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      @savannah_grace2009

      Cutteeee! I like this chapter! 😄

      I really love the scene where Eloy wakes Lilitu—it’s very funny, lol! 😂

       

      Ah, Cassian. Still my favorite character of yours so far. 💛🤭

       

      🤍 Ira | Jara | Evelyn | Flaz | Blaine 🤍

      #182941
      SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨
      @savannah_grace2009
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        @grcr

        Awww thanks!!!!

        Yes I love the sibling dynamic XD XD

         

        Why does everybody like Cassian? I know he’s great and all but I seriously didn’t expect him to be the FAVORITE lol 😂😂 (don’t get me wrong, I myself love him but Sef and Marcurious and Ottoline are my favorites!!!)

        "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

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        Ellette Giselle
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          @savannah_grace2009

           

          Oh, they are older then I thought. Except for Cassian. I would suggest making that a little clearer in the book. I lost track of their ages when it started time changing really fast. I think now that we seen settled into the timeline we are sticking with, I would reinstate all their ages.

           

          Everyone loves Cassian because everyone loves the big brother character. Especially when he’s a good one.

           

           

          Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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            @ellette-giselle

            Their ages haven’t changed since chapter 6. I’ll try to make that clearer

            Huh…I still don’t see it XD

            (poor Eloy, everybody hates him :/)

            "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

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            Ellette Giselle
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              @savannah_grace200

               

              (poor Eloy, everybody hates him :/)

              That’s because we’ve seen just about nothing of him! If we knew him better we might like him. Right now I keep forgetting that he even exists.

               

              Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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              @savannah_grace2009
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                @ellette-giselle

                Trust me, no one likes Eloy.

                You’ll see.

                "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

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                Ellette Giselle
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                  @savannah_grace2009

                   

                  well right now I can’t even DISlike him because I keep forgetting he exists!

                   

                  Does he get Cassian killed? If he does I’ll throttle him.

                  Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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                  @savannah_grace2009
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                    @ellette-giselle

                    that’s the point…I intentionally did that so he’d be forgettable.

                    You’ll see.

                    Just wait.

                    It will all make sense.

                    Does he get Cassian killed?

                    You know, that’s a good idea….thanks for the inspiration!!!!!!!!!

                    "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

                    #183000
                    HighScribe
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                      @savannah_grace2009

                      You know, that’s a good idea….thanks for the inspiration!!!!!!!!!

                      Wait – NO. DON’T KILL CASSIAN.

                      ELLETTE WHAT HAVE YOU DONE.

                      A disturbingly short time ago, in a land uncomfortably close by...

                      #183001
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                      @savannah_grace2009
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                        I must go plan his funeral

                        peace out y’all

                        "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

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                          @savannah_grace2009

                          Im contacting the protection squad.

                          SARA IF YOU KILL HIM I SWEAR-

                          A disturbingly short time ago, in a land uncomfortably close by...

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                          @savannah_grace2009
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                            heh…heh………

                            "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

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                              @ELLETTE-GISELLE

                              CASSIAN’S BLOOD IS ON YOUR HANDS.

                              A disturbingly short time ago, in a land uncomfortably close by...

                              #183006
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                              @savannah_grace2009
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                                Actually Cass will live

                                but he will wish he didn’t

                                #INSPIRATION

                                "Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."

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                                  @savannah_grace2009

                                  What.

                                  How can you do this.

                                  A disturbingly short time ago, in a land uncomfortably close by...

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