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July 16, 2024 at 12:41 pm #182907
Cutteeee! I like this chapter! 😄
I really love the scene where Eloy wakes Lilitu—it’s very funny, lol! 😂
Ah, Cassian. Still my favorite character of yours so far. 💛ðŸ¤
If you pluck them, they explode. Goro.
July 16, 2024 at 2:40 pm #182941Awww thanks!!!!
Yes I love the sibling dynamic XD XD
Why does everybody like Cassian? I know he’s great and all but I seriously didn’t expect him to be the FAVORITE lol 😂😂 (don’t get me wrong, I myself love him but Sef and Marcurious and Ottoline are my favorites!!!)
This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.
July 17, 2024 at 7:37 am #182966Oh, they are older then I thought. Except for Cassian. I would suggest making that a little clearer in the book. I lost track of their ages when it started time changing really fast. I think now that we seen settled into the timeline we are sticking with, I would reinstate all their ages.
Everyone loves Cassian because everyone loves the big brother character. Especially when he’s a good one.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
July 17, 2024 at 12:43 pm #182985Their ages haven’t changed since chapter 6. I’ll try to make that clearer
Huh…I still don’t see it XD
(poor Eloy, everybody hates him :/)
This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.
July 17, 2024 at 12:46 pm #182989@savannah_grace200
(poor Eloy, everybody hates him :/)
That’s because we’ve seen just about nothing of him! If we knew him better we might like him. Right now I keep forgetting that he even exists.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
July 17, 2024 at 12:56 pm #182992Trust me, no one likes Eloy.
You’ll see.
This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.
July 17, 2024 at 12:58 pm #182995well right now I can’t even DISlike him because I keep forgetting he exists!
Does he get Cassian killed? If he does I’ll throttle him.
No half-heartedness and no worldly fear must turn us aside from following the light unflinchingly.
July 17, 2024 at 1:00 pm #182998that’s the point…I intentionally did that so he’d be forgettable.
You’ll see.
Just wait.
It will all make sense.
Does he get Cassian killed?
You know, that’s a good idea….thanks for the inspiration!!!!!!!!!
This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.
July 17, 2024 at 1:04 pm #183000You know, that’s a good idea….thanks for the inspiration!!!!!!!!!
Wait – NO. DON’T KILL CASSIAN.
ELLETTE WHAT HAVE YOU DONE.
If I had ever learnt, I should have been a great proficient.
#wewantourhatback
July 17, 2024 at 1:06 pm #183001I must go plan his funeral
peace out y’all
This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.
July 17, 2024 at 1:07 pm #183003Im contacting the protection squad.
SARA IF YOU KILL HIM I SWEAR-
If I had ever learnt, I should have been a great proficient.
#wewantourhatback
July 17, 2024 at 1:08 pm #183004heh…heh………
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July 17, 2024 at 1:11 pm #183005CASSIAN’S BLOOD IS ON YOUR HANDS.
If I had ever learnt, I should have been a great proficient.
#wewantourhatback
July 17, 2024 at 1:11 pm #183006Actually Cass will live
but he will wish he didn’t
#INSPIRATION
This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.
July 17, 2024 at 1:12 pm #183007What.
How can you do this.
If I had ever learnt, I should have been a great proficient.
#wewantourhatback
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