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February 5, 2023 at 2:49 pm #131754
I found these RP prompts too! For anyone looking for some š
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebFebruary 5, 2023 at 2:49 pm #131755Ah yeah maybe!!
Ooh interesting!
Thank you for the link of the video!! I’ll check it out š
#HugRikerSquad
February 5, 2023 at 4:09 pm #131766@godlyfantasy12 lol good. I donāt have any people Iām interested in, nor people interested in me, and I hope to keep it that way.
My characters on the other handā¦ā¦ā¦
heh hehā¦ā¦.
thisāll be FUNā¦ā¦.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 5, 2023 at 4:25 pm #131771@esther-c Nice prompts….
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 6, 2023 at 9:19 am #131823Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. @gwyndalf-the-wise. @lightoverdarkness6. @mineralizedwritings. @anyone-else-I-am-momentarily-forgetting-lol.
Sooo…I was gonna share this later…but heh…I finished it this morning and I couldn’t resist. šš
So…anywho…I have this scene, likely going to be in my bookĀ Allies & LiesĀ (which now only has 1 protag. bc I needed to split the 4 MC’s into separate books, lol…) and is a good scene, in my opinion, but also…heartbreaking…heh…šššš
But I wanted everyone else’s thoughts…š„°
So…here we go!!!
The house was quietā¦too quiet. The kids were thereā¦but Aadelheide was missing.
Abelard turned to his brother-in-law. āWhereās Aadelheide?ā
Leonās gaze fell and his eyes closed.
Abelard stepped closer to the table. āLeon, whereās Aadelheide? Whereās your wifeā¦whereās my twin sister?ā
Leonās fingers wrapped tighter around his cup. His left hand was bare of a ring.
Abelard stumbled backward. The world spun around him. His heart pounded in his head. āNoā¦Leon, noā¦sheā¦she canātā¦noā¦ā
Leon slowly looked up, eyes bright with tears. āā¦Sheās dead.ā
Tears coursed down Abelardās cheeks and he sank into a chair. His sisterā¦his twinā¦was dead. Just like Neesh. Just like so many. āHowā¦w-why?ā
āAsk the ones that killed her.ā Leon snarled in reply, grabbing a bottle from the middle of the table, opening it.
Abelard glanced at his brother-in-law. āHow could she die? She was healthyā¦youngā¦ā
āShe shouldnāt have. But they killed her. They killed her because she was Germanyās enemy because she married meā¦she should have lived a lot longer.ā
Abelardās head spun with the reality of it all. His sister was killedā¦now she was dead. But sheā¦she had believed in God.
A small smile rose to Abelardās face. āShe believed, Leonā¦she believed. So now sheās happy and with the God-ā
Leon groaned and stood, holding the glass bottle still, taking a sip from it. āNot you too. Canāt everyone stop talking about God for once!?ā
Abelard wiped away tears with his uniform sleeve and raised an eyebrow at his brother-in-law. āI thought you believedā¦you and Aadelheide always went to church. You always seemed to have a strong-ā
āLook around you, Abelard! People are dead, children are orphaned, our entire world is ravaged and in shambles, and my wife is dead. Where is God in any of this!?ā
Abelard blinked. āBut you believeā¦same as my motherā¦same as Aadelheide didā¦same as I doā¦you have to still-ā
Leon slammed the glass bottle down on the counter with a thud. āNot anymore. If God was so powerfulā¦so good, then why didnāt he stop the violence? Why didnāt he stop the bloodshed? Why didnāt he-ā
āGod always turns things around for good, Leon. He always has a purpose, no matter what-ā
āHe let my wife die!ā Leon screamed, tears coursing down his cheeks in droves.
Abelard felt tears spring to his eyes and he stood. āLeonā¦ā
Leon turned away. āIf God wants to turn his back on meā¦then Iāll turn my back on him.ā
āLeon, he never left you. Even through this war, he was-ā
āYou have no idea what Iāve been through. If you saw and felt the things I have, you wouldnāt trust in God either.ā
āLeonā¦ā
Leon shook his head and faced Abelard again. āNo. Donāt try to convince me. Do you know what itās like to lose your faith, Abelard, the one thing you thought you would never lose?ā
āLeon, you were never alone. God was-ā
āI was in that camp for an entire year! I was worked to deathā¦beatenā¦starved. I was treated like I was less than an animal! And do you know what I realized in that camp, Abelard? Do you know what I learnedā¦?ā
Abelard slowly shook his head, watching his brother-in-law. Another person the war had destroyed. āNoā¦what?ā
āI realized that the God Iāve been taught to believe in since I was a young childā¦the God I thought loved meā¦doesnāt care a dime about me.ā
Abelard shook his head. No, it wasnāt true. āLeon, he does careā¦he sent his son to die for youā¦he loves you, so much more than you will ever-ā
āYou donāt know what itās like, Abelard. You donāt know what itās like to be beaten and starvedā¦to be treated like youāre less than an animalā¦to be treated like youāre dirt under someoneās feetā¦and to endure the humiliation and dehumanization of that camp I lived inā¦and to endure all of thatā¦and realize that the God you thought you could trust inā¦the God that you thought loved youā¦just stood there and did nothing.ā
Abelard laid his hands on his brother-in-lawās shoulders. āLeon, I know this is hardā¦but you canāt lose hopeā¦you need to-ā
āLose hope!? I lost my hope a long time ago, Abelard. What is there to hope in anymore!?ā
Abelard gripped Leonās shoulders tighter. He couldnāt let his brother-in-law continue down this path. āLeonā¦I canāt see you continue down this pathā¦thereās anger in youā¦dangerous anger that will destroy you if you donāt-ā
Leon pulled away from Abelardās grip. āI have a right to be angry. God stood there and did nothing, and my wife was killed by someone! And Abelard, I promiseā¦I swearā¦if I ever get my hands on the man who killed my wifeā¦I. Will. Kill. Him.ā
Leonās dark brown eyes sparked with something so much more than angerā¦so much darker than anger.
āLeonā¦donāt let hate destroy youā¦ā
āI donāt need to be preached at.ā Leon snarled, grabbing the bottle off the counter and taking a big, long sip.
Abelard slowly shook his head. āWhat would Aadelheide think-ā
āWell, Abelard, it doesnāt really matter, does it!? Sheās gone, and sheās never coming back. Iām tired of people telling me theyāre sorry for my lossā¦Iām tried of everyone trying to convince me that everything is okay. My wife is dead, and nothing can ever bring her back!ā
āLeonā¦ā
Footsteps sounded, and Isabel appeared in the doorway to the kitchen, alone, since her little brothers were napping.
Abelard glanced over, and Leon did the same.
Abelardās eyes softened at the sight of his almost eight-year-old little niece, who remained in the doorway, uncertainty and caution in her bright blue eyes.
Leon slowly turned to Abelard. āYou need to leave.ā
Abelard faced his brother-in-law. āLeon, none of us want to see hatred destroy you. God isnāt responsible for Aadelheideās death. Iām sorryā¦but sheās gone, Leonā¦we justā¦we have to keep goingā¦even when itās hard. But you canāt blame Godā¦and you shouldnāt hate anyone.ā
āAbelard, please, justā¦goā¦ā Leon whispered, and the anger left his eyes. Insteadā¦Abelard saw brokenness.
Isabel quietly came into the kitchen and grabbed Leonās leg.
Leon took another sip of alcohol, set the bottle down, and lifted Isabel into his arms. āAbelard, please, justā¦just go. Louisa lives close by.ā
Abelard slowly nodded. āOkayā¦I-Iāll go.ā
And he turned on his heel and walked out of the kitchen.
Tears coursed down his cheeks, and he whispered, prayed, for his brother-in-law that he so dearly cared about; āDear Godā¦save him.ā
February 6, 2023 at 9:20 am #131824Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Oh, also!!! I listened to these songs when writing much of the scene I just posted!!!
Empty by Tauren Wells
Remind Me You’re Here by Jason Gray
Questions by 7eventh Time Down
I Believe It Now by Sidewalk Prophets
February 6, 2023 at 2:20 pm #131854@freedomwriter76 Wow.
That scene……
Just wow.
I’m honestly wondering if I can use this as a sort of framework to write some of my own emotional scenes……
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 6, 2023 at 3:50 pm #131886@freedomwriter76
AHHH LEON!!!! ABELARD!!! NOOOOO!!!
Girl!!! You write the BEST SCENES!!! Ahh I want to cry and just hug both of them. And little Isabel!
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February 6, 2023 at 5:19 pm #131917Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@keilah-h. @lightoverdarkness6. Aww, thanks y’all! Y’all are so sweet!!! šš„°š
And yes, Light….I wanna hug all of them too!!! šš
February 6, 2023 at 7:45 pm #131961@freedomwriter76
GIRL!! That was so good. So sad too! I kinda liked how you held off until the end to show he wasn’t drinking water, kinda gave the scene a bit more punch š¬ I feel so bad for both of them š„ what a difficult thing to figure out, I think your doing a great job of it though!
"Than finish it... Because I'm with you till the end of the line." <3
February 6, 2023 at 7:51 pm #131964Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@mineralizedwritings. AHHHH, MIN!!!! THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!!!! ššš„°
And I know…I feel so bad for them too!!! I just wanna hug them tight!!! šššš
Aww, thank you!!! I kinda felt like I needed to hold off the reality that Leon was drinking something much different than water, so I’m glad you thought it gave the scene an extra punch. š But…not a good punch thoš¬
Aww, thank you!!! Yes, it’s a very difficult thing, *sniff*, and Abelard is just now learning it…š
How have you been today, Min? I hope you’re doing well. š„°š„°š„°
February 6, 2023 at 8:28 pm #131970@freedomwriter76
I’m doing ok! Thanks so much for asking! ššš
I’ve been writing a bit, was editing my draft for Tauren and Lesli’s book, I’m at 35k words now!
I finished (and started lol) a 5 source annotated bibliography, so glad to have that over with lol. My topic is how dictators rise to power, so I’m learning some pretty interesting stuff I didn’t know!
What about you? How are you doing?
"Than finish it... Because I'm with you till the end of the line." <3
February 6, 2023 at 8:36 pm #131973Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@mineralizedwritings. Glad to hear it. You’re very welcome! ššš
WOO-HOO!!! Go Min!!!! 35K words is AMAZING!!! You got this!!! š„³šš»šš
Oof, yes, it sounds like something you’d be glad to be done with for sure! š š Ooh, that’s a really cool topic! šš
I’m doing better today. Stuff comes and goes still. Today we had clear blue skies and things are starting to warm up down here. š I don’t like summer too much because it’s too hot and there’s a lot of bugs (and I hate bugs!!! š±š±š±) but this winter has just felt kinda gloomy, y’know? š
But I’m doing pretty well today. I guess I could be better, but I’ve felt better today than I have in a while. š Still dealing with a bit of loneliness, but I’ve felt better today. š
Still working through all of my school subjects too. š They’re all actually not too bad, except for the Algebra! š š±š But school’s going pretty well too. š
Didn’t do much writing today…but I’ve written a lot recently, so a break actually feels pretty good.
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February 6, 2023 at 8:53 pm #131975@freedomwriter76
WOO-HOO!!! Go Min!!!! 35K words is AMAZING!!! You got this!!! š„³šš»šš
Thanks!! š
Iām doing better today. Stuff comes and goes still. Today we had clear blue skies and things are starting to warm up down here. š I donāt like summer too much because itās too hot and thereās a lot of bugs (and I hate bugs!!! š±š±š±) but this winter has just felt kinda gloomy, yāknow? š
Haha same to like all that! That’s great your feeling better, we had some blue skies today too and it was pretty nice. I hate bugs too! I can’t relax if I know there’s one in the room I haven’t eliminated XD. And yeah! I don’t like summer heat š„µ I’m at home when it’s room temperature but with a cool breeze.
But Iām doing pretty well today. I guess I could be better, but Iāve felt better today than I have in a while. š Still dealing with a bit of loneliness, but Iāve felt better today. š
Yeah I know how that goes. Glad your feeling a bit better though! <3
Ikr? The loneliness gets me too. The only people I see besides my family (excluding the interactions at church) are the other Costco shoppers šš¤£
I’ve had more anxiety than loneliness (I used to be really loneley and tried waaaay to hard to make friends, recently I felt like I was just becoming aware this wasn’t the time, and I just needed to wait it out for whatever God had planned, It was really nice to have a break from my high-effort-trying-to-make-friends conversations) I’m hopefully taking an in person art class this next quarter, and it’s kinda a stressful thought š It’s at the college, so I might be one of the youngest in the class, and it’s been since 6th grade since I was in a public school environment š Idk if you get how this works because you weren’t in public school, but you kinda learn how to function and shake stuff off in a secular environment… I think that shell might have worn off :/
Anyways That was long XD
Still working through all of my school subjects too. š Theyāre all actually not too bad, except for the Algebra! š š±š But schoolās going pretty well too. š
That’s good! Oof… algebra. I have two overdue assignments for alg 2 actually šš®
Didnāt do much writing todayā¦but Iāve written a lot recently, so a break actually feels pretty good.
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yep i agree. I find that rotating between my two wips keeps me sane XD
Have you ever had a day where you were just kinda in your story in your head for most of the day, and you just feel like weird and… floaty? I’m sorry that’s the best description I have šš¤£ like less human? It happens to me every once in awhile, I escape from reality into my little world then I feel weird after a bit because I go a little too long in a fantasy realm of my brain šš¤£ (In other words, should take a break before I become a crazy author XD)
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"Than finish it... Because I'm with you till the end of the line." <3
February 6, 2023 at 10:51 pm #131991I can totally relate to the bibliography. I just finished one for my own paper which was also coincidentally on a dictators rise (specifically Hitlerās).
Also the floaty thing happens to me a whole lot. I feel that is a good way to describe it. I usually just think of it as going to Kharvia but I agree that a tiny part of me imagines my mind floating away and then materialising in my fantasy world. This happens especially when I am bored. Like in math class. I really need to pay more attention and stop just daydreaming through notes and then asking my brother to explain them to me later.
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