Smoke and Mirrors Chapter 4 critique

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    Daisy Torres
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      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-vbhn_QpzMJ_xlGO1Sb6epYzGJIB0HY55BwPVctj3Dk/edit?usp=drivesdk

      @anyone-who-wants-to @nova21 @devastate-lasting @gracie-j

      After this I’m planning on putting up one more chapter. Thank you to everyone who stuck with me on this!! I’m so grateful to y’all!!

      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

      #94621
      Gracie J.
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        @daisy-torres First, love your new tagline! Second, I’m still reading Chapter 3, so I’ll get to this as soon as I can! I absolutely love this story!!!

        the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

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        Daisy Torres
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          @gracie-j Thank you!! I’m trying to make myself write a haiku a day, but I always end up forgetting, so I’m going to try doing this for ten days and see if it helps lol.

          That makes me really happy to hear you say that!! I’ve loved writing it so far!!

          "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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          ella
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            @daisy-torres

            ………  I think this was the best chapter so far……..  SOOO goooood, but really sad!!  And I adore the description and suspense.  You also used all 5 senses, which brought the chapter to a whole other level.  The mystery, intrigue, beauty… I’m sooo ready for the next chapter!! 💛💛💛 (is that going to be the last one?  that’s so sad! 😭)

            what we do in life echoes in eternity
            -gladiator, 2000

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            Linyang Zhang
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              @daisy-torres I’ll try to get to this today!

              Lately, it's been on my brain
              Would you mind letting me know
              If hours don't turn into days

              #94639
              Daisy Torres
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                @nova21 Awww thank youuu!!! That literally makes me sooo happyy. Honestly, I don’t mind sharing more chapters, I just don’t want to fill the critique forum with a whole novel loll. If you want though, I could just share it to my home page? Idk, I just don’t want people to open up the novel critique section and see nothing but my book XD

                "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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                Daisy Torres
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                  @devastate-lasting Yay!! Take your time though <3

                  "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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                  Gracie J.
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                    @daisy-torres WHAT????????????? GURL!!!!!!!! I NEED MORE! This is fantabulous! I love the story, Tessa, the imagery–all of it is SO beautiful!!! Do we get to read the next chapter? Do we? Do we??? I can’t wait!!!!!

                    the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

                    #94661
                    Daisy Torres
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                      @gracie-j THANK YOUU!!! That makes me so happyyy!!! Yes! I’m working on it now!!

                      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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                      Linyang Zhang
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                        @daisy-torres And done! I loved it, per usual.

                        Lately, it's been on my brain
                        Would you mind letting me know
                        If hours don't turn into days

                        #94669
                        Daisy Torres
                        @daisy-torres
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                          @devastate-lasting Thank you so much!!

                          "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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