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    Gracie J.
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      So, I don’t actually need a “critique” for this story, since I’ve already published it…but I do want to know what y’all think of it. Do you want to read more? What questions do you want answered? What did you like the most/the least?

      Anyway, it’s only 799 words long, so it’s nothing big or anything. Just curious. *shrugs* Read at your own risk, I guess.

      Here she is, mates: https://docs.google.com/document/d/107d5FdW7LIZB1klU-2anu5S9uxzQpIAJpg7i48qgJHk/edit?usp=sharing

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      #89971
      Issabelle Perry
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        @gracie-j

        AAAAHHHH!!!!!! This story sounds SUPER EPIC!!! I’m just sooo intrigued!!! I DEFINITELY wanna know more about the girl and these Guardians and stuff. They seem like nasty business. XD I’d also like to know some more about the one telling the story. I’m drawn in and would totally keep on reading if there was more to the story!!!!!! 800 words just isn’t satisfying enough for me, girl. XD AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME JOB!!!!!!!!

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        #89973
        Linyang Zhang
        @devastate-lasting
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          @gracie-j Ooh I love it! Your imagery is beautiful! I’m like really interested in every single one of the characters which you presented! I do want to read more! I especially want to know more about the relationship between the Guardian guy and the person in the water. Really nice job!

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          Would you mind letting me know
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          #89974
          Abigail.M.
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            @gracie-j

            Wow, I love your writing style! And your descriptions, I was hooked from beginning to end.
            What I like most was the mystical sense about everything and it was really interesting/cool, the POV you chose.

            And CONGRATULATIONS on publishing it!

            #89991
            Gracie J.
            @gracie-j
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              @issawriter7 Aw, thank you! At the moment, I’m as curious as you! XD


              @devastate-lasting
              I’m so glad you liked it! Thank you!


              @abigail-m
              Thank you!! I had a ton of fun writing from the Siren’s POV!

              the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

              #89996
              Anonymous
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                @gracie-j

                I loved your tone, and I LOVED all the description. Ambrosia is such a pretty name, too! *wishing I had an unusual name like Ambrosia*

                I really wanna know more about those Guardians, especially.

                #90003
                Gracie J.
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                  @joy-caroline It is a pretty name, isn’t it? Hey, I only know one other Joy, so I’d say your name isn’t too common either! And it’s so beautiful!

                  Thank you! 🙂

                  the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

                  #90074
                  Anonymous
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                    @gracie-j

                    Aww, thanks! Though I’ve always preferred my middle name because it was chosen after my Grandmother (dad’s side). I loved her a lot, though I didn’t really know her for very long.

                    No prob! 😄

                    #90106
                    Gracie J.
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                      @joy-caroline That’s so sweet! 🙂 Your first and middle name together is such a beautiful combination!

                      the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

                      #90126
                      E. K. Seaver
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                        That was really interesting. I didn’t love the style, but I would read more.

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                        #90131
                        Gracie J.
                        @gracie-j
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                          @e-k-seaver Thanks! What didn’t you like about the style?

                          the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

                          #90135
                          Anonymous
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                            @gracie-j

                            Aww, thank you!

                            #90141
                            E. K. Seaver
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                              @gracie-j, it’s incredibly flowery. While I enjoy writing in that style occasionally, I really am not a fan of reading it.

                              The pen is mightier than the sword, but in a duel, I'm taking the sword.
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                              #90143
                              Gracie J.
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                                @joy-caroline You’re welcome! 🙂


                                @e-k-seaver
                                Gotcha!

                                the resident romance ghost; last seen within the pages of a gothic novel

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