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March 2, 2021 at 1:37 am #94609
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-vbhn_QpzMJ_xlGO1Sb6epYzGJIB0HY55BwPVctj3Dk/edit?usp=drivesdk
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After this I’m planning on putting up one more chapter. Thank you to everyone who stuck with me on this!! I’m so grateful to y’all!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 2, 2021 at 8:07 am #94621Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@daisy-torres First, love your new tagline! Second, I’m still reading Chapter 3, so I’ll get to this as soon as I can! I absolutely love this story!!!
March 2, 2021 at 10:19 am #94631@gracie-j Thank you!! I’m trying to make myself write a haiku a day, but I always end up forgetting, so I’m going to try doing this for ten days and see if it helps lol.
That makes me really happy to hear you say that!! I’ve loved writing it so far!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 2, 2021 at 10:42 am #94633……… I think this was the best chapter so far…….. SOOO goooood, but really sad!! And I adore the description and suspense. You also used all 5 senses, which brought the chapter to a whole other level. The mystery, intrigue, beauty… I’m sooo ready for the next chapter!! 💛💛💛 (is that going to be the last one? that’s so sad! 😭)
what we do in life echoes in eternity
-gladiator, 2000March 2, 2021 at 11:03 am #94634@daisy-torres I’ll try to get to this today!
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
If hours don't turn into daysMarch 2, 2021 at 11:19 am #94639@nova21 Awww thank youuu!!! That literally makes me sooo happyy. Honestly, I don’t mind sharing more chapters, I just don’t want to fill the critique forum with a whole novel loll. If you want though, I could just share it to my home page? Idk, I just don’t want people to open up the novel critique section and see nothing but my book XD
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 2, 2021 at 11:20 am #94640@devastate-lasting Yay!! Take your time though <3
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 2, 2021 at 1:50 pm #94656Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@daisy-torres WHAT????????????? GURL!!!!!!!! I NEED MORE! This is fantabulous! I love the story, Tessa, the imagery–all of it is SO beautiful!!! Do we get to read the next chapter? Do we? Do we??? I can’t wait!!!!!
March 2, 2021 at 2:18 pm #94661@gracie-j THANK YOUU!!! That makes me so happyyy!!! Yes! I’m working on it now!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 2, 2021 at 3:01 pm #94667@daisy-torres And done! I loved it, per usual.
Lately, it's been on my brain
Would you mind letting me know
If hours don't turn into daysMarch 2, 2021 at 3:11 pm #94669@devastate-lasting Thank you so much!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
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