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April 12, 2018 at 12:17 pm #70656
Okay, guys. I got brave and decided to share the prologue from the first draft of my fantasy novel, Substitute. Since it’s obviously the opening of the book, I want to know if you guys would keep reading. And please add grammar mistakes/rewording edits. I love your advice!!! 🙂
Here goes nothing…
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Lq-iOwj5wRlYc5BqQ2jLY4IAvQxuEbinVzTJzVQkhv4/edit
And I’ve never really used Google docs before, so could someone tell me how you can let other people suggest? I think I figured it out, but let me know.
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April 12, 2018 at 12:35 pm #70657Just requested access!!
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April 12, 2018 at 12:38 pm #70658@dekreel I don’t think you turned the sharing on, just copy and pasted the link. There’s a blue button in the top right corner that says share, and a little thing will pop up where you can add emails to share it with. And right above that (I believe in the top right but I’m not 100% sure) there’s an option to turn link sharing on. Turn it on and it’ll copy the link and turn the sharing options on. 😉
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aldarley.wordpress.comApril 12, 2018 at 1:46 pm #70660@epicaddie2 Yep, I think I figured it out now! Thanks muchly. 🙂
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April 12, 2018 at 2:25 pm #70661@ingridrd I just realized I tagged the wrong person. *facepalm* It was super early in the morning, okay? XD
I just finished reading it, and it was really good! I would totally continue reading!
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aldarley.wordpress.comApril 12, 2018 at 2:31 pm #70662Left a few comments under the username DragonFire026. Great start so far, Ingrid!
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April 12, 2018 at 2:55 pm #70664@ingridrd Oh my goodness!!! I would totaly keep reading! How could anyone put a book like that down!? I want to read the next part!!!
Um, yeah, great first chapter! Makes my first chapter sound as dry as the Sahara.
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April 12, 2018 at 6:16 pm #70669@ingridrd Yay! I’ll read it too! I just requested access 🙂
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www.jennaterese.comApril 13, 2018 at 12:17 am #70740@ingridrd The suspense! I’m so excited to read about this Jaclyn I’ve heard so much about. I really enjoyed it and would gladly keep reading. One thing, if you could add a little more about what she is feeling during the chapter, that’d be great. I can already get a good feel for the overall mood, which is excellent, (something I’m having trouble mastering myself), and I can imagine how frustrating it must be for Jaclyn to be in that situation, but a smidgen more internal diolouge might be good. I don’t know that for certain, though, you might want to play around with it a little bit. Ana sounds super cool!
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April 13, 2018 at 10:17 am #70748@that_writer_girl_99 Thanks for the feedback…very helpful!
@ariel-ashira YESS!!! Oh, I’m so glad you liked it!
@daughteroftheking Thank you kindly. And yes, those are some good points. *strokes chin*A dreamer who believes in the impossible...and dragons. (INFJ-T)
April 13, 2018 at 6:53 pm #70787@ingridrd I really like this! I would definitely keep reading. 😀
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