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  • #196810
    Ellette Giselle
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      @savannah_grace2009

      Thank you.

      It was someone I didn’t know, but there’s still a lot of craziness. We’re leaving for Idaho on Saturday, so you can guess it’s a little hectic.  😉

      No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.

      #196811
      SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨
      @savannah_grace2009
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        @ellette-giselle

        Oh wow…

        My heart hurts for you guys 🥺🥺

        This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.

        #196814
        Linus Smallprint
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          @savannah_grace2009

          Sorry, I made it up to where Sef turns herself into the Pythonos and they mark her, but haven’t touched it for a while and keep on forgetting to do so. I’ll try to read more soon!

          Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

          #196815
          Cloaked Mystery
          @jonas
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            @savannah_grace2009

            I haven’t gotten any further, sorry. It slipped my mind, and then school hit and I don’t have much time each week. You can keep tagging me though, and I’ll read more whenever I get more time.

            🏰 Fantasy Writer
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            #196816
            SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨
            @savannah_grace2009
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              @linus-smallprint

              Oh that’s okay!!!

              Sef turns herself into the Pythonos

              Wait, hold up…

              Sef doesn’t turn into the Pythonos…she is enslaved by the Pythonos. I thought I made that clearer but if not can you give me suggestions to help with that? I don’t want to confuse anyone XD

              This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.

              #196817
              SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨
              @savannah_grace2009
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                @jonas

                Don’t worry about it! That’s okay!

                This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.

                #196818
                Linus Smallprint
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                  @savannah_grace2009

                  Didn’t Sef turn herself in so they wouldn’t take her mother instead?

                  Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                  #196819
                  SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨
                  @savannah_grace2009
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                    @linus-smallprint

                    Yes, but she didn’t become a Pythonos.

                    The Pythonos were going to take her mani for slavery and imprisonment.

                    Sef took her place as a slave.

                    This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.

                    #196821
                    Linus Smallprint
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                      @savannah_grace2009

                      Okay. Don’t worry, I didn’t think she had become is is on the path to becoming a Pythonos at this point.

                      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                      #196824
                      Esther
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                        @savannah_grace2009

                        I haven’t started it yet, but I will have read all of it by the end of February. Once I read it all, I’ll give you my overall impression and thoughts! :))

                        Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende

                        #196840
                        SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨
                        @savannah_grace2009
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                          @linus-smallprint

                          Okay good lol

                          Also, Paynes cannot become Pythonos because of genetics, but I’m not sure how to incorporate that in the book quite yet…don’t worry though, I’ll make that clearer in other drafts.


                          @esther-c

                          Okay perfect! Thank you!

                          This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.

                          #197054
                          The Most Esteemed Feathered One
                          @theducktator
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                            @savannah_grace2009

                            I dragged myself to co-op anyway. 🙁   I just finished your prologue. It’s good, but you overuse italics.

                            I shall be a vestibule of unhampered sanity.

                            #197057
                            The Most Esteemed Feathered One
                            @theducktator
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                              Oh my goodness, they kissed!!!! 😍

                              I shall be a vestibule of unhampered sanity.

                              #197063
                              The Most Esteemed Feathered One
                              @theducktator
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                                Finished chapter 3.

                                I shall be a vestibule of unhampered sanity.

                                #197064
                                The Most Esteemed Feathered One
                                @theducktator
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                                  Everything in him told him that his foot should not belong in something that smelled worse than Cassian’s socks,

                                  Lol

                                  I shall be a vestibule of unhampered sanity.

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