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September 11, 2021 at 3:24 pm #104403
@elfwing It’s awesome! I love the characters already. Love the name Faeda!!
Ah, thanks. *wipes sweat from forehead* Oh, that sounds like an awesome job! XD So lucky!
staring at the fields
if nothing's really real
i'll make the winter now my homeSeptember 11, 2021 at 3:35 pm #104405@scripter-of-kingdoms haha thanks!! Faeda is taken from the Gaelic word for brave, and sathor is from punjabi and means steady. Tyroll is… um, a spin off the the name tyrell which means stubborn mule/horse XD sathor is romanian and means griffon/serpent
yeah, I know, I’m gonna be too spoiled by the end; I’m nannying a child who pretty much occupies himself playing and stays where I can see him so I try to keep myself really busy with cleaning and stuff to make sure I’m not sitting on my duff half the day, but cleaning the house everyday is a waste of cleaner XD
i want ot start my way toward publishing some of my work.
I’m actually compiling a small book of poetry and short stories and hope to publish it at some near point in the future
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September 11, 2021 at 7:17 pm #104409@elfwing Oooh, that’s super cool. I love all the meanings behind their names!!
Oh, wow XD he sounds very calm and easy to watch! LOL. So lucky, I wish I had that kind of time XD
oh my word! I’d love to see you get published! And can I know more about this poetry and short story collection? 😉 I love poetry, so this really interests me!! :DDD
staring at the fields
if nothing's really real
i'll make the winter now my homeSeptember 11, 2021 at 7:23 pm #104410@scripter-of-kingdoms haha thank you! i love making up names but Balar was too perfect to pass up lol
yeah he is, he occupies himself with the two dogs and dirt and toys for hours XD
ooo glad you’re interested! here’s the first poem in the book; it’s special because it’s the first one I’ve ever finished outside of school assignments.
it’s a song/poem and the patterns are a little wonky, perhaps, but it’s my baby and I can’t bring myself to change now lol
The Cry of Sea
(From The Forgotten World series, book 1)
A sky of scarlet, a sea of tears.
The cloven helm and broken sword.
Bitter the sting of loves parted and cruel, man’s fears.
The heart of the warrior is strong.
The warriors courage is unbroken,
but the dawn is short, the night is long.
The battle of the courageous is not in vain,
the home of the brave has been saved.
The lament of our warriors and their pain.
the sky, its tears are falling
but the sun is bright in the west
and the white gulls are calling.
never forget, always remember,
the cries of the gulls,
the warm of spring comes after winter.
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September 11, 2021 at 9:57 pm #104419Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@e-k-seaver I could be upset with you right now…but you seriously just called me spectacular, so I really can’t argue with you, now can I? XD
@elfwing Of course!(Never mind, I’mma argue…just a little bit…) There is, yes, a stigma to self-publishing, but it’s lessening more and more every day as people realize that a lot of self-published novels are just as good (if not better) than traditionally-published novels. Do get a good cover, yes, but don’t feel like you have to go for the most expensive one. I’ve seen covers that cost upwards of $400 that basically scream self-published…and I’ve seen $100 covers with the same quality as a traditionally published book’s cover. Do your research and choose the designer that is best for you!
September 11, 2021 at 10:14 pm #104420@gracie-j ahh ok I see… so according to Google indie is independent publishing?
So you said fiverr has some good ones? I briefly looked on there ans i was wondering if I need to watch out for scams or anything like that….
Ugh i guess I’m paranoid, but if I’m going in its with both feet not one and i don’t want to make unnecessary mistakes 🙃
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September 12, 2021 at 8:38 am #104424Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@elfwing Indie publishing is publishing through a small press that is independent from a large publishing house or company (hence the name), whereas self-publishing is doing it all by yourself – or, well, with the help of a self-publishing platform like KDP or Draft2Digital. With indie, you get some of the same benefits of traditional publishing, but with more freedoms. For example, Enclave is an indie press. But with self-publishing, you get all the rights and control of your work, but you are responsible for promotion, editing, obtaining a cover, stuff like that.
Yes, Fiverr does have some good ones (and some not-so-good ones XD). I personally recommend Germancreative, because I’ve read several books that she designed the cover for, and they’re all beautiful, great quality, and fairly cheap! It’s less scams you’ll need to worry about and more that there are a lot of sellers on there who don’t speak/write good English. XD
No, definitely not paranoid! Ask questions, be wary, and do your research, above all!
September 12, 2021 at 5:36 pm #104434@gracie-j ok thanks! I will keep that in mind 🙂
Also, I wanted to share this scene and I hope it give some people a smile 🙂
@abigail-m @kathleenramm @keilah-h @joy-caroline @daisy-torres @scripter-of-kingdoms @anyone-else-you-think-might-enjoy-itThe day before promotion and ball came much too fast for some people, namely Sathor. He now stood fidgeting in his new clothing as Faeda inspected the side seams that she’d sewn with Tyroll’s assistance. “You need to loosen up and it’ll fit fine!”
“What do you mean loosen up?” he demanded sharply, jerking to face her. The sound of ripping fabric answered the question for him.
Faeda gasped. “Sathor! What did you do?”
Sathor groaned and tried to look at his shoulder, “I don’t know—” as he looked at the other shoulder, another tearing noise shredded the last of Faeda’s reserve. “That’s why you need to loosen up! You’ve ripped it!”
She huffed and muttered to herself as she jerked his arm so he faced her, then she inspected his sleeve, standing on a little stool so she could actually look at his shoulder. “Where is it—”
Sathor sighed, raising his hand to scratch his head, and another tearing noise made him jump, resulting in another.
“Sathor!” Faeda wailed.
“It’s not me!” Sathor protested.
“I know you don’t want to go, but seriously!” she muttered, going on her tiptoes to inspect his collar. “Where is the tear?”
He sighed, then breathed in deep and held it. Another tearing noise. He let out the breath with a roar; “Stop it!”
Faeda lost her balance at the sudden outburst and tottered off the stool with a yelp. Sathor caught her arm and a massive shredding noise exploded.
Sathor stood up and looked around, and reached the seat of his pants, absolute mortification and confusion on his face.
Then came a howl of laughter and as Sathor jerked around to see, another shredding noise came. Sathor’s confusion turned to anger. “Tyroll Etten Rouronon! I’m going to turn you into a pate! Get your backside over here before I kick it!”
Tyroll stumbled out of the closet a couple feet away, tears streaming down his face as he held up the old sack, torn to pieces. “You— should have— you should have seen your face!” he howled, clapping his hands and stumbling toward the door to leave.
“You won’t be able to use yours when I’m done!” Sathor shouted, and then charged at Tyroll.
Tyroll’s eyes widened. “Oh boy.” he darted through the door, just dodging Sathor’s swipe at his shirt collar.
Sathor stopped and turned to Faeda, but she was laying on the floor.
“Faeda!” he knelt by her. “Faeda, I’m so sorry I dropped you! Are you alright?”
Faeda stared at him with a blank expression, then burst into giggles. “Yes, Sathor, I’m fine.” She stood and then hugged him. “You’re a great friend.”
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An hour before the ceremony, Sathor was finally ready. He was so nervous he was jittery. Faeda met him in the door of the school hall, and they did their handshake.
Faeda turned in a full circle. “What do you think?”
Sathor tipped his head to one side, and then smiled slightly. “You look great.”
Faeda grinned, then nodded to him. “You look great.”
“I don’t know… the shirt still feels a little tight…” Sathor raised his arms slowly, as if still unsure. A slow deliberate shredding sounded from the doorway, and Sathor exploded. “Tyroll Etten Dornod Ross Sadern Rouronon!”
When people used Tyroll’s full name, they meant business.
Tyroll’s eyes widened and he dropped the sack, looking from Sathor to Faeda.
Faeda scoffed and waved a hand at him. “Don’t look at me, you asked for it!”
Tyroll groaned.
Sathor crossed his arms, “I’ll make it quick, don’t worry. I’ll count down from five once you leave my range of vision.”
Tyroll was gone before Sathor finished talking.
Faeda stifled laughter and stood outside the door to see the action about to ensue. Tyroll was standing in the middle of the courtyard, looking a little worried; there wasn’t really anywhere to go where Sathor wouldn’t find him. He darted toward a tree, out of sight from the doorway.
Faeda looked at her fingers, counting down with Sathor;
“Five. Four. Three. Two. One.”
- This reply was modified 3 years, 1 month ago by Elfwing.
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September 12, 2021 at 6:11 pm #104437I’m so sorry, I saw you tagged me the first time but I forgot to look XD
Girlll I love thiss!! I’m honestly super hooked now! It wasn’t overly dramatic at all!
One thing that did stick out a bit was her friend’s eyes ‘seemed to glow an unearthly white’. I’m not sure if that’s literal or figurative haha. Other than that though I loved it!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
September 12, 2021 at 6:14 pm #104438@elfwing I seriously love that poem, too!! It really transports me back to another time and makes me think of battles and sailors and warriors and just– ehjwajewk I love itttt!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
September 12, 2021 at 6:17 pm #104439And that before-the-ball scene was fantastic too XD It made me giggle. Thanks for sharing!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
September 12, 2021 at 6:21 pm #104441@daisy-torres thanks!!
oh the glowing is literal and is explained later 😉
and I’m so so glad you like the poem! makes me happy! 🙂
and I’m glad you liked that scene, it was fun to write
- This reply was modified 3 years, 1 month ago by Elfwing.
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September 12, 2021 at 6:58 pm #104443@elfwing I’m honestly hooked!! Let me know if you ever want a proofreader XD
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
September 12, 2021 at 6:59 pm #104444@daisy-torres uh, yes please!!! when would you do that, after the beta readers are done I assume?
I'm 'a homeschooler' because cookie-making writing artistic animal-whisperer isn't a job title
September 12, 2021 at 7:19 pm #104445I use the term “proofreader” because I haven’t really done the research on what the different stages are called XD Here’s a helpful article that I just found on Beta Readers though! These are the first people who go in and make suggestions, point out inconsistencies, characters acting odd, where they felt like skimming, etc. This is also what I’m volunteering to do, but I labeled it wrong XD
i don’t know this stuff yet- This reply was modified 3 years, 1 month ago by Daisy Torres.
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
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