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    Keilah H.
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      I like it so far. I’m not super immersed in the world yet, but that’s cause I have no idea what the world is, and whether these characters are human or something else.

      A short section like the one at the beginning of Wingfeather Saga might suffice, the one that introduces the world of Aerwiar and the continent of Skree with its towns.

      "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

      #201524
      Ellette Giselle
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        @linus-smallprint

         

        AHH!!! NO!!!

        I never saw this!!!!!

        I was snooping on someone’s profile and tracked a comment down here and that’s how I found it!!! Ugh. KP! I’ll look at this as soon as I can. I try to respond to everything I get tagged for, so if I don’t respond it;’s because I didn’t get the tag.

        Fires will rise to testify that 2+2=4. Swords will be drawn to prove that leaves are green in summer

        #201525
        Ellette Giselle
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          It says access is denied. Is there any way you can let me on? My Microsoft email is

          rosewood.debate658@passinbox.com

           

           

          Fires will rise to testify that 2+2=4. Swords will be drawn to prove that leaves are green in summer

          #201532
          Linus Smallprint
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            @ellette-giselle

            Okay, I added you. Check your email, it may have went to your spam. It will be from my hotmail account (I have way too many email addresses)

            Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

            #201534
            Linus Smallprint
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              @keilah-h

              I like it so far. I’m not super immersed in the world yet, but that’s cause I have no idea what the world is, and whether these characters are human or something else.

              The only intelligent species in this world is humans. My sister wouldn’t write a book with any other intelligent species in.

              A short section like the one at the beginning of Wingfeather Saga might suffice, the one that introduces the world of Aerwiar and the continent of Skree with its towns.

              Okay. I will suggest it to her and see what she thinks.

              Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

              #201535
              Ellette Giselle
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                @linus-smallprint

                Haha, says the guy talking to the lady with 16!

                 

                Thanks, I got it.

                Fires will rise to testify that 2+2=4. Swords will be drawn to prove that leaves are green in summer

                #201538
                Linus Smallprint
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                  @ellette-giselle

                  Haha, says the guy talking to the lady with 16!

                  Nice! I only have had 9 in total.

                  Thanks, I got it.

                  Your welcome! Thank you for volunteering to read it!

                  Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                  #201539
                  Ellette Giselle
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                    @linus-smallprint

                    Of course! I only wish I’d seen it sooner.

                    Fires will rise to testify that 2+2=4. Swords will be drawn to prove that leaves are green in summer

                    #201541
                    Linus Smallprint
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                      @ellette-giselle

                      Of course! I only wish I’d seen it sooner.

                      No worries. It’s not your fault if Kingdom Pen decided not to notify you.

                      Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                      #201587
                      Keilah H.
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                        @linus-smallprint okay, cool!

                        "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

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                        Linus Smallprint
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                          @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @grcr @the_lost-journal @hybridlore @theducktator @stephie

                          Hey, are any of you still reading through my sister’s book?

                          Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

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                          Ellette Giselle
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                            @linus-smallprint

                            I’m so sorry, I have been swamped. I kept trying, but i just haven’t got the time right now.

                            Fires will rise to testify that 2+2=4. Swords will be drawn to prove that leaves are green in summer

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                            Three Ducks in a Trench Coat
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                              @linus-smallprint

                              Oh no, I completely forgot about that! I’m still interested; it just got lost in the last few weeks of school.

                              This land is my land, this land is your land, looks like one of us has a forged deed to this land

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                              Linus Smallprint
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                                @ellette-giselle

                                Understandable. With the weddings and grad’s you’ve had, I know it can be hard to find the time.

                                Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

                                #203733
                                Three Ducks in a Trench Coat
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                                  @linus-smallprint

                                  The link won’t let me on for some reason.

                                  This land is my land, this land is your land, looks like one of us has a forged deed to this land

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