Clearest Rivers | A poem I wrote

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    -GRCR-
    @grcr
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      Hi there!

      I was looking for something to share on here, and my mom said I should share some of my poems… so here is one.

      This one, called Clearest Rivers, is one of my favorites that I’ve written. I’d love to know how you all interpret it!

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      Watch the rivers slowly flow,

      While all around us grows,

      The clearest rivers match our lives,

      We’ll show you who we are inside.

       

      Follow the rivers around the bend,

       Take my hand and be my friend,

      If our country goes insane,

      The clearest rivers still remain.

       

      Clearest rivers, take me to the waves,

      Clearest rivers, a hungry heart craves,

      Clearest rivers, under the sky of trees,

      Clearest rivers, running with the breeze.

       

      Yet, when the rivers reach the sea,

      We do not feel as strong, as free,

      Even if our country goes insane,

      The clearest rivers will still remain.

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      “What be a cretin?”
      “Of course you wouldn’t know. It’s a… bread you put in salad.”

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      HighScribe
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        @grcr

        Wow! That’s beautiful! I love the imagery!

         

        It's harder to make a square evil than it is a triangle.

        Annoying side character of the KP cast.

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        @grcr
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          @highscribeofaetherium

           

          Thank you! 😊

          “What be a cretin?”
          “Of course you wouldn’t know. It’s a… bread you put in salad.”

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          Allison
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            @grcr

            I really like your poem! So the way I see it is basically the last two lines you wrote,

            “Even if our country goes insane,

            The clearest rivers will still remain.”

            So kind of like even if our country goes insane, the clearest rivers (people?) still remain?

            If I totally did not understand it, dont worry I do not know if I am the best at this so… yeah, dont really listen to my opinion😁. Its an amazing poem that sounds amazing when you read it, the words sound great they way they are placed! 😊 Thanks for sharing and please tag me if you post any more!

             

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            @grcr
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              @acancello

               

              Yes! You got it! *squeaks in pure joy*

              The rivers represent stable-minded people.

              I’m glad you like it, and I will definitely tag you! 😆

              “What be a cretin?”
              “Of course you wouldn’t know. It’s a… bread you put in salad.”

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              Allison
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                @grcr

                Great! Thank you!

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                @grcr
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                  @acancello

                   

                  No problem! (Sorry this is late. I didn’t get notified that you responded lol)

                  “What be a cretin?”
                  “Of course you wouldn’t know. It’s a… bread you put in salad.”

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