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January 23, 2021 at 3:22 pm #89969Anonymous
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So, I don’t actually need a “critique” for this story, since I’ve already published it…but I do want to know what y’all think of it. Do you want to read more? What questions do you want answered? What did you like the most/the least?
Anyway, it’s only 799 words long, so it’s nothing big or anything. Just curious. *shrugs* Read at your own risk, I guess.
Here she is, mates: https://docs.google.com/document/d/107d5FdW7LIZB1klU-2anu5S9uxzQpIAJpg7i48qgJHk/edit?usp=sharing
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January 23, 2021 at 3:34 pm #89971@gracie-j
AAAAHHHH!!!!!! This story sounds SUPER EPIC!!! I’m just sooo intrigued!!! I DEFINITELY wanna know more about the girl and these Guardians and stuff. They seem like nasty business. XD I’d also like to know some more about the one telling the story. I’m drawn in and would totally keep on reading if there was more to the story!!!!!!Β
800 words just isn’t satisfying enough for me, girl. XDΒAWESOME AWESOME AWESOME JOB!!!!!!!!- This reply was modified 3 years, 11 months ago by Issabelle Perry.
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TeenWritersNook.comJanuary 23, 2021 at 4:10 pm #89973@gracie-j Ooh I love it! Your imagery is beautiful! I’m like really interested in every single one of the characters which you presented! I do want to read more! I especially want to know more about the relationship between the Guardian guy and the person in the water. Really nice job!
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
If hours don't turn into daysJanuary 23, 2021 at 4:22 pm #89974@gracie-j
Wow, I love your writing style! And your descriptions, I was hooked from beginning to end.
What I like most was the mystical sense about everything and it was really interesting/cool, the POV you chose.And CONGRATULATIONS on publishing it!
January 23, 2021 at 8:39 pm #89991Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@issawriter7 Aw, thank you! At the moment, I’m as curious as you! XD
@devastate-lasting I’m so glad you liked it! Thank you!
@abigail-m Thank you!! I had a ton of fun writing from the Siren’s POV!January 23, 2021 at 8:50 pm #89996Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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I loved your tone, and I LOVED all the description. Ambrosia is such a pretty name, too! *wishing I had an unusual name like Ambrosia*
I really wanna know more about those Guardians, especially.
January 23, 2021 at 9:08 pm #90003Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@joy-caroline ItΒ is a pretty name, isn’t it? Hey, I only know one other Joy, so I’d say your name isn’t too common either! And it’s so beautiful!
Thank you! π
January 23, 2021 at 11:07 pm #90074Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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Aww, thanks! Though I’ve always preferred my middle name because it was chosen after my Grandmother (dad’s side). I loved her a lot, though I didn’t really know her for very long.
No prob! π
January 24, 2021 at 10:39 am #90106Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@joy-caroline That’s so sweet! π Your first and middle name together is such a beautiful combination!
January 24, 2021 at 2:01 pm #90126That was really interesting. I didn’t love the style, but I would read more.
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ekseaver.wordpress.comJanuary 24, 2021 at 2:13 pm #90131Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@e-k-seaver Thanks! What didn’t you like about the style?
January 24, 2021 at 2:15 pm #90135Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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Aww, thank you!
January 24, 2021 at 2:26 pm #90141@gracie-j, it’s incredibly flowery. While I enjoy writing in that style occasionally, I really am not a fan of reading it.
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ekseaver.wordpress.comJanuary 24, 2021 at 2:31 pm #90143Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@joy-caroline You’re welcome! π
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