I Wrote This

[Anne of Lothlorien]

So,this is for songs that you’ve written, and when you want to put the words.
Here’s some lyrics to a song I just wrote. Unfortunately, you can’t hear me sing it, which is too bad, because I flatter myself I do it well, but here’s the words. This is the first one I’ve done, so it might sound weird to you. And don’t read it like a poem, cause then some of the words that fit the melody won’t fit in the rhythm of a poem

When the day is done
And you think you’ve won
And all you want it rest
When you’ve had your fill
And your world is still
And you think you gave your best
You must remember that there’s battles yet to fight
You must remmeber that the war doesn’t end tonight
You must remember that our battlefield is this thing that we call life
You must remember

Don’t neglect your sword
Don’t forget His word
Or what He says to do
When your strength is spent
Or when your content
Is when the enemy conquers you
You must remember and ask Him to help you through
You must remember to take a stand and fight for truth
You must remember that with God as your Captain you can never lose
You must remember

When your guard is down
When you’re on the ground
Is when your foe will strike
It’s when you need the grace
To complete the race
To rise again and fight
You must remember and have courage to press on
You must remember it’s not over till we’ve won
You must remember that we fight in the name of out Father’s only Son
You must remember

Like it? Obviously the name is You Must Remember. @Daeus @hope @writefury @jess @the-bean @corissa-maiden-of-praise @Bluejay @Mark-Kamibaya @kate-flournoy @emma-flournoy @anna-brie @anne-swiftblade @his-instrument @winter-rose @sarah-h @ethryndal

ENFP - "One must be sane to think clearly, but one can think deeply and be quite insane."

[Hope Ann]

Love it, @anne-of-Lothlorien

INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.

[Emma Flournoy]

@Anne-of-Lothlorien If I were reading it as a poem, I think cadence of several lines would need tweaking. But since you said not to read it as a poem, since it’s got a tune and so will fit differently (did you compose the tune yourself?), I like it. 🙂 Since I don’t know the tune, I can’t say whether any of those lines’ cadence ought to be changed around or not—too bad I can’t hear you sing it. 😉 I did see a couple typos, so if you want me to tell you, tell me. 😀

[Anonymous]

@Anne-of-Lothlorien Wow. I love it. Great job. 🙂

[Jess]

@anne-of-lothlorien, I really like this. I wish I could hear you sing it! 😉

[SleepwalkingMK]

@anne-of-lothlorien This is so good. I love it! Such a good reminder. I really wish we could hear you sing it now 🙂
I actually had a phase two years ago in which songs were all I wrote 😛 They were horrible though, some with a bit of mixed up theology, some what I called “rap” or “spoken word” (still awful), and some just poems I called songs xD
I haven’t really written a song with words since then, but I love doing parodies 😀

Read to explore worlds, write to create them.

[Mark Kamibaya]

@anne-of-lothlorien

I love songwriting! I think that what you have is pretty awesome. But a difference in rhyme scheme or meter might help. In order for you to not bore your audience then you have to have variety. Repetition too, but most people already have a good deal of that. So variety.

I blog on story and spiritual things at mkami.weebly.com

[Anne of Lothlorien]

@Mark-Kamibaya Yah, I thought of that and am working on it, but I can’t come up with anything else. Ideas?

ENFP - "One must be sane to think clearly, but one can think deeply and be quite insane."

[Mark Kamibaya]

@anne-of-lothlorien Pop over to the How to write song lyrics thread. Variety can be achievedin many ways including irregular meter, different line lengths, and close rhymes.

I blog on story and spiritual things at mkami.weebly.com

[Hannah R.]

@anne-of-lothlorien I wish we could get together and jam sometime. I love writing songs. Your lyrics look great! If you’d like to read some of mine sometime I’d be happy to share them.

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[ClaireC]

@anne-of-lothlorien,
I wrote words to one of my pieces for my fast-approaching piano exam. The words are based off a movie my sisters and I made. The music was our theme song at the time, but it only instrumental. 🙂

In those past days,
we used to lie in pastures green,
And we stayed, by the flowing stream,
there we played.
We never knew those dark days,
and we sang, sang, praise to our King,
And we sang, praise to our king.

When the dark mists came,
We didn’t know what to do,
But our Savior stayed,
and pulled us through,
He gave us bright days,
and we sang, sang, praise to our King,
And we sang, praise to our king.

Instrumental

Now in these days,
we lie in pastures green
and we stay, by the flowing stream,
there we play.
We never know those dark days,
and we sing, sing, praise to our King,
And we sing, praise to our king.

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