Smoke and Mirrors Chapter 2 critique

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    Daisy Torres
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      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OfZrcV5g8xwZVQhGqOuR8THhgWdbrshO4f-LjsMFFYI/edit?usp=drivesdk

      Here’s the next chapter! Thank you again to everyone helping me <3 I appreciate it more than you’ll know!


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      • This topic was modified 3 years, 2 months ago by Daisy Torres.

      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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      Linyang Zhang
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        @daisy-torres Ey I just read through it and left a couple comments! Thanks for sharing!

        Lately, it's been on my brain
        Would you mind letting me know
        If hours don't turn into days

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        Gracie J.
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          @daisy-torres Dude, this is awesome! Your descriptions are fantastic, your MC is hilarious, and the concept it so cool and unique! I absolutely love this!

          the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

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          Daisy Torres
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            @devastate-lasting Thank you!! I really love your comments!!

            "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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            Daisy Torres
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              @gracie-j Aaahh thank youu!!! I’m so glad you think so!!!

              "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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              ella
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                @daisy-torres

                I love this soooo much!!  Tessa and the other characters, the internal monologue, the mirrors, the music, the prophecy… the whole concept is sooo cool!!!  TYSM for sharing!!!!!!!!!

                what we do in life echoes in eternity
                -gladiator, 2000

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                Daisy Torres
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                  @nova21 Thank youuu!!! That makes me so happy!!!!! I really really appreciate all of your comments!! And absolutely!! Thank you so much for reading!!!

                  "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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                  Gracie J.
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                    @daisy-torres You’re so welcome! Will you be sharing the next chapter?

                    the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

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                    Daisy Torres
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                      @gracie-j I will!! It’s up right now, and I’m about to add the next one as well <3

                      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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