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June 9, 2025 at 1:14 pm #203927
Yes. I did.
Well, you could….. I’d just have to write it……
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 9, 2025 at 1:15 pm #203928True, true. ?
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
June 9, 2025 at 1:16 pm #203929I will be sure to remember that on the next cliffhanger.
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
June 10, 2025 at 9:24 am #203932@hybridlore @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper
NEXT CHAPTERS!!!
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 10, 2025 at 12:46 pm #203938Aww. That was sweet.
Jim seemed nicer to Jonathan before these chapters, but I guess Jonathan was hidden and Jim didn’t have to worry about the others watching.
Did the gang have something to do with Jonathan’s parents dying?
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
June 10, 2025 at 12:53 pm #203940what was sweet?
Yeah, Jim has got to look out for himself, and to him that means making sure no one thinks he’s going soft. He still is nice to Jonathan… just not in front of other people.
No, the gang was not involved in that one. They were killed because they hid Jonathan.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 10, 2025 at 12:54 pm #203941Jim giving Jonathan shoes. It was a sweet ending.
Ohh, right. But other people, maybe.
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
June 10, 2025 at 12:56 pm #203942Oh, I forgot that chapter ended there. ?
Yeah, they’ve turned in plenty of people. For Jonathan’s parents it was more Agent retaliation. We’re here to pick up the kid. You don’t have the kid? Fine, you pay for it. That sort of thing.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 10, 2025 at 1:06 pm #203944Got it.
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
June 10, 2025 at 2:49 pm #203948@hybridlore @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper
Theme song for Jonathan in current stage of arc and somewhat forward.
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 11, 2025 at 8:31 am #203958@hybridlore @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper
Chapters 12-13!!!!
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 11, 2025 at 12:42 pm #203962Aw, poor Jim. I liked this section.
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C.S.L.
June 11, 2025 at 1:10 pm #203963I know! Poor guy!
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 12, 2025 at 11:13 am #203968@hybridlore @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper
CHAPTERs 14-15!!!!!!!
And those who were seen dancing were thought to be insane by those who couldn't hear the music
June 12, 2025 at 12:57 pm #203971@ellette-giselle I was gonna sign in to comment and not just be a guest user, but turns out this computer would probably send the comments to my mom instead of me, which is probably a bad idea lol
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