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Hey guys,
This a poem I wrote a couple weeks ago about an experience in my life. Enjoy, critique, and give me a good title!!!For many years I’ve known;
We aren’t supposed to fear
I’d heard of “perfect love”
But never let it come so nearFear, as a matter of course;
Was a decision-making force“How would it look?”
“What would others think”
Were important questions in my bookThen, one day, I decided to see
What “perfect love casts out fear” really means
I looked up the verse, 1 John 4:18
And a whole new world was opened to meBecause of God’s love
I don’t have to be afraid?
That’s exactly what it said.
Fear is pure torment
Yes, I’d been there before
But from to forever
I’m not going there anymoreNow I know I can be free
After all these long years
Never again, do I have to be
Locked inside my fearsWow! I loved your poem. I am really bad at writing poetry, so I really admire those who can. As to titles- *rubs hands together*
Perfect Love
Breaking Free
No Fear in Love
Casting out Fear
1 John 4:18
Because of God’s Love
Love verses Fear
God is Love
Well, that’s all I can think of off the top of my head. 🙂Great job! 🙂 One correction I’d make in the opening verse to make it flow a little smoother:
For many years I’ve known;
We aren’t supposed to fear
I’d heard of “perfect love”
But never let it come so nearI’d add in a “that” in the second line so it’s “That we aren’t supposed to fear.” Just helps the rhythm to have that extra beat there. 🙂
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