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    Daisy Torres
    @daisy-torres
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      Hello! I started a wip and was wondering if anyone would mind critiquing it for me? I’m trying a different style than I normally do and just wanted to see if this would work! Thanks <3

      https://docs.google.com/document/d/14Q9H-uDnPKm-adbMKRGzGKxnrTwnwyBJwrmqT9O0Sl0/edit?usp=drivesdk

      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

      #94248
      Linyang Zhang
      @devastate-lasting
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        @daisy-torres Left some comments! Awesome job!

        Lately, it's been on my brain
        Would you mind letting me know
        If hours don't turn into days

        #94282
        Abigail.M.
        @abigail-m
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          @daisy-torres

          I just finished reading the prologue. I actually don’t have any critiques for it; it was amazing:D

          #94284
          Daisy Torres
          @daisy-torres
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            @devastate-lasting Yay!! Thank you <3

            "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

            #94285
            Daisy Torres
            @daisy-torres
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              @abigail-m Ooh that makes me so happy to hear!! Thanks!!

              "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

              #94287
              Daisy Torres
              @daisy-torres
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                @devastate-lasting I loove the short little stanzas you always add as your signature!! This one is soo pretty. Where did you find it?

                "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                #94292
                Gracie J.
                @gracie-j
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                  @daisy-torres I read through it, and it was amazing! I can’t wait to find out more!

                  the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

                  #94296
                  Linyang Zhang
                  @devastate-lasting
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                    @daisy-torres Ah usually they’re from songs that I’m currently listening to, but the signature doesn’t allow me enough space to credit it. The one I currently have is from a song called “So ist es immer” by Hiroyuki Sawano! I really encourage you to check it out; it’s a beautiful song!

                    Lately, it's been on my brain
                    Would you mind letting me know
                    If hours don't turn into days

                    #94297
                    Daisy Torres
                    @daisy-torres
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                      @devastate-lasting Okay, I’ll have to do that! Thanks!

                      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                      #94298
                      Daisy Torres
                      @daisy-torres
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                        @gracie-j Thank you!!

                        "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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                        ella
                        @nova21
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                          @daisy-torres

                          Ooo, I LOVE this!!! ❤  It was funny in the beginning and really intense at the end, which I love!  And I like Tessa’s character, and of course, the antique roadshow guy.  Overall, it was really well written and I can’t wait to read the next chapter!! (which might be awhile because I’m pretty busy today, so….)  Thanks for sharing!!! ❤

                          what we do in life echoes in eternity
                          -gladiator, 2000

                          #94333
                          Daisy Torres
                          @daisy-torres
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                            <@nova21 Yay!!! Thank you so much for reading!! <3 (Haha understandable!)

                            "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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