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I posted that in the wrong place đ€Šđ»ââïž
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@godlyfantasy12 it’s ok, we’ve all done it đ đ€Ł
HEYOOO!! I have written some more!!
SOO!! I decided to begin my first scene/chapter a bit differently
AKA the way I WANT to, because I had absolutely NO motivation to write it, and so I needed to find something that made me want to write it, and so I decided to start it the way I WANTED to!
So this is how it is actually beginning!
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Avoidance Is Bliss-Arabell
And it was, in the seventh hundred and eighth year, that Eder, Guardian of Light, Holder of All That Is Pure, was cast into the void. Having wrought great darkness throughout the land, spreading his vile deceit far and wide. Having turned the hearts of man and creature alike, leaving the world in disarray.
War and famine did abound, caused by the wickedness of the once pure Guardian, and the feeble-minded hearts of man he had swayed. Blood and tears filled the streets, and in sorrow, the Maker looked on at His creation.
The world teemed with a hideous smog; a black ink that had blotted out all light. This beautiful land he had built. The people, creatures, races and creeds He had created to inhabit the world had turned away from their purpose. They had fallen. Fallen into the snare that Eder, the Guardian of Light, Holder of All That Is Pure had set for them.
The mountains quaked in fury and heat rose from the depths of the sea as the earth mourned to itâs Maker, for the innocents that had perished. Lives lost, for reasons too trivial for any to understand. The wailing of mothers without their children. Children without their fathers.
The cries of animals in the wilderness, separated now from humankind and races above them. Lorded over. Slaughtered for gain and left to rot.
And those few.
Those small few who remained.
Unblemished. Untarnished.
Those who held fast to what had been before, from the creation of time. Who held to the Maker and His ways, ignoring Ederâs tricks. His light tricks and grandeur.
What of them?
What of their tears? Their prayers?
Had they been forgotten?
Had the MakerâŠthe True Light finally left them?
Was this world no longer good enough, for Him to remain? Had He repented of them?
They wept, falling to the ground before their Maker; broken, bloody, and beaten. The scars upon their skin told tales of pain and anguish, but they were nothing in comparison to the hurt within their hearts. Oh, that the Maker would restore them! That The Light would return! But their prayers seemed to fall upon deaf ears.
One boy stood to his feet, âWhy do we wait here? Let us go and the Light will surely lead us!â
âSit down, child. Donât you see? There is no Light,â an older man snapped, face aged by scars. âHe has abandoned us.â An audible gasp rippled through the room, but everyone else had been thinking it.
The boyâs eyes flared with determination, his hand closing around the cracked hilt of a sword on his belt. âPerhaps there isnât any Light for you, but I see plenty. Stay here if you wish, but I refuse to give in so easily.â He walked to the foot of the cave, ignoring the protests of those around him, screaming his name.
âYouâre just a boy! Youâll be killed on sight!â An older woman screamed, gripping a child in her bosom. She grabbed the ladâs hand, but he just looked at her, a faint sadness in his eyes.
âThen so be it,â he nodded, gently pulling free.
âYouâre more foolish then I thought, boy. Thatâs the same attitude that killed your father.â
The boy frowned, but shook his head. âNo. Eder killed my father, and now, Heâs safe in the Lightâs arms. And if I die, I will be too.â He turned back to the darkness of the cavern, only for a small voice to stop him.
âMayâŠMay we join youâŠ?â
Another gasp rippled through the crowd.
The boy looked back. Smiled. He knew the young girl well, along with the other children that followed her around. Theyâd all lost someone.
âIt will be dangerous,â He said.
âIâm not afraid,â she replied, her hazel eyes glowing in the firelight.
âWe may not return.â
âI donât want to return. This place has done nothing for me. If we stay here weâll die for sure.â
He chuckled at that and motioned for her and the other kids to follow him. None of the adults made any move to join, though they continued to shout protests.
âAsk the Light how Heâs doing when you seeâim!â The man with the scars yelled as the boy left the cave, the other trailing behind.
He never looked back.
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#ProtectSebOoooooooh, I love it! đ The descriptions were just amazingđ
Follow your heart, but take your brain with you.
I love that, Godly!! Wonderful job! đ Canât wait to read more!! đ
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@godlyfantasy12 Love it!!! I can really feel the emotion!!!! â€ïžâ€ïžđđ»
Is this the beginning of A’Grend??? (that’s what it’s called, right??? đ )
@freedomwriter76 yes!!
soâŠspoiler alert but that young boy (and the girl) is actually Araâs grandfather and grandmother
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#ProtectSebI was actually writing this and thought of the story of the the lepers in the Bible during a famine who said âWhy sir we here till we die?â And in the end brought restoration to Godâs people
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@godlyfantasy12 woo-hoo, I got it!!! XDâ€ïž
Hehe…I kinda had a feeling it was someone related to Ara. That’s so cool tho!!! đ„°đ„°đ„°
Kind of sidetracking, but it’s so funny that I thought at first your story was a cozy autumn-themed contemporary romance… XD That could not be farther from the truth.
âEverything is a mountainâ
Loving this! I’m excited for more
"does anyone have any good ideas?"
"Oh yeah, but none for this"@whalekeeper BAHAHA fr!!! XD XD November and Ara could fit those vibes thoooo XD I could totally write a contemporary romance series using the same charries.
Ara and N- cozy fall themed
Lyn & Grimm- Sunny summer beach vibes
Paxton & Luna- All the snowy winter feels
Arthur & Corvina- all the flowers in the spring-thorns included
âŠ..
okayâŠ.
I really wanna write this AU nowâŠ.
tagging @freedomwriter76 and our romance expert @gracie-j
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#ProtectSebAAAHH I didn’t mean you should start another AU!!! XDXDXD But in all honesty, go ahead, if you feel like it’s not going to prohibit your progress in your actual WIP… dude, I sound like such a mom friend right now, I just can’t XDXD
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@whalekeeper BAHAHAHA XD XD nawh it probs would and I wouldnât stick with it anyway. But it is there if I ever need a break from this project lol. Or just wanna do something fun (like make fun covers for it XD)
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