears spring to his eyes and he stood. “Leon…”
Leon turned away. “If God wants to turn his back on me…then I’ll turn my back on him.”
“Leon, he never left you. Even through this war, he was-“
“You have no idea what I’ve been through. If you saw and felt the things I have, you wouldn’t trust in God either.”
“Leon…”
Leon shook his head and faced Abelard again. “No. Don’t try to convince me. Do you know what it’s like to lose your faith, Abelard, the one thing you thought you would never lose?”
“Leon, you were never alone. God was-“
“I was in that camp for an entire year! I was worked to death…beaten…starved. I was treated like I was less than an animal! And do you know what I realized in that camp, Abelard? Do you know what I learned…?”
Abelard slowly shook his head, watching his brother-in-law. Another person the war had destroyed. “No…what?”
“I realized that the God I’ve been taught to believe in since I was a young child…the God I thought loved me…doesn’t care a dime about me.”
Abelard shook his head. No, it wasn’t true. “Leon, he does care…he sent his son to die for you…he loves you, so much more than you will ever-“
“You don’t know what it’s like, Abelard. You don’t know what it’s like to be beaten and starved…to be treated like you’re less than an animal…to be treated like you’re dirt under someone’s feet…and to endure the humiliation and dehumanization of that camp I lived in…and to endure all of that…and realize that the God you thought you could trust in…the God that you thought loved you…just stood there and did nothing.”
Abelard laid his hands on his brother-in-law’s shoulders. “Leon, I know this is hard…but you can’t lose hope…you need to-“
“Lose hope!? I lost my hope a long time ago, Abelard. What is there to hope in anymore!?”
Abelard gripped Leon’s shoulders tighter. He couldn’t let his brother-in-law continue down this path. “Leon…I can’t see you continue down this path…there’s anger in you…dangerous anger that will destroy you if you don’t-“
Leon pulled away from Abelard’s grip. “I have a right to be angry. God stood there and did nothing, and my wife was killed by someone! And Abelard, I promise…I swear…if I ever get my hands on the man who killed my wife…I. Will. Kill. Him.”
Leon’s dark brown eyes sparked with something so much more than anger…so much darker than anger.
“Leon…don’t let hate destroy you…”
“I don’t need to be preached at.” Leon snarled, grabbing the bottle off the counter and taking a big, long sip.
Abelard slowly shook his head. “What would Aadelheide think-“
“Well, Abelard, it doesn’t really matter, does it!? She’s gone, and she’s never coming back. I’m tired of people telling me they’re sorry for my loss…I’m tried of everyone trying to convince me that everything is okay. My wife is dead, and nothing can ever bring her back!”
“Leon…”
Footsteps sounded, and Isabel appeared in the doorway to the kitchen, alone, since her little brothers were napping.
Abelard glanced over, and Leon did the same.
Abelard’s eyes softened at the sight of his almost eight-year-old little niece, who remained in the doorway, uncertainty and caution in her bright blue eyes.
Leon slowly turned to Abelard. “You need to leave.”
Abelard faced his brother-in-law. “Leon, none of us want to see hatred destroy you. God isn’t responsible for Aadelheide’s death. I’m sorry…but she’s gone, Leon…we just…we have to keep going…even when it’s hard. But you can’t blame God…and you shouldn’t hate anyone.”
“Abelard, please, just…go…” Leon whispered, and the anger left his eyes. Instead…Abelard saw brokenness.
Isabel quietly came into the kitchen and grabbed Leon’s leg.
Leon took another sip of alcohol, set the bottle down, and lifted Isabel into his arms. “Abelard, please, just…just go. Louisa lives close by.”
Abelard slowly nodded. “Okay…I-I’ll go.”
And he turned on his heel and walked out of the kitchen.
Tears coursed down his cheeks, and he whispered, prayed, for his brother-in-law that he so dearly cared about; “Dear God…save him.”
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Oh, also!!! I listened to these songs when writing much of the scene I just posted!!!
Empty by Tauren Wells
Remind Me You’re Here by Jason Gray
Questions by 7eventh Time Down
I Believe It Now by Sidewalk Prophets
@freedomwriter76 Wow.
That scene……
Just wow.
I’m honestly wondering if I can use this as a sort of framework to write some of my own emotional scenes……
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@freedomwriter76
AHHH LEON!!!! ABELARD!!! NOOOOO!!!
Girl!!! You write the BEST SCENES!!! Ahh I want to cry and just hug both of them. And little Isabel!
😭😭😭😭😭😭
#HugRikerSquad
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@keilah-h. @lightoverdarkness6. Aww, thanks y’all! Y’all are so sweet!!! 💖🥰💖
And yes, Light….I wanna hug all of them too!!! 💖😭
@freedomwriter76
GIRL!! That was so good. So sad too! I kinda liked how you held off until the end to show he wasn’t drinking water, kinda gave the scene a bit more punch 😬 I feel so bad for both of them 😥 what a difficult thing to figure out, I think your doing a great job of it though!
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@mineralizedwritings. AHHHH, MIN!!!! THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!!!! 😭💖🥰
And I know…I feel so bad for them too!!! I just wanna hug them tight!!! 😭😭😭😭
Aww, thank you!!! I kinda felt like I needed to hold off the reality that Leon was drinking something much different than water, so I’m glad you thought it gave the scene an extra punch. 😅 But…not a good punch tho😬
Aww, thank you!!! Yes, it’s a very difficult thing, *sniff*, and Abelard is just now learning it…😭
How have you been today, Min? I hope you’re doing well. 🥰🥰🥰
@freedomwriter76
I’m doing ok! Thanks so much for asking! 💛💛💛
I’ve been writing a bit, was editing my draft for Tauren and Lesli’s book, I’m at 35k words now!
I finished (and started lol) a 5 source annotated bibliography, so glad to have that over with lol. My topic is how dictators rise to power, so I’m learning some pretty interesting stuff I didn’t know!
What about you? How are you doing?
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@mineralizedwritings. Glad to hear it. You’re very welcome! 💜💜💜
WOO-HOO!!! Go Min!!!! 35K words is AMAZING!!! You got this!!! 🥳🙌🏻🎉🎊
Oof, yes, it sounds like something you’d be glad to be done with for sure! 😅😂 Ooh, that’s a really cool topic! 😁😉
I’m doing better today. Stuff comes and goes still. Today we had clear blue skies and things are starting to warm up down here. 💜 I don’t like summer too much because it’s too hot and there’s a lot of bugs (and I hate bugs!!! 😱😱😱) but this winter has just felt kinda gloomy, y’know? 😅
But I’m doing pretty well today. I guess I could be better, but I’ve felt better today than I have in a while. 💜 Still dealing with a bit of loneliness, but I’ve felt better today. 😊
Still working through all of my school subjects too. 😉 They’re all actually not too bad, except for the Algebra! 😅😱😂 But school’s going pretty well too. 😁
Didn’t do much writing today…but I’ve written a lot recently, so a break actually feels pretty good.
😊💜
@freedomwriter76
WOO-HOO!!! Go Min!!!! 35K words is AMAZING!!! You got this!!! 🥳🙌🏻🎉🎊
Thanks!! 💛
I’m doing better today. Stuff comes and goes still. Today we had clear blue skies and things are starting to warm up down here. 💜 I don’t like summer too much because it’s too hot and there’s a lot of bugs (and I hate bugs!!! 😱😱😱) but this winter has just felt kinda gloomy, y’know? 😅
Haha same to like all that! That’s great your feeling better, we had some blue skies today too and it was pretty nice. I hate bugs too! I can’t relax if I know there’s one in the room I haven’t eliminated XD. And yeah! I don’t like summer heat 🥵 I’m at home when it’s room temperature but with a cool breeze.
But I’m doing pretty well today. I guess I could be better, but I’ve felt better today than I have in a while. 💜 Still dealing with a bit of loneliness, but I’ve felt better today. 😊
Yeah I know how that goes. Glad your feeling a bit better though! <3
Ikr? The loneliness gets me too. The only people I see besides my family (excluding the interactions at church) are the other Costco shoppers 😂🤣
I’ve had more anxiety than loneliness (I used to be really loneley and tried waaaay to hard to make friends, recently I felt like I was just becoming aware this wasn’t the time, and I just needed to wait it out for whatever God had planned, It was really nice to have a break from my high-effort-trying-to-make-friends conversations) I’m hopefully taking an in person art class this next quarter, and it’s kinda a stressful thought 😂 It’s at the college, so I might be one of the youngest in the class, and it’s been since 6th grade since I was in a public school environment 😛 Idk if you get how this works because you weren’t in public school, but you kinda learn how to function and shake stuff off in a secular environment… I think that shell might have worn off :/
Anyways That was long XD
Still working through all of my school subjects too. 😉 They’re all actually not too bad, except for the Algebra! 😅😱😂 But school’s going pretty well too. 😁
That’s good! Oof… algebra. I have two overdue assignments for alg 2 actually 😖😮
Didn’t do much writing today…but I’ve written a lot recently, so a break actually feels pretty good.
😊💜
yep i agree. I find that rotating between my two wips keeps me sane XD
Have you ever had a day where you were just kinda in your story in your head for most of the day, and you just feel like weird and… floaty? I’m sorry that’s the best description I have 😂🤣 like less human? It happens to me every once in awhile, I escape from reality into my little world then I feel weird after a bit because I go a little too long in a fantasy realm of my brain 😂🤣 (In other words, should take a break before I become a crazy author XD)
😊😁
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
I can totally relate to the bibliography. I just finished one for my own paper which was also coincidentally on a dictators rise (specifically Hitler’s).
Also the floaty thing happens to me a whole lot. I feel that is a good way to describe it. I usually just think of it as going to Kharvia but I agree that a tiny part of me imagines my mind floating away and then materialising in my fantasy world. This happens especially when I am bored. Like in math class. I really need to pay more attention and stop just daydreaming through notes and then asking my brother to explain them to me later.
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