Ellen [Short Story]

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  • March 11, 2017 at 8:10 am #27589
    Gracie
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      There were a couple near rhyming words near the beginning. By themselves they don!t real rhyme but when read in the sentences you just get this sense of flow.

      I force a smile onto my trembling lips and peak my head through the door. Inside, white hospital walls surround a white bed, on a white floor, but all that disappears as my gaze settles upon her.

      Now, that I go through and read it again I’m having trouble finding any real instances. ? Maybe I just imagined it in the first place. ? Anyway, it’s a great story!

      *is probably geeking out about something*

      March 11, 2017 at 9:29 am #27593
      Emma Flournoy
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        @Abigail-Blomberg Wonderful. 😀

        March 11, 2017 at 11:31 am #27614
        AbigailRose
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          @gracie-girl Oh that’s funny! I’m glad that it flows well. 🙂

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