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    NC Stokes
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      @jenwriter17 That makes sense how she would feel about her powers. Do you have any specific powers in mind?

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      Kaya Young
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        @jenwriter17  I love this idea! What are her powers?

        I like the idea that she was raised specifically to be a hero.

        From what I’ve read, the major thing that offends people is their skin tone being compared to food. For me though, it wouldn’t offend me if my skin was described as milk or paper or whatever- after all, it would be an accurate description! I think as long as it’s not derogatory it should be fine. 🙂

        Also I sent you a pin on pinterest that has some helpful stuff about skin tones.

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        Jenna Terese
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          @daughteroftheking something with fire maybe, though that may be kinda common.


          @kaya-young
          I want her to have some sort of fire powers maybe.

          Yes I saw you sent me that! Thank you so much it’s awesome! 😀

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          SeekJustice
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            @jenwriter17

            Love the ideas coming out at the moment! One trope in the superhero genre that annoys me though is that the teen is always “Cursed” with incredible powers which they constantly whinge about. What if a) Kaylee volunteered for the experiment, maybe her uncle told her the truth about her parents death and promises to help her bring their killers to justice? or b) she doesn’t have powers. You mentioned she could have been raised from a young age to fight, and that she does gymnastics. What if she’s just really good at gymnastics and martial arts, like Batman’s sidekick Robin usually is?

            Just an idea 😀

            Also, when it comes to describing your character’s “biracialism” for lack of a better word, maybe you could talk about her parents different cultures, rather than necessarily the colours of her skin. I remember @rochellaine telling me about her dad’s cooking, so something as simple as remembering the differences in her parents cooking, or celebrating a special holiday or something, would be enough to show you that she comes from two different cultures. Since you are “biracial” you probably have more ideas on this than I do. And I rarely describe my characters beyond the fact that, say, Chessy has blonde hair. Neva is from the Cook Islands, though, or whatever version of the Cook Islands my world now has, but I felt that describing her as having dark skin and frizzy hair was enough to give people the general picture that she was a person of colour, and not white.

            Hope that’s helpful (and I can’t wait to read more of your writing!)

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            Jenna Terese
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              @seekjustice Thank you yes this was very helpful! <3

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              Ariel Ashira
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                @rochellaine Josiah’s stories do have a lot of darkness with not much if any light to combat it.  Some of them are a little too scary and maybe gory, like when they torture people.  (I am kind of a wimp.)  But I think his short stories explore human motivations, not instruct moral decisions.  And they sure leave me thinking!  I do like how his super heroes have limits, and cannot always do what they want despite their powers.

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                Rochellaine
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                  @ariel-ashira I don’t like darkness, but I also believe there is a place for darkness in stories as long as there is light alongside it to show the right way.  Without light no one would realize when they are in darkness.  In the same way a story without any darkness is too fluffy and there’s no point in it.  I just think Josiah has gone a bit too far into the darkness for a Christian writer, and that he doesn’t show the light, and even when he tries to present morals I’m not sure I agree with his morals.

                  About the superheroes having limitations, well, that’s not a huge thing that Josiah came up with and has introduced into the genre to make it better. 😛  All the “real” superheroes have weaknesses as well, the most famous being Superman’s Kryptonite, which is so well known that it has become a popular saying just like Achilles’ Heel.  So, just the fact that his superheroes are human doesn’t convince me that they’re great stories.

                  Also, I believe that though stories should reflect life to some extent, I think stories should also teach and have heroes that people can look up to and emulate.  I can’t look up to any of Josiah’s heroes.  I can feel sorry for them, or I can remember being in similar positions, but in the stories I read he didn’t even give resolutions, so what’s the point of reading them?  It would just help me wallow in doubt rather than giving me a symbol of hope.

                  Sooo…well, there you have a more complex explanation of my beliefs regarding darkness in storytelling.  Oh, one more example.  In the books @seekjustice writes, there is a lot of darkness.  But she mixes it with the light and gives the reader hope and resolution at the end.  That is how I believe a Christian author should use darkness in a story.  Darkness only to accent the light and make the light shine brighter.

                  Does that make sense?  Once again, I’m not at all criticizing Josiah’s ability to write great stories.  I’m only criticizing his stories’ themes and morals.  And I’d be happy to read more of his stories if there are ones which don’t disappear in darkness like the ones I read did.  So if you can recommend any, please do. 😉

                  (BTW, I don’t really have a problem with a Christian writer having gory or scary content in his books.  The Bible certainly has plenty of that. 😉  I just want it to be balanced…and I wouldn’t necessarily read the gory ones, though. 😛 )

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                  Ariel Ashira
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                    @rochellaine I could not agree with you more!  That is what I was trying to say about the light and darkness.  For a Christian writer, his stories have to much darkness with not enough light, or light of the right kind.

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