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February 26, 2021 at 4:51 pm #94241
Hello! I started a wip and was wondering if anyone would mind critiquing it for me? I’m trying a different style than I normally do and just wanted to see if this would work! Thanks <3
https://docs.google.com/document/d/14Q9H-uDnPKm-adbMKRGzGKxnrTwnwyBJwrmqT9O0Sl0/edit?usp=drivesdk
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
February 26, 2021 at 5:39 pm #94248@daisy-torres Left some comments! Awesome job!
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
If hours don't turn into daysFebruary 26, 2021 at 11:00 pm #94282I just finished reading the prologue. I actually don’t have any critiques for it; it was amazing:D
February 27, 2021 at 1:03 am #94284@devastate-lasting Yay!! Thank you <3
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
February 27, 2021 at 1:04 am #94285@abigail-m Ooh that makes me so happy to hear!! Thanks!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
February 27, 2021 at 1:35 am #94287@devastate-lasting I loove the short little stanzas you always add as your signature!! This one is soo pretty. Where did you find it?
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
February 27, 2021 at 7:56 am #94292Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@daisy-torres I read through it, and it was amazing! I can’t wait to find out more!
February 27, 2021 at 8:53 am #94296@daisy-torres Ah usually they’re from songs that I’m currently listening to, but the signature doesn’t allow me enough space to credit it. The one I currently have is from a song called “So ist es immer” by Hiroyuki Sawano! I really encourage you to check it out; it’s a beautiful song!
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
If hours don't turn into daysFebruary 27, 2021 at 9:38 am #94297@devastate-lasting Okay, I’ll have to do that! Thanks!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
February 27, 2021 at 9:39 am #94298@gracie-j Thank you!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
February 27, 2021 at 11:40 am #94310Ooo, I LOVE this!!! ❤ It was funny in the beginning and really intense at the end, which I love! And I like Tessa’s character, and of course, the antique roadshow guy. Overall, it was really well written and I can’t wait to read the next chapter!! (which might be awhile because I’m pretty busy today, so….) Thanks for sharing!!! ❤
what we do in life echoes in eternity
-gladiator, 2000February 27, 2021 at 3:42 pm #94333<@nova21 Yay!!! Thank you so much for reading!! <3 (Haha understandable!)
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
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